Posted 12 April 2018 - 03:38 PM
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Posted 15 April 2018 - 10:43 AM
Khonsu Amon As far as *constructive* criticism goes, I think you've nailed it on the head. Don't get me wrong - I don't think long posts are inherently a problem, and if you're writing a thread with someone who enjoys it like you do, GO FOR IT! I have a couple people I basically write novels with and both people involved prefer it!
But I think it's difficult in an invasion/rebellion/dominion setting where it's not everyone's cup of tea. It's difficult for me to say "stop it", because I read your posts and see passion for the details of your world. But I think, if you're asking for suggestions, mine would be this: write your post the way you always would (as long as that doesn't take you 8 hours) and then read it back and trim the fat. Decide what's truly necessary in a public space, what you REALLY want people to know or that they NEED to know, and nix the rest. That's what I started doing and it was intensely helpful, since I suffer from the same E N T H U S I A S M lol!
But I think what I really want to say is that I've always appreciated the depth you build in to your concepts, and how fully realized you make something through your small, intricate details. My suggestion is a small one, better suited to tailoring to largely public spaces rather than your writing in general. I think overall the site is lucky to have your writing, and I'm digging for a critique since you asked for one.
Edited by Matsu Xiangu, 15 April 2018 - 10:45 AM.
Posted 15 April 2018 - 03:50 PM
You know I love giving you a hard time over the length of your posts, but all the jokes aside I have a lot of respect for the sheer diligence and effort you put into every single post you make.
It's obvious you put thought into it.
Can't hate on that.
I'd echo Matsu Xiangu's suggestion though- it's one thing when you are writing in a private thread, where people quite literally 'sign up' for such storytelling, but it's a bit different in a more public avenue. There is a certain skill in making shorter posts that convey the same atmosphere, content, flavor and prose as a longer post would, I think it would be good to challenge yourself in that way.
A first step would most definitely be to start writing the way you would and then see where you can cut the meat into leaner pieces.
Just my additional two cents!