Critiques and Improvements

[Darth Rixas]

For both Oron and myself as a writer. I plan on writing him over Helios for the foreseeable future as my muse tends to spread thin when I write more than one character at a time. *facepalms*

So. How am I doing with him so far on my most recent LOA? How's my writing? How can I improve? How can I get better all around? Where can I do better with Oron? How's my prose?

I'm open to all types of critique whether warm or cold.

Edit: Singled out some posts.

http://starwarsrp.net/topic/101866-absolution-mandalorian-crusaders/#entry1471085

http://starwarsrp.net/topic/111157-homecoming-mandoade-dominion-of-mandalore-concord-dawn/?view=findpost&p=1584717

http://starwarsrp.net/topic/111423-quality-bonding-time-all-mercs-welcome/?view=findpost&p=1589050

http://starwarsrp.net/topic/111610-fire-meat-spice-house-verd-extended-kin/?view=findpost&p=1590925

 

[Julius Sedaire]

Do you have a handful of threads that can give me, or others, a good sense of the character? Things you think are especially important or give good glimpses? That will help me, to be honest.

[member="Oron Verd"]

 

[Darth Rixas]

[member="Ijaat Mereel"] I singled out a few posts in the original post for you and others. They may not be the best but they were recent and convenient to find, lol.

 

[Julius Sedaire]

[member="Ijaat Mereel"] I singled out a few posts in the original post for you and others. They may not be the best but they were recent and convenient to find, lol.

Might be a few days, due to work, but I will get you something.