Approved NPC 405th Guard

[Cloudburner]

"Cloudburner can't do it on his own!"


Name: 405th Guard
Intent: To provide a unit of Republic Soldiers who protect Cloudburner (Vahnnix Sunburner).
Affiliation: Cloudburner and the Republic.
Availability: Unique
Quality: C
Type: Infrantry
Strength: 100
Description: Vader had the 501st Legion, Ren had the Knights Of Ren, and now Cloudburner (Formerly Vahn Fett) has a group of trained soldiers for use in combat to protect him, the 405th Guard. They all use IR-7 "Persecutor" Blaster pistol as secondaries and a CAR-17 Variable Blaster Rifle as a primary. They were createdby the Republic after they realised Cloudburner would be a useful ally to fight against the Mandalorian Faction, because he was part of the Mandalorians once before. They do not use the force. Propaganda to join them is everywhere.
Links: If Necessary

 

[KeCholo]

Under review

 

[KeCholo]

They were founded by the Republic after they realised Cloudburner would be a useful ally to fight against the Mandalorians, as he was once a Mandalorian himself.

Grammar is a bit choppy here, try to clean it up. Pronouns are very easy to use but most of the time readers will play the pronoun game trying to guess who you're talking about.

Strength: 50

Normal company strength is at least 80.

Sorry if I'm being picky, this is my first Codex review haha

Overall really good job on the submission.

 

[Cloudburner]

[member="KeCholo"]

Thanks, edits have been made.

 

[KeCholo]

Approved, waiting admin approval.

 

[Valiens Nantaris]

Approved.