Don't tap on the glass! Unless you do it gently... Feedback on the Shark

[Ghorua the Shark]

Alright, I decided I would wait until 200 posts to do this, so for those of you that know my big boy Ghorua, or those of you that have no idea who he is, or those of you that want to comment on my writing style, you can do it here! Just tread carefully, Ghorua doesn't like being insulted, and I will let him whoop your bantha!

 

[Malik]

*gets rocks*

[member="Ghorua the Shark"]

 

[JanesBatter]

[member="Ghorua the Shark"]

What can I say? It's a Shark.

Sharks deserve to be food for us old-time humans who enjoy shark fins.

 

[Malik]

[member="Ghorua the Shark"][member="JanesBatter"]

Excuse you he is a beautiful sexy whale that desrves to be pet. *pets both of them* But seriously your writing style is great.

 

[Matthew(Rogue)Drevur]

Well I saw you in a bar once. That's just about it.

 

[Ghorua the Shark]

[member="JanesBatter"]
You can't eat me if I eat you first!

[member="Malik"]
Why thank you! *breaks spine with hug*

[member="Matthew (Rogue) Drevur"]
Fair enough. It was a rocking bar, though!

 

[Abelain Narv'uk]

[member="Ghorua the Shark"]

Personally I enjoy reading your writing and find Ghorua to be a fascinating character. He looks like a big brute, and certainly acts the part when he fights, but he knows his own strengths and weaknesses. He seems to be quite a good team player as well. I especially enjoy how he isn't always picking fights and acting tough, sometimes he seems almost peaceable.

Now, the backstory isn't really something superbly original, but it is a slight twist on the parents dying from [insert] cliche. I do think it's a humorous twist that his species dislikes being singled out for size, but he embraces what is obviously an advantage in many combat situations.

I can't honestly say I've read all of your threads, but from what I have read he's got a bright future.
And Bones is a wonderful pet.