Feedback on Phislo

[Phislo Bress]

Now that I'm a little more experienced with this whole RP'ing business I want to know whats good, what's bad, and what's ugly about what I've done so far. Have at it and hold nothing back. I want to get better as a writer and RP'er.

 

[Ruby Senri]

Okay you've done really good! I didn't even think you just started, I thought this was another character. One thing I do reccomend is getting some color text for yourself. Besides that you're really good!