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#421
Siobhan Kerrigan

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Submission Name: Eyes of the Forest

Link to Submission: http://starwarsrp.ne...-of-the-forest/
Summary of Modification: Add a piece of equipment.
Reason for Modification: The unit in question is a group of scouts, meant to be stealthy recon troops. At the time when I made the sub, I did not have any custom armour to equip them with. Thus they have generic light armour listed. I have since purchased an appropriate model which reflects their capabilities/mission in the marketplace, namely the Specter Scout Armor. Request was made here, and approved here.
Modification:

 

Replace the first line in Equipment: 'Light combat armour with sealed bodysuit, comlink (with encryption device) and rebreather, comparable in quality to Imperial scout trooper armour. Coloured to match terrain. Wear earpiece communicators with built-in translators.'

 

With this: Spectre Scout Armour. Comlink has an encryption device. Wear earpiece communicators with built-in translators.


Edited by Siobhan Kerrigan, 09 February 2018 - 06:10 PM.

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#422
Zahori Denko

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Submission Name: Commander Uvkithis

Link to Submission: http://starwarsrp.ne...ander-uvkithis/
Summary of Modification: Switching his allegiance
Reason for Modification: When Zahori left the Confederacy, her closest friends and allies left with her to the Sith Empire.
Modification:

 

Intent: A high-ranking officer of the Confederate Armed Forces

 

to

 

Intent: A high-ranking officer of the Sith-Imperial Legion

 

 

 

Loyalties: Confederacy of Independent Systems

 

to

 

Loyalties: The Sith Empire

 

 

 

Wealth: Moderate. As a high ranking officer of the CIS, he makes a pretty decent paycheck.

 

to

 

Wealth: Moderate. As a high ranking officer of the Imperial Legion, he makes a pretty decent paycheck.

 

 

 

Name: Commander Uvkithis

 

to

 

Name: Major Uvkithis

 

Also remove the banner at the top.


Edited by Zahori Denko, 10 February 2018 - 08:55 PM.

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#423
Samka Derith

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All submissions have been updated as requested.

 

Marina DeVoe, I'm afriad your submission was made through the Factory, this is the Codex's modification section:)


Edited by Samka Derith, 13 February 2018 - 01:58 PM.

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#424
Marina DeVoe

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Ah, Ok, thanks Samka Derith

 

I'll get the hang of this sooner or later. :)


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#425
Priscilla Utorna

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Submission Name: Carina LaForte

Link to Submission: Carina LaForte
Summary of Modification: Updating appearance/playby/formatting/history
Reason for Modification: To be consistent with new roleplays

Modification: Enclosed in spoiler

 


Edited by Priscilla Utorna, 05 March 2018 - 02:28 PM.

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#426
Jessica Med-Beq

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Submission name: Crown Nebula Hotel

Link to submission: http://starwarsrp.ne...n-nebula-hotel/

Summary of modification: Affiliation change, history change

Reason for Modification: The hotel is no longer run IC by Ithuvask, but by a PC

Modification:

 


Edited by Jessica Med-Beq, 25 February 2018 - 03:36 PM.


#427
Scipio Alta

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Submission Name: Stiletto Company

Link to Submission: http://starwarsrp.ne...iletto-company/
Summary of Modification: Update status of 2nd Rifle Platoon Platoon Sergeant Zoran 'Tusk' Kitic cause he died.
Reason for Modification: One of the NPCs died on Thyferra during the invasion of TSE vs. GA.
Modification: 

  • Original Section:
    • 2nd Rifle Platoon (Stiletto Two):
      • Command:
        • PL: LT Scipio Alta
        • PS: SSGT Zoran 'Tusk' Kitic
  • ​​New Section:
    • 2nd Rifle Platoon (Stiletto Two):
      • Command:
        • PL: LT Scipio Alta
        • PS: SSGT Harin Volk | Previously: SSGT Zoran 'Tusk' Kitic [KIA on Thyferra


#428
Enyo Typhos

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1.

