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BD-A5 personal walker mk-3

Lyth Meran

Bullet with Butterfly wings.
Lyth Meran
Character Bio
NE-PA-E-1000-Enforcer-Power-Armor.jpg

Image Source: http://bbs.stardestr...57171&start=125

Intent: Upgreaded Walker for Lyth Meran
Development Thread: If needed

Wingless Pixie

Manufacturer:
Meran Mechanics
http://starwarsrp.ne...eran-mechanics/
and technicaly
kallentech technologies

http://starwars.wiki...ch_Technologies
Model:I-12-B3

Affiliation:
lyth meran
Modularity: no

Production: Unique

Material:
electronic, blaster and droid components

Role:Personal Walker

Height: 6ft 1.8288 meters

Length: 9 inch

Width: .5 meter

Weight: 500lbs 226.796 kg

Minimum Crew: 1

Optimal Crew: 1

Propulsion:Bipedal

Top Speed:17 mph

Armaments:

Squadron Count: N/A

Passenger Capacity: 0

Cargo Capacity:0

Misc. Equipment:

  • Sound and Particulate Sensor System
  • Variable Spectrum Optics
  • Recoil Reduction Gyroscopes
  • Motion Tracker
  • Basic Processor/ Back up Remote processor
  • Parabolic Guides
  • Broadband Transmitter/Receiver
  • Droid Perception Sensors
  • Multi Frequency Target Acquisition System (MFTAS)
  • Heads Up Display
  • Micro-optic Sensors
  • Motivator Booster
  • 4 Mark IV fuel cells
  • Internal Comlink
  • Comlink jammer
  • Sensor suite
  • Biometric sensor for access Access
  • Back Up Processor
  • Secondary Battery
  • Target acquisition system
  • Magnetic feet
  • Oxygen scrubber under seat located on left shoulder
  • Photoreceptor (1; Central)
  • Sonar Mapper
  • Multi-Frequency Targeting and Acquisition System
  • Multi-Spectral Target Assessor
  • Internal Weapon Targeting System
  • Broadband Antenna (Connected to Control Node)
  • Rangefinder
  • Macrobinoculars
  • Sensors (Visual, Motion, Thermal, Audio)
  • Scanners (Infrared, Radar, X-Ray)
  • Encrypted Internal Comm-Link

Strengths: + vastly superior to her older model of I-12-B3, BA-D5 has weapons and improved armor.




Weaknesses: - droid has no functioning droid brain as such no operating programming other than that of a vehicle
- Replacement parts an nonexistent requiring theme to be custom made.
- it is some what clumsy.
-Lyth is housed in a shoulder mounted cockpit and exposed.
- Cockpit is lightly armored made only of only Glasteel and durasteel.

Description: Built after the (Planed) loss of her wings and subsequent loss of her
force abilities Lyth was driven in ti a dark void of depression viewing her self for the first time as Weak an small she pulled her self out of her depression by building new armor.
she stripped down her original armor and rebuilt it by scratch adding heavier armor and making a proper cockpit and built in weapons she couldn't fly but she could kick ass.
The walker is built from droid parts and made to be humanized while holding as much gear as typical Mando.
adding these components restricted any internal cock pit options forcing Lyth to make an external one. The droid head is more a distraction from her exposed position and only acts as a a camera option allowing Lyth to control it remotely and see from that position as opposed to an obstructed view. this can be switched to a cockpit view if the head is destroyed.

Primary Source:

http://starwarsrp.ne...eran-mechanics/
http://starwars.wiki.../Sentinel_droid
http://starwars.wiki...'s_armored_suit
http://starwarsrp.ne...finder/?hl=lyth
http://starwarsrp.ne...50-lyths-armor/
 

Haytham Kaze

Judge, Judgury, Judgecutioner
Haytham Kaze
Character Bio
RESEARCH REVIEW
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Star Wars Canon:
Pending initial review
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Starwars Chaos:
Pending initial review
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WITHOUT DEV THREADS
Pending initial review
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WITH DEV THREADS
Pending Initial review
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SUGGESTIONS
Pending Inital review
 

Haytham Kaze

Judge, Judgury, Judgecutioner
Haytham Kaze
Character Bio
Hi, [member="Lyth Meran"].

To start, you're to title the links of the development threads you've listed as their actual thread titles. And to tag them as what content they hold 'Phrik' 'Cortosis' 'Voidsteel', whatever.

As this is a personal walker, with the production of 'Unique' you're also going to have to change Affiliation from 'Mandalor' to the character that is using it.

In your materials, as per usual, hyperlink 'Mandalorian Steel.'
 
Major Faction

Ellie Mors

B E A C O N
Ellie Mors
Character Bio
[member="Haytham Kaze"] [member="Lyth Meran"]

Lyth Meran said:
with a Trakar (Mandalorian Voidsteel) underlay
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If the development listed here:


Lyth Meran said:
Development Thread: If needed
Wingless Pixie
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Is for the void stone challenge (in order to use voidsteel), which is what I'm assuming at the moment it is, the objectives listed are not completed.
Void Stone: (( Complete a thread without using the word "the" in third person. --OR-- Have your character suffer a severe, debilitating existential crisis that has your character questioning everything they held true. )) "As with all restricted materials, this objective applies to the use of derivative materials (such as voidsteel or Velokite)."
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After reading the thread the word "the" was utilized by your character, and "da" in place of "the" (which is essentially the same as arguing semantics over the word) was utilized by your writing partner.

If it is utilizing the existential crisis portion of the available objectives, please make sure to clarify (either in a post or in the submission itself beside the development thread link) so the judge knows which challenge is being completed.
Moving on:



Lyth Meran said:
Icon-Class Personal Energy Shield
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Lyth Meran said:
ACS-205 Advanced Dual Weapon System
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Lyth Meran said:
http://starwarsrp.ne...-energy-shield/
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The affiliations for all three of these are ArmaTech Combat Systems. They are not open market, nor do they belong to the Mandalorians (as the rest of the submissions in the equipment list are). You need to remove these or otherwise have some kind of thread showing the purchase or theft of these materials.
 
Major Faction

Ellie Mors

B E A C O N
Ellie Mors
Character Bio
[member="Lyth Meran"] [member="Haytham Kaze"]
Upon further review, and careful consideration, I'm going to have to deny this submission on the grounds of the Codex/Factory rule #7:
7. All submissions need to conform to the general idea of Star Wars. No Gundam Wings, no Transformers.
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While this is essentially a "walker" that is the size of a droid, it does not function the same way as a walker, it also does not function as a droid, nor a cohesive, star wars-esque, take on what a combination of the two would be.

This is essentially a mobilized suit of armor that has an exposed cockpit on its shoulder.


Lyth Meran said:
she stripped down her original armor and rebuilt it by scratch adding heavier armor and making a proper cockpit and built in weapons she couldn't fly but she could kick ass.
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A vehicle that is humanoid, is considered a mobile "armor", contains a cockpit, and is labeled as a walker all paints the picture of a gundam or other kind of Mecha. It certainly does not help that the picture is fairly similar to the aforementioned mecha type.

Mechas, Gundams, Transformers, etc, are not permitted in the factory, the codex, and are considered crossover material.

I suggest submitting a second chance request with the intent of making this more "Star Warsy". It needs to be similar to something you would find in the Star Wars universe, not brought over from another franchise.
 
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