carnifex

This is the first time I've posted a feedback thread since 2020, and seeing all the recent ones crop up got me wanting to post one of my own. This'll be for feedback and constructive criticism for the character of Carnifex, his personal group the Kainate, and the stories written concerning both.

Jutrand, Capital of the Sith Empire What was once the mundane and slack expressions of billions turned to shock and surprise as a new celestial fixture made itself known in Jutrand's upper atmosphere. Looming so large as to eclipse Jutrand's native star was the Malsheem, gargantuan world-craft...

Only ash remained. It twirled and fell through the air like black snow, the roaring inferno that once gave rise to it having since been extinguished. Bodies lay amidst the desolation and ruin of the once bustling city center, towers of twisted melt -- warped by immense heat -- stretched up into...

Darth Carnifex Teresa felt a small hand tapping her shoulder and soft voice accompanying, a very insistent voice. It almost seemed a shame to cut the dream she was having off to wake up, alas her eyes creeped open accompanied with a long yawn. The woman stared blankly at the dimly lit ceiling...

"We've been very busy, my Lord, following your instructions to the letter." The wire-thin man pressed his index finger against the bridge of his glasses, pushing them back up his nose and setting them more securely against his face. Beads of sweat accumulated along his nose and cheeks, his...

Darth Carnifex Though he'd passed through eight checkpoints without incident, it was this last step that brought Xeykard the most unease. The Great Hall was lavish, comforting -- minutes ago a silent servant had come to offer him some refreshments. He'd refused. His mind was awash with fear...

The Crestfallen emerged from hyperspace, a sleek black shadow against the endless void. Ahead loomed a mighty warfleet, dozens upon dozens of star destroyers with many multitudes of lesser ships spread between them. At the fleet's center was the Malsheem, a massive spherical space station larger...

Intent: Create Darth Carnifex's personal fighter Image Source: Click - Pete Norris Headers - Ingrid L'lerim Canon Link: N/A Permissions: First United Astral Engineering Permission Primary Source: N/A Manufacturer: Malsheem Shipyards Affiliation: Darth Carnifex Market Status...

In transit to an unknown location… There was an amusing sense of deja vu to this whole situation. Many many moons ago, Hazel had fled from Monastery, abandoning the Order of the Sacred Lotus. And in her wake, broke the friendship of someone who looked up to her. And shattered the bond with...

C O N D U I T For my precious Zeptepi. For my beloved family. The Bone Temple of the Nightsisters Wanica 13, Worldcraft Malsheem The weight of the intense presence unleashed by the ritual to reinforce the Darkside connection of Carnifex-Demiurge outweighed the eerie realization of the...

Intent: Create the synthesis of all of Carnifex's teachings Image Credit: Click - Wookieepedia Click - Wookieepedia Headers - Ingrid L'lerim Canon: N/A Permissions: N/A Links: N/A Tradition Name: Carnifex Thought Tradition Type: Synthesis of Sith Teachings Tradition Focus: Influence...

The conflict had been short. A multitude of warships had dropped out of hyperspace simultaneously, jamming transmissions and erecting gravity wells to prevent their escape. Ion cannons levied volley after volley, pelting their starship with disabling energy that left them adrift and helpless...

OUT OF CHARACTER INFORMATION Intent: Image Credit: Click - Shutterstock.com Headers - Ingrid Canon: Permissions: N/A Links: GENERAL INFORMATION Name: Designation: Origins: Average Lifespan: Estimated Population: Semi-Unique Description: PHYSICAL INFORMATION Breathes: Average Height of...

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KAILA BirthplaceSpaceborn Age20 RankApprentice to Carnifex FactionThe Sith Empire Home SpeciesVahla Gender Force SensitiveYes Height5'9" Weight130 lbs Hair ColorStrawberry blonde Eye ColorCrimson Skin ColorPale Voice:Laura Bailey as: Serana Distinctive featuresSith...