I just wrote this bio, and was looking for negatives and positives of my bio (the appearance is a WIP so not included).
Star Wars Roleplay: Chaos
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Critique my bio!
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Myles Vylumnar
No gods, no masters
I like it, I enjoy the detail you went into for this FU. The only thing I think needed (a little) more detail was the strengths/weaknesses, but that's just me. As for the species being credited as the most powerful users in the galaxy, I would personally say third or fourth. Maybe second.
Overall: 8/10 - Then again, I'm no critic.
Overall: 8/10 - Then again, I'm no critic.
Aizen
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[member="Eirin"] Its not a must for Jedi, but what Force abilities does Eirin show? Saber form?
Delicate
[member="Eirin"]
I like the bio itself, but that font style is terribly difficult to read (at least for me on my Mac).
Also while [member="Aizen"] mentioned listing your Force abilities, I am actually one to oppose writing those down. I think assigning values to what exactly your character can and cannot do on a scale that nobody follows is time that could have been spent elsewhere on the character. But to each their own
I like the bio itself, but that font style is terribly difficult to read (at least for me on my Mac).
Also while [member="Aizen"] mentioned listing your Force abilities, I am actually one to oppose writing those down. I think assigning values to what exactly your character can and cannot do on a scale that nobody follows is time that could have been spent elsewhere on the character. But to each their own
Aizen
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[member="Jamie Pyne"] All I know this morning when I woke is I know something now, know something now I didn't before
stats and bios I do find to be filler. depending on the writer, the stat chart can be useless. I was just suggesting it as more filler for the page
stats and bios I do find to be filler. depending on the writer, the stat chart can be useless. I was just suggesting it as more filler for the page
Thank you everyone.
I was a little sceptical about the font myself. I've changed it to Georgia for ease, because I'm nice like that. [member="Jamie Pyne"]
All the stats are beneath the biography. I agree with you, it helps fill out the description of the character's abilities and serves as a good reference in duels where you can compare stats to decide who will win beforehand. [member="Aizen"]
I agree, they will probably be improved when I've put together an appearance section and RPed him a little so I know what he is like as a person.[member="Myles Vylumnar"],
I was a little sceptical about the font myself. I've changed it to Georgia for ease, because I'm nice like that.
[member="Jamie Pyne"]All the stats are beneath the biography. I agree with you, it helps fill out the description of the character's abilities and serves as a good reference in duels where you can compare stats to decide who will win beforehand. [member="Aizen"]
I agree, they will probably be improved when I've put together an appearance section and RPed him a little so I know what he is like as a person.[member="Myles Vylumnar"],