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Zaralax

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OUT OF CHARACTER INFORMATION

 

Intent: personal protection for Zaralax

 

Image Link: (I couldn't get a link of the picture by itself, this is the best I could do) https://www.thinkgee...m/product/irtk/

 

Canon Link: N/A

 

Primary source: N/A

PRODUCTION INFORMATION

 

Manufacturer: Zaralax

 

Model: N/A

 

Modularity: NO

 

Affiliation: Zaralax

 

Production: Unique

 

Material: Phrik outer shell, Durasteel inside

TECHNICAL SPECIFICATIONS ​

 

Classification: Multipurpose

 

Weight: Heavy

 

Resistance

 

Blasters: Very High

Kinetic: average

Lightsaber: Very High

Other: (EMP: Very Low)

 

Special features: Powered armor.

 

Strengths:

  • Phrik outer shell resist Lightsabers and blasters.
  • Powered armor state allows quick movement despite heavy weight
  • durasteel inner plaiting protects against most conventional attacks 
  • Helmet features an automatic ventilation system, flushing most gasses and replacing them with oxygen.

Weaknesses:

  • Single Fuel source on armor, one well placed attack, emp, sonic attack, etc, will make this armor a tank, tough, but really, really slow.
  • Helmet impairs vision
  • Joints are weak to concentrated fire

 

 

 

Description: As Zaralax decided to make himself more know, he needed an armor that would protect him, from both blasters and the lightsabers his jedi enemies would use. With more common materials failing to protect him from lightsabers and similar weapons, he turned to Phrik. The rare metal provided the protection he needed from lightsabers. Due to the fact that Phrik was incredible rare, he was only able to make a outer shell of Phrik, with the rest made of durasteel.


Edited by Zaralax, 14 June 2018 - 12:08 PM.


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Netherworld

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Under Review.



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Netherworld

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Zaralax

 

You're missing some Categories and Fields from the Armor template. Please add them back to your submission and fill them out appropriately.

 

Manufacturer: Chai La armory

Do you have permission from the owner of this company to use them as a Manufacturer for your armor?

If so, please provide said permission.

Alternately, you can just list the name of your character under Manufacturer, since your Production is Unique.

 

Your History section needs to be renamed to DESCRIPTION and buffed up a bit. Doesn't need much, but at least one solid paragraph is generally what we're looking for. Maybe describe how Zaralax built his power armor, why he built it, if there's any particular history behind it, etc.

 

Looks good otherwise, nicely balanced. Just make the above edits and we should be good to go. :)


Edited by Netherworld, 13 June 2018 - 06:53 PM.
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Zaralax

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Netherworld

 

Updated, sorry I'm pretty new here so I wasn't 100% sure how this all worked



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Zaralax

 

No problem, we're here to help. If you've got any additional questions ask away. :D

 

I'll still need you to add the missing items from the Armor template I linked in my previous post. I'd recommend you open your submission and the template side-by-side in two windows and add the lines that you're currently missing.



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Zaralax

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Netherworld

 

There, that should fix everything



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Netherworld

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Zaralax

I'm really sorry to be this nitpicky, but those are the rules. You're still missing the category headers – OUT OF CHARACTER INFORMATION, PRODUCTION INFORMATION and TECHNICAL SPECIFICATIONS.

Once you add those headers back in, I can stamp this. :)

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Zaralax

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Netherworld

 

There, that should do it



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Netherworld

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Awesome. Pending Secondary Approval. Thanks! Jamie Pyne



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Approved.


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