 

Submission Name: Neda Chazzak

Link to Submission: http://starwarsrp.ne...6-neda-chazzak/
Summary of Modification:
Upgrade her a bit by giving her a repulse-hand (edits in Appearance and the Combat Function section).
Reason for Modification: ICly it represents a reward from Enyo Typhos since Neda is her chief lieutenant and has served under her for a long time and the Iron Fist Consortium has more resources now. Neda is already a cyborg, so it's not a radical change.
Modification:

 

 

 Add this line to Appearances at the end:

 

As a reward for faithful service to the Consortium, her cybernetic arm was upgraded with a repulse hand.

 

 

In Combat Function, replace this paragraph:

 

 

Like with all Eisenkrieger, her cybernetics endow her with superior speed, strength and reaction time compared to a normal soldier. Similar to a Guavian minion, she has a mechanical reservoir that acts as a second heart, injecting a combination of chemical into her bloodstream that boosts adrenaline. An advanced combat implant enhances her nervous system. Like with all Eisenkrieger, she has a brain implant that gives her instant communication with the other cyborgs. Artificial eyes give her better sight and targeting. All in all, her cybernetics give her a 1.5x performance boost.

 

 

With this: 

 

 

Like with all Eisenkrieger, her cybernetics endow her with superior speed, strength and reaction time compared to a normal soldier. Similar to a Guavian minion, she has a mechanical reservoir that acts as a second heart, injecting a combination of chemical into her bloodstream that boosts adrenaline. An advanced combat implant enhances her nervous system. Like with all Eisenkrieger, she has a brain implant that gives her instant communication with the other cyborgs. Artificial eyes give her better sight and targeting. Finally, her cybernetic arm was recently upgraded by giving it a repulse-hand, which gives her a brutal weapon in melee combat. All in all, her cybernetics give her a 1.5x performance boost.

 

 

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Submission Name: Eisenkrieger

Link to Submission: http://starwarsrp.ne...5-eisenkrieger/
Summary of Modification:
Increase Deployment from Limited to Minor, add a few pieces of gear to Equipment.
Reason for Modification: ICly the increase is a reflection of the expansion of Enyo's power base. She started out with few resources and a small gang, but several successful raids in various threads, including invasions and skirmishes, have allowed her to expand her resources. She also runs a tier 3 corporation now. Availability remains Rare, as she does not have a huge army at her disposal.
Modification:

 

 

Increase Deployment to Minor.

 

 

In Equipment, replace this paragraph:

 

Equipment: Standard blaster weapons, standard slugthrowers, scatterguns, sonic blasters, shatterguns, disruptors, vibroblades, vibroaxes, grenades, limited number of repeating blasters/missile launchers/grenade launchers. Diathim Power Armour (stolen from Archangel), Blackhide Armour, or reinforced duraplast armour.

 

 

with this:

 

 

Equipment: The Eisenkrieger have access to blaster weapons, slugthrowers, scatterguns. On a more restricted basis, shatterguns, are utilised by precision shooters. Higher-ranking members can utilise rarer ranged weapons such as disruptors, particle beam blasters and cryoban weapons. Heavy weapon specialists carry grenade launchers, missile launchers or flamethrowers, while automatic riflemen carry heavy repeating blasters. Typical melee weapons are vibroblades and vibroaxes. Aside from this, they carry grenades, thermal detonators and standard misc. gear such as medkits, grappling hooks, binoculars and so on. In terms of body armour, they wear Diathim Power Armour (stolen from Archangel), Blackhide Armour, or standard reinforced duraplast armour.


Edited by Enyo Typhos, 22 February 2018 - 04:51 AM.


