Critiquing a Ghost

[Tanith Alde]

I'd love to know what you all like and dislike about Ghost, Please, Go ahead and let it rp (Oh also any negative comments will be reported, No flames or trolls But have fun posts whatever you want) {That was a joke btw}

 

[Marcus Itera]

[member="Scarlet Ghost"]

Only one suggestion; focus less on creating romance and more so creating an actual storyline, with dynamic and compelling concepts.

 

[Tanith Alde]

[member="Marcus Itera"]

I'd love to friend, I would, but it appears people easily forget me in skirmishes

 

[Marcus Itera]

[member="Scarlet Ghost"]

Skirmishes and invasions matter very little. Public threads, join a group and make friends, or go ham out in the Outer Rim doing whatever pleases you. Just write a good story.

 

[Lahi Te'ala]

I feel like you could focus less on how badass and hyper violent she is, and make her more relatable. As it is, you explicitly put it out there that Ghost kills most people she meets - and then wondered why you weren't finding any lasting character relationships.

You don't need to be a nice or good person to have friends, but you do need to have more to you than 'a killer who kills a lot and is really good at killing'. And you also need to find threads and ways to interact with people that aren't also just violence - the fact that when someone says to thread and find stuff that way, your reaction is 'skirmishes' is kind of tell-tale - you're a military person, okay, that is understandable.

But the military isn't fighting 25/8, they have time to relax, to recover, most people in the military make friends with their fellows, they go to bars and hang out and basically act human. If you only focus on the fighting aspect of the character, obviously the personality and relationship aspect will suffer.

 

[Tanith Alde]

[member="Lahi Te'ala"]

She isn't military btw, She's intelligence. And her entire point is that shes basically a broken girl

 

[Lahi Te'ala]

Her entire point can be whatever you want it to be, but 'broken girl' isn't a particularly interesting hook, if there's no reason for anyone to care about her being broken. Make a private, One Sith Intelligence Character thread, have it be a setting where she's not instantly going to kill everyone, let her connect to people, or at least interact with them, in a way that doesn't have violence.

Or don't - but it seems like you want to do more than just be a constant string of battles, just without doing the 'work' of making people actually care for your character.

[member="Scarlet Ghost"]

 

[Tanith Alde]

[member="Lahi Te'ala"]

Damm you're right, I need to get some footwork done