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Approved Planet Elysian

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Name: Elysian

Name: Elysian
Region: Outer rim
System: Elysia system
Suns: Elysia (Yellow Star)
Orbital Position: Habitable zone
Moons: 3
· Planeteer
· Koth
· Khorda

System Features: None
Coordinates: C3 north of Thral in line with Shiva in the next hex along
Rotational Period: 26.5 hours
Orbital Period: 370 days
Class: Terrestrial
Diameter: 15,000km
Atmosphere: Class I
Climate: Temperate
Gravity: 1.03
Primary Terrain:
· Grasslands
· Forests
· Oceans
· Tundra
· Desserts
· Mountains
· Swamps
Native Species:
Immigrated Species:
· 85% human
· 10% Kilik
· 5% other

Primary Languages: Galactic Standard Basic
Government: Elected council
Population: 4 million
Demonym: Elysians

Major Imports:
· Building tech
· Chemical compounds
Major Exports:
· House Thul Goods
· Raw materials
· Food Stuffs

Affiliation:
· Galactic Alliance

Major Locations
· Siricuse: Siricuse is the main city of the refugees that followed House Thul off Alderaan. When they first arrived on the planet they had built up a small village along the edges of an extremely large pit that stretched many miles deep with the bottom being a large source of water. With the local wildlife constantly attacking the village the refugees soon began expanding down building their homes into the sides of the pit walls. The homes would be built on top of each other a lot of the time and what began as a few buildings turned to them eventually filling the entire pit with homes and businesses’. They were all connected together by lifts and could be traveled to independently of each other by speeders and such. In the center of the pit and extending high into the sky are more buildings stacked upon each other those these are the main factories used by the refugees including things such as the Desalination plant, waste management, ect… While at the very top is a large spaceport, where ships can land and then be valet parked along the edge of the pit. The water at the bottom of the pit has not been fully explored yet and those brave enough to have never returned. What has been charted is that it spreads deep into underwater caverns.
· Thul Estate: A few miles away from Siricuse and built near the southern coast is the Thul Estate. While it seems ostentatious from most appearances on the outside the estate is used for far more than just the nobles home. In this building things such as Council meetings and Courts are given their own portions where they can go about their business uninterrupted. This is also where the troops of the planet are now trained and housed when not deployed to protect Siricuse or the spaceport. The temple is equipped with weapons and artillery for dealing with the wildlife and natives if they dare attack. There has even been an arena built into it so as to give entertainment to the people of the planet. Once a month a tournament is held where tickets are sold to the galaxy at large where people come and watch the wildlife of the planet get pitted against the best warriors of the planet. This has actually served as a large source of income for the refugees along with a track for swoop races. As such there has been a rather large spaceport built on one of the nearby islands with a bridge connecting it to the Thul Estate.
· Killik hives: The Killiks that had fled to the planet with the Aldeerans almost immediately broke off from the group exploring the lands and setting up hives to the east of Siricuse. Even with the short amount of time they’ve been on the planet the hives extend deep into a set of mountains. They have even begun taking up an offense against the wildlife of the planet to defend their hives.

Culture: The Alderaanian refugees that followed House Thul off their homeplanet have become much more than what they were usually known as on their homeworld. On Alderaan the natives were known for being farmers, aristocrats, artists. Providing some of the brightest and kindest beings in the galaxy. However now after their departure and landing on Elysia the refugees changed for what could be considered the better. While still being farmers at heart they have strengthened themselves preparing in case House Organa or any others come to try and take their new home from them. As such even those that were once aristocrats on Alderaan have learned to wield weapons and engage others in combat. While no warriors by any stretch of the imagination they have become akin to a local militia. A very dangerous one with the mentality of protecting the only thing they have left. Many have even joined the House Thul expeditionary forces.

Farming is still a large part of their culture and the lands around Siricuse are where they tend to their farms. The farms stretch all along the edge of the pit and have become a community one of sorts where all pitch in their fair share to ensuring the land is cared for. As such the refugees have grown closer together where it is common place for large celebrations to be thrown once a week to relieve the stresses of life. While they do now have technology as the rest of the galaxy they have become more used to the gladiatorial fights held once a month on the Thul Estate.


Technology: Galaxy Standard
 
Alright, let's list the big things and then I'll go into details after this first round of edits.



Elaine Thul said:
Major Locations:
Expand this to multiple paragraphs, detail is key here...you are talking about an entire planet



Elaine Thul said:
Culture: Frontier shanty town with alderaan's culture.
Expand this to multiple paragraphs, this should give someone who's never visited the planet more than enough information about their ways of life, war, politics, ect.



Elaine Thul said:
Technology: On parr due to it being immigrating with them
What areas do they specialize in? lack in? Expand this, no two technologies are alike.



Elaine Thul said:
History: it begins
Unfortunately ''it begins' is not enough to be qualified as a history section. I'm sure this was a spelling mistake, try to add several paragraphs to this.

Also, overall I see many grammar mistakes in this submission. Please clean it up and make sure there are as few as possible, you can run the submission through this spell checker: https://www.jspell.com/public-spell-checker.html
 
Elaine Thul said:
Population: 4 million
This is extremely small.



Elaine Thul said:
Culture: They are for most part adlerians, and have many of their traditions of agricultural society. That being said, they have quite a military mindedness. As they still worried over alderaan reprisals, and fear house organna is corrupted by the sith.
Alright, this still needs more work done on it.



Elaine Thul said:
Technology: They have good engineers and agricultural technology, as well as a lot good military technology. They lack however medicines, other than basics. They have no major science base, other than military tech. This mostly due to house thul being the major employer, though thankfully due to excellent plumbing, this wards of most disease.
Give this another paragraph or two.
 
Elaine Thul said:
Native Species: Dinosaurs and pre mammes
Go into more detail here.



Elaine Thul said:
I'm going to ask that 2nd 'paragraph' be added significantly or added to slightly and a third paragraph be added. Culture is a huge part and can't be accurately presented in just 2 paragraphs



Elaine Thul said:
Add a paragraph to this. History (like culture) is very important.
 
[member="Elaine Thul"]

Sure!

Now when it says native species you can do some digging on the wookiepedia and find some good native species who live on Elysian. Rancor, Tuk'ata, Krayt Dragons, Wampa, Tigers, Bears, Wolves, etc are all native species. Most worlds are going to have some native species, just make sure they make sense for the climate of Elysian when your searching.

Culture is a HUGE part of an planet application as it defines the planet, the people who live here. It's an integral part. If your stuck feel free to take a gander at some of the accepted worlds for ideas on how to approach culture.

When it says Technology we want you to tell us what level of technology is on this planet, and the tech the people here use. Primitive technology, modern technology, are they a space faring people or do they have the most primitive tech.
 
[member="Elaine Thul"]
I will need you to choose a location in the outer or unknown regions. It's been deemed that the inner areas of the map are too congested, and thus we are now only accepting those in the outer rim or unknown regions.

The template has been updated and a new announcement will be made on this.
 
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