#429
Kalyn Shif

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Submission Name: Aurum

Link to Submission: Link
Summary of Modification: Add mention of the Player-Made Hyperlane it sits upon
Reason for Modification: I was unaware that Aurum sat along a Hyperspace Lane, and as such I'd like to mention it in the submission itself so folks are aware :)
Modification:

 

 

  • System Features: Ner (G-Type Main Sequence Star) | Kol (Natural Satellite) | 32 Hour Rotational Period | 451 Day Orbital Period | Located in the center of the Habitable Zone | Sits along the Crusader's Way Hyperlane

Changes from the original:

 

Sits along the Crusader's Way Hyperlane - At the end of the System Features section.


Edited by Asha Hex, 19 February 2018 - 10:58 PM.

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#430
Darth Carnifex

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Submission Name: The Crownguard
Link to Submission: Click
Summary of Modification: Update their equipment
Reason for Modification: Made some new armor and found some new weapons to outfit them with
Modification:

Equipment:



#431
Darben Skirae

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Submission Name: Mia Nujik

Link to Submission: http://starwarsrp.ne...8708-mia-nujik/
Summary of Modification: To archive the NPC
Reason for Modification: The NPC has been killed
Modification: Archive


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#432
Vanessa Vantai

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Submission name: Caldera
Submission link: http://starwarsrp.ne...124842-caldera/
Reason for Modification: OOC scorn
Modification: Archive the sub, please.

#433
Helix Syndicate

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Submission Name: Helix Syndicate Processors
Link to Submission: [Here]
Summary of Modification: Unlock and move to pre-codex.
Reason for Modification: I've decided this doesn't really work with the combat unit template, so I'll be switching it over to a group template and re-writing the thing.
Modification: Unlock and move to pre-codex.


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#434
Vanessa Vantai

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Submission Name: Drey's Cortosis Mine

Link to Submission: http://starwarsrp.ne...-cortosis-mine/
Summary of Modification: Affiliation change
Reason for Modification: Affiliation has changed
Modification: Change affiliation from "Alicia Drey" to "Defiance Consolidated Multipurpose Manufacturing"


Edited by Vanessa Vantai, 05 March 2018 - 04:25 PM.


#435
Vela Kryss

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Submission Name: Lefay Flower
Link to Submission: http://starwarsrp.ne...99-lefay-flower
Reason for Modification: The character with whom the flower was affiliated will no longer be used, so with the purpose of utilizing this sub I would like to change its affiliation.
Modification: Switching the plant's affiliation to PCs Asha Hex and Esis Nas and to minor faction The Je'daii Order. (Minor changes in history and planet of origin will be made to make sense with the affiliation change)

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#436
Zeradias Mant

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Priscilla Utorna - There is no link to a sub. Please make sure your requested changes match the formatting of the sub template as well.

 

Vanessa Vantai - Please provide a link to the new Affiliation.

 

Vela Kryss - Species do not have designated affiliations, so a modification to the sub for that is not necessary. If you'd still like to make changes to other parts of the sub, I will need the changes provided her verbatim for me to edit into the sub.

 

All other subs have been updated.


Edited by Zeradias Mant, 05 March 2018 - 02:05 PM.


#437
Priscilla Utorna

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Submission Name: Carina LaForte

Link to Submission: Carina LaForte
Summary of Modification: Updating appearance/playby/formatting/history
Reason for Modification: To be consistent with new roleplays

Modification: Enclosed in spoiler

 


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#438
Vanessa Vantai

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Zeradias Mant Edit has been made to the request.



#439
Vela Kryss

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Zeradias Mant

 

I'd still like to change minor aspects of the sub, such as its planet of origin and bits of its history.

 

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#440
Kalyn Shif

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Submission Name: Aurum Resubmission

Link to Submission: http://starwarsrp.ne...m-resubmission/
Summary of Modification: Edit the System Features to match the other planets in its System
Reason for Modification: I want them all to match, plus Aurum's position is altered since the other planets have been worked upon
Modification:
 

Change "Located in the center of the habitable zone" to "Located in the Habitable Zone | 5th Planet from Ner"

 

Can I also get "Kol (Natural Satellite)" changed to "Kol (Moon)"


Edited by Asha Hex, 06 March 2018 - 12:06 PM.

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