Critique the Corellian (Part Deux)

[Julius Sedaire]

So when Julius first hit Master last year or early this year, I put one of these up. I'd like to think he's changed quite a bit since then, and grown as a person/character. Maybe he hasn't. Maybe he has. But that's why I put these up periodically. To gauge that and get advice. What is good about this character? What is bad? What shouldn't and should change? And if you feel there are relevant overall critiques to me as a writer, fair game. Go right ahead!

And no, I am not asking you all to be nice and gush over my awesomeness. You know me and you know how I am. Be honest as you feel you need to be, just don't be an ass and keep it to critiquing the character. You have a problem with myself, i'm happy to broach that in PM.

Some of my favorite threads:

• I Hold Myself In Contempt: Ongoing. Julius begins to try and piece back who and what he is after emerging from the Outback.
• Making Friends Amongst the Ghosts: One of the first threads with Julius, here you see him still eager to get back to things, and a few other more fresh-faced ideals.
• Elrood Dominion: Julius shows off fighting and comes to rescue of his Padawan. Brief.
• Shindig Job: Brief, one or two posts. Shows Julius relaxing.
• And God I Know I'm One: Early Thread... Julius recovering from losing his padawan and hiding in the Outer Rim.
• Tree Frogs On Ossus: Bit of a Philosophy debate with Corvus
• If You Can't Run... : Armor training w/ [member="Sarge Potteiger"]
• They Say The Soul Don't Die: A moment aside with a new friend...
• Roche Invasion: Julius helps guard some third party medics. Shows his mannerism coalescing into the more relaxed man of today.
• There But For the Grace of the Force: Julius & [member="Keira Ticon"] meet. One of the more pivotal threads for me as a writer in this characters mentality and thought process.
• Corellian Sunrise: Julius visits a love interest... Sorta....
• We Have Done the Impossible: First meeting of what will become the Corellian League

 

[Seraphina Shel'tah]

Corellian Sunrise: Julius visits a love interest... Sorta....

This will always be one of my favorite threads. Nothing made sense. It was entirely silly. Lots of laughs.

Julius makes me wish I had motivation to write [member="Kayleigh Tyven"] still.

 

[Julius Sedaire]

[member="Seraphina Shel'tah"] - Everyone runs out on me *sniffle*

I think that thread is probably my favorite too... Wish I had more like it...

 

[Keira Priest]

Forgot to post to this, don't mind me.

Anyway, Julius is a total nerd. End of story.

Okay, getting serious now, promise. There's always been something about this character and the way you write him ever since their first thread. I don't know if I can accurately place a word to it other than poetic. In some way every post of yours in our threads reads as a sort of poetry, and it's part of what draws me to the character. He's written so delicately and yet so hard-hitting at the same time, and I love that. This new direction you've begun to take him in has only added to that dynamic, and it's great. Keep it up, always.

My only critique is that you haven't posted to our thread yet, and I also have a need to know more about those past lives of his. The foreshadowing is too much.

[member="Julius Sedaire"]

 

[Logen Brunner]

• Positive: Malcolm Reynolds as a corellian SWC character written by someone that can write.
• Negative: Malcolm Reynolds type character running around the galaxy with a glow rod. Makes me sad that such a concept is being used more as a space wizard then cowboy.