Feedback on me

[Shawn Withers]

So I would like some feedback on my character as a whole, my writing, Even me from an OOC perspective. As well, if you have time, Read something for me, and give me some feedback here on this thread. Thanks guys.

http://starwarsrp.net/topic/73492-four-years-can-lead-to-a-lot-of-stress-datalogs-of-shawn-withers/

I plan on this being a rather long series of Datalogs that will be used to further increase my characters story, but give me your ideas, and even maybe a few challenges if you want. Heck, if you want, you can ask for me to incorporate something into the RP.

I mean, if you want me to break the Fourth wall, or specifically do something just for fun, I can try, but i wont promise anything.

Once again, thanks.

 

[Ellie Mors]

[member="Shawn Withers"]
Your character is pretty interesting, more than some of mine anyways, and your writing is solid. I don't think you need to worry about our opinions just yet - you're super new. Based on the thread I'd say you have a great style of writing - and a great direction for your character, it's obvious you at least have a good idea of what you want, which is good.

 

[Shawn Withers]

I always worry if I am good or not. At least with my writing and my character aspect. So I always love to have people critique me. Even if they think poorly of me, I use that to fuel my writing to become better. I'm trying to become better overall. When I first started writing, I joined a not so great facebook forum that because of my writing, they kicked me. Apparently it was just that bad. As I look back, I can see I wasn't great. And so these places where I can see people read my stories and posts then critique me and even make challenges for me can help me become a better writer overall.

I'd rather think I have bad writing, and be proven wrong, than vise versa.

Thank you for your input. It always helps.

[member="Bianca"]