Star Wars Roleplay: Chaos

Register a free account today to become a member! Once signed in, you'll be able to participate on this site by adding your own topics and posts, as well as connect with other members through your own private inbox!

Approved Starship Firewalker

Status
Not open for further replies.

Kai and Gerda

Guest
K
12196f3e39449fa2cf5859cc9c67a561.jpg

OUT OF CHARACTER INFORMATION
Intent: A private vessel owned by the NPC Tosh Rylance, this ship will be offered as a prize at the end of a special mission.
Image Source: Artist Website
Canon Link: N/A.
Primary Source: Visionary
PRODUCTION INFORMATION

Manufacturer: Eleaor Propulsion
Affiliation: Arryn Jhanson
Model: Starscape-class yacht
Production: Unique

Material: Durasteel, antique ship parts
TECHNICAL SPECIFICATIONS

Classification: Yacht
Length: 148 meters
Width: 67 meters
Height: 59 meters
Armament: Average
  • Dual Turbolaser turrets (3 located along the top of the ship, 3 along the bottom; 6 in total)
Defenses: High (armored hull, shields)
Hangar Space: None
Hangar Allocations:
Starfighters: 0 squadrons
Support Craft: 0 squadrons
Maneuverability Rating: High
Speed Rating: High
Hyperdrive Class: 1
STANDARD FEATURES
G-32 evasive armor plating | Turbolasers (6) | Shields

ADVANCED SYSTEMS
Stygium crystal cloaking device | Interior defense systems | Droid crew | Central Control Computer

Strengths:
  • Cloaking: The vessel can be made to appear invisible and won’t be picked up by ordinary scanners.
  • Droid Operated: A crew of droids controlled by a central computer onboard the ship operate the vessel. The droids are programmed to be loyal to the ship’s current captain.
  • Difficult to Infiltrate: The ship is not only hard to find, it is difficult to get aboard.
  • Mini Museum: The current owner has a small museum aboard containing ancient weapons and armor from various cultures. Each item in the museum is estimated to be worth at least a million credits.

Weaknesses:
  • Not a War Vessel: With the focus being on stealth, the ship isn’t built for combat. It is armored and armed enough to get by, but it is advised one does not attempt to use it in a space battle.
  • Antique: The parts used to make the ship are no longer produced, therefore all replacement parts will have to come from museums and collectors.
  • Droid Operated: While they are mathematically precise and logical, droids lack creativity. Do not expect the mechanized crew to pull any amazing stunts or take anything other than calculated risks.

Description: An ancient vessel produced by a company that has long since gone out of business, the ship was cleaned up and refurbished by Tosh Rylance, who found it languishing in an old shipyard. All of the unique parts no longer in production were acquired from museums or collectors. The ship benefits from a sleek and elegant design, and with the refurbishing it can still be called luxurious. That said, while it may have been formidable in its time, the Firewalker has grown somewhat fragile with age. It relies heavily on cloaking technology to hide its presence, as it is no longer suitable for combat.

The crew consists entirely of droids, which are controlled by a central computer aboard the ship. This is a recent modification (not part of the ship's original design) and can be removed should the captain decide to replace the droids with sentient crew members.

Crew: 14
Passengers: 12
Cargo capacity: 50 tons
Consumables: 6 months
 
Last edited by a moderator:

Runi Verin

