Feedback for Enyo

[Enyo Typhos]

Posted one of these threads for Enyo a long time ago. Quite a bit has happened since then.


For one...she sorta died and her brain was put in a jar. Now she's finally escaped the iron grip of her creators and wants to murder them. So I'm interested in people's thoughts. Constructive criticism is preferred to panegyrics.


To summarise briefly, Enyo is the clone of Siobhan Kerrigan. Created by a genocidal machine cult called Archangel, she was intended to do their bidding and aid them in their plans to eradicate organic life. Alas, she eventually slipped from their leash, though not after being brainwashed a good deal, killing plenty of people in their name and being turned into a somewhat grotesque organic-machine hybrid.


Linked some relevant threads. I've left out rebellions/invasions/faction threads (she was in the Korriban Rebellion and is presently participating in the Kraysiss Invasion).

http://starwarsrp.net/topic/98856-we-can-rebuild-herwhether-she-wants-it-or-not/page-1

http://starwarsrp.net/topic/109954-malice-and-maladi/page-1

http://starwarsrp.net/topic/104043-desecrating-what-shouldnt-be-touched/page-1

http://starwarsrp.net/topic/113364-a-wretched-hive-of-scum-and-villainy-joza/?hl=enyo

http://starwarsrp.net/topic/97615-paradise-lost-matsu-xiangu/?hl=%2Bmatsu+%2Benyo

http://starwarsrp.net/topic/93330-we-do-not-sow/page-1


http://starwarsrp.net/topic/109457-enyo-typhos-simulacrum/I'm also linking this tech sub because it's quite pertinent to her characterisation. Body horror abounds.

 

[NightSister]

Her concept is super neat, I really like what you're doing with her. I feel like she's a very well-rounded/well-developed character.

You could develop her even more in a thread with me, just saying.

 

[Joza Perl]

From what I’ve experience of her, Enyo is a very well thought out character. She’s been through a lot of crap and the way you choose to depict it as a writer is believable while still being entertaining. Her strengths and weaknesses come from what she’s experienced making her nice and well rounded (stealing part of what Aria said but that’s cos it’s true )

One set of traits I particularly enjoy is how aggressive, ruthless and steadfast she is because she’s been wronged big time and knows that she has to look out for herself and her independence after being a puppet for so long. Layer that with how stern yet earnest she can be and you’ve got an interesting dynamic. Also she needs to learn that there's a time and place for choking

Overall she’s a sexy robot with a unique situation going for her and I’m looking forward to seeing how she shapes up as a Crime Lord and tests out the limits of her newfound freedom.

 

[Valiens Nantaris]

[member="Enyo Typhos"]

Enyo is one of the more unique characters on the board. It’s hard after all this time to come up with unique concepts, but a clone which is a machine with a brain inside is something very different and very strange. I can claim some small measure of credit from helping create this horrible predicament but you write it well to sell the horror.

The thing I find most interesting about Enyo is the mix of machine and organic views on things. On the one hand she is completely ruthless, willing to destroy everything in her path in her quest for vengeance. But on the other, she has a deep familial love for the other clones especially Amara. Conflicts are good, and in this case they help define her as different from her template or the droids she escaped from.

If I am looking at Enyo as a character I find it hard to place her in the scale of Light and Dark. She does terrible things, certainly, which would class her as Dark. However, her goals and attachments are noble enough to create a fitting shade of grey.

I don’t really have anything to critique at the moment as the things I want to discuss – objectives etc are being handled by current RPs.

So keep it up, scary machine lady!

 

[Enyo Typhos]

[member="Aria Vale"]

Thanks. Sure we can arrange something. Feel free to hit me up on Discord.


[member="Joza Perl"]

I find the interaction between Joza and Enyo interesting. They're radically different, but while Enyo's a ruthless machine lady, I believe she's quite genuine in having a soft spot for her. Now that Enyo's free and embarked on her campaign of vengeance, she'll have to learn to become more of a leader. She has a gang, but she got it by intimidating them into obeying her. Archangel never really taught her leadership skills because they just wanted a super-empowered battle droid with Force powers.


[member="Valiens Nantaris"]


Appreciate your thoughts. Not sure I can agree with labelling Enyo as grey...because that would make Sio light side and that's so wrong. On a more serious level, I believe the appropriate trope is Blue and Orange Morality, mixed with Pragmatic Villainy and Even Evil Has Loved Ones. I don't think Enyo actually feels guilty about any of the unpleasant or vile things she did...except murdering Tempest's clone. Granted, she did that because she was brainwashed, but she feels very bad about it. Oh, and beating up Amara. The other stuff? Not at all.


Deep familial love and attachments are one of Enyo's drive. In that regard she differs from Sumiko, who in my opinion is incapable of love. However, Enyo's moral framework is amoral. She's got no problem working with savage criminals or Sith. 'Good' and 'evil' are alien concepts to her and, with very few exceptions, her concept of caring does not extend beyond her fellow clones. I guess comparisons can be drawn between her and the 'good' Terminators in the Terminator franchise. They're not cruel for cruelty's sake, but expedient. And she doesn't have John Connor telling her not to kill people (and she'd ignore him anyway).


Suggestions for future dev and stuff are welcome.

 

[Valiens Nantaris]

[member="Enyo Typhos"]

I would like to see Enyo explore her ambitions and goals going forward. A lot of that will happen when she takes over AA.
Basically, when she gains power, what will she do with it? What’s her endgame?

Those are all intriguing questions I’m looking forward to seeing.