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Darth Neoplix's Sith Sword

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Intent: A standard personal weapon for Darth Neoplix
Canon Link: N/A
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Primary Source: Sith Sword
Manufacturer: Darth Neoplix
Affiliation: Darth Neoplix, Jenari Empire, Closed Market
Model: N/A
Modularity: No
Production: Unique
Material: Alchemized metal.
Classification: Sword
Size: very Large
Weight: very Heavy
SPECIAL FEATURES: Forged as a combination of the two blades Neoplix once wielded, this massive blade holds the weight and mass of two of the massive sith swords. Each of it’s twin edges is imbued with a different ability, the right side glowing white hot, and seeping flame on command to ignite his foes, while the left side seeps green smoke, and poisons whoever it may cut with a deadly sith alchemical toxin with no known antidote, which spreads through the bloodstream and causes death in mere minutes..
It’s composition as an alchemized metal makes it capable of absorbing both force energy attacks, and some ordinary attacks, such as lasers. The energy it absorbs makes it stronger, and can even be blasted back. It’s alchemical properties also allow it to slice through virtually any metal, not counting other alchemized blades/items, and songsteel, and makes it practically impervious to damage itself.
Description: Massive Konda-style blade, one side glowing red, the other green. Jagged spikes, six feet long, razor sharp.
Strengths: extremely powerful, multi use
Weaknesses: massively heavy, size prevents it from being hidden, as well as preventing it from being used in enclosed spaces.

Edited by Neoplix, 07 January 2019 - 12:48 PM.


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John Locke

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Under Review.



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Neoplix

 

Hi, this is an interesting idea for a sword with the two edges, I just had a few things I wanted to bring to your attention. 

 

while the left side seeps green smoke, and poisons whoever it may cut, causing their virtually unpreventable death within 5 minutes.

 

I would recommend that you go back to look at the language there to soften it since player character, or NPC, deaths are upto the writer so my recommendation you be to say that the poison can cause death to any cut by the edge within 5 minutes to give people an option for deciding themselves. 

 

Under material, if you could let us know which metal you used in the alchemy, it's a small thing but different metals react in different ways to different stimuli and attacks. 

 

It’s alchemical properties also allow it to slice through any metal, not counting other alchemized blades, and makes it practically impervious to damage itself.

 

There are certain metals, such as Phrik and Songsteel, that are considered to be practically indestructible so I would recommend you consider amending your text to say slice through most average or normal metals. 

 

It’s composition as an alchemized metal makes it capable of absorbing both force energy and attacks, and normal attacks, such as lasers, masers, and even sonic blasts. The energy it absorbs makes it stronger, and can even be blasted back.

 

Can you point me to a canon example of this ability, or explain it's strengths and weaknesses a little more clearly? At the moment the ability the ability to absorb the force and other attacks including sonics which we generally regarded as unblockable seems a little unbalanced and while I will approve the submission as it stands if you like I would worry that this power could be reported at a later stage leading to your submission being pulled up by the factory admin or RPJ for further review. 

 

 As always the above notes are all suggestions, and I will approve the submission as it currently stands if you wish. However, you will also have to follow the complete template, including an image source, otherwise, I can't approve this submission.

 

Please tag me back once you have reviewed this and let me know what if any changes you wish to make.



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Neoplix

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Of course. I’ll edit those in now 👍👍👍John Locke

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Neoplix

 

Thank you for making those changes. 

 

I notice you haven't added a metal but I can approve it as it is. 

 

I will, however, need you to adhere to the official template and provide an image source for the picture used. 



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Neoplix

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Google looking for the best pic I could find of megaten’s sword?

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Neoplix

 

A quick reverse google search found this website that has the picture

 

http://www.coswinner...CAC9DA730D.html



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Neoplix

 

What is the state of this submission?



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I am going to archive this submission for inactivity. If you wish to have the submission restored please contact the Factory Admin or RPJ who will reactivate it for you.



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Moved to Factory Archives - If you want to remove from the archives, please feel free to tag Gir Quee or Jairus Starvald.