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[Eira Dyn]

Hey,

So, I have reached 270 posts as Eira, which doesn't feel as many posts for the character as I thought I would have for her by now since it feels like I have been doing as much as I can with her. Figured I would throw out a feedback and critique thread to see what people enjoy about Eira, what I could be working on and what isn't working well from Eira that I should probably aim to stop doing.

Don't feel like you have to say anything nice if you can't think of any strengths, I am not seeking praise for praise sake when it comes to Eira. I want to know what is going right but more importantly what I can do better to make her a character people are excited and wanting to write with. I enjoy having her as my current main Sith account and wish to continue that going with her.

Anyways, hit me with your critiques and comments!

 

[Tamsin Graves]

I don't have anything bad or critique to say about Eira, I find her an intriguing cool character and you seem to write and know her very well. SShe comes off as gruff and tough, but I really like it when the occasion arises she shows a bit of her softer nerdy side. You really know how to show she is something deeper then just a sith bad ass she pretends to be on the surface. I have read her trying to manipulate people or situations and failing at it something I don't see a lot of writers willing to do. You also show her exhausting her strengths in in a fight will still coming off as someone who can hold there own and won't let in until their is nothing left in the tank.

The way you show her pretending or wanting to be this invulnerable emotionally person like nothing can touch her emotionally, but showing she does in fact feel and care about things and others sometimes is amazing story telling. The punishment you are willing to put her through for her story, all of this will build to a great memorable sith.

Only critique I got really is I want see that moment when she fully unleashes and breaks loose on everyone and everything around her. I feel like it might happened cause she comes off as emotional powder keg that wants to explode and just wreck everyone.

 

[Allyson Locke]

Eira is still very early in her development but I've enjoyed seeing her grow. The fight in the invasion with Quinn and Kaila really showed her understanding of being an apprentice and seeing what power she had the capability of gaining. I adore the way you write her so blunt and brash - def looking forward to a balance to that eventually as she grows up and develops more.

Keep up the good work

 

[Cerys Dyn]

There is one glaring omission to your character development.

ME