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Quoron Vizsla's New Arm

- - - - - Quoron Vizsla Tal Vizsla Mandalorian Dont lose it next time

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Tal Vizsla

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OUT OF CHARACTER INFORMATION

  • Intent: A new arm for Quoron Vizsla
  • Image Source: N/A
  • Canon Link: N/A
  • Restricted Missions: None (Unique)
  • Primary Source: Cybernetics

PRODUCTION INFORMATION
  • Manufacturer: Tal Vizsla (Mandalorian Empire)
  • Model: N/A
  • Affiliation: Quoron Vizsla
  • Modularity: None
  • Production: Unique
  • Material: Bes'kar, Carbon, Energy Cells, Electronics

TECHNICAL SPECIFICATIONS
  • Classification: Armored Prosthetic Limb
  • Weight: Heavy
  • Resistances

Arm

- Blasters (And other plasma type weapons): Very High

- Kinetic: High

- Lightsabers: High

- EMP/ION: Average

- Sonic: High

- Elemental (Heat): High

- Elemental (Electricity): Average

- Elemental (Cold): Low


Shield

- Blasters (and other plasma type weapons): High

- Kinetic: Average

- Lightsabers: Average

- EMP/ION: Low

- Sonic: Average

- Elemental (Heat): High

- Elemental (Electricity): Low

- Elemental (Cold): None


SPECIAL FEATURES
  • Bes'kar Construction
  • Standard Comlink
  • Hyperwave Comlink
  • Holoprojector
  • Buckler Shield Generator

Strengths:
  • Durable: Well, it IS made of bes'kar.
  • Strong: See above. Comparable strength to Crushgaunts.
  • Shielded: Both from EMP/Ion/Electrical attacks, and via the built-in generator (when active)

Weaknesses:
  • High Carbon, Very High Carbon: The ratio of bes'kar to carbon has been skewed in favor of lightness, rendering it less durable vs lightsabers than standard quality bes'kar.
  • Don't Go Touching The Power Couplings: While the arm itself is resistant to electrical damage, the synthetic nerve bundles used to control it still connect to Quoron's natural nervous system and will channel electricity straight to them if the arm is struck near the shoulder. Feedback's a bitch.
  • Easy On The Defense: While the energy shield itself is nearly impervious to personal weaponsfire, the emitter will overheat with prolonged use and force a shutdown (potentially mid-combat if Quoron isn't careful).

DESCRIPTION:

Quoron got his arm lopped off, so Tal built him a new one. A better one. One forged in fire and decked out with cool gadgets. Like this here buckler shield generator. Ain't she a beauty? Fully adjustable to any size between 10 cm and 1 meter in diameter, and capable of taking one helluva beating. It'll stop everything from lightsabers and blasters to kinetic slugs and sonic blasts. Just watch out for overheating. Using it too much will force a mandatory cooling shutdown that will take it out of commission for several minutes and force it into cooldown mode. It can absorb half a dozen solid strikes from a lightsaber, five times that number of slugs or sonic blasts, and ten times as many standard power blaster bolts before triggering the cooldown. Watch out for Ion weapons though, it'll only take two or three hits from those to overheat and force it into cooldown.


Other useful knick-knacks include the fully encrypted comm systems that let Quoron keep in contact with his naval forces no matter where he may be, and the nifty holoprojector for all those times when using words just won't quite get the picture across. Oh, and it's made of Bes'kar. Very high carbon bes'kar though, in order to keep it as light as possible. It's still a fair bit heavier than a flesh and blood arm and will take some getting used to, but once he's got the hang of it it shouldn't slow him down too much.

Edited by Tal Vizsla, 19 February 2018 - 10:35 AM.


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Lily Kuhn

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Under Review.


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Lily Kuhn

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It'll stop everything from lightsabers and blasters to kinetic slugs and sonic blasts. Even electricity can't penetrate this sucker.

This needs to go. I am not approving a submission without a valid weakness, and right now this compensates for every weakness in your submission and even trumps your strengths. This also isn't reflected by the ratings for resistances.

 

Easy On The Defense: While the energy shield itself is nearly impervious to personal weaponsfire, the emitter will overheat with prolonged use and force a shutdown (potentially mid-combat if Quoron isn't careful).

Given the following:

Using it too much inside a 30 minute window will force a mandatory cooling shutdown that will take it out of commission for up to an hour.

I do not believe that your weakness is portraying its capabilities accurately.

 

Blasters (And other plasma type weapons): Very High

- Kinetic: High

- Lightsabers: High

- EMP/ION: High

- Elemental: High

One of these needs to be below average, nothing is resistant to everything. Energy shields in particular are not resistant to ion damage, that goes against canon and the entire purpose of ion weapons.

 

Using it too much inside a 30 minute window will force a mandatory cooling shutdown that will take it out of commission for up to an hour.

Given how much of a resistance to damage you're looking for, giving a 30 minute window before the shield is shut off for an hour is far too overpowered. You can change to "Taking too much damage will force the shield into a mandatory cooling shutdown for up to [insert your desired time here]", as an example, but giving a beskar arm an energy shield that is more or less capable of doing exactly what the beskar arm can, like a second layer of armor on top of the beskar itself, is too much. 


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Tal Vizsla

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I've edited to differentiate entirely between shield durability and arm durability. Sorry for not being clear enough the first time. I also set specific limits to the shield's durability vs the standard damage types, and shortened the recharge time to a couple minutes (short enough that it's not totally useless once it goes down in a longer thread but long enough that once it's down in a fight it won't be coming back up until it's over).

 

Thoughts?

 

Nadja Keto



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Lily Kuhn

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Tal Vizsla

If you change your lightsaber resistance to average for the shield then the wording you've changed it to will be more accurate, otherwise change the amount of hits it will be able sustain from lightsabers to something less exact, but also less quantitative, such as "several strikes".


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Tal Vizsla

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Nadja Keto

Edited.

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Lily Kuhn

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Approved.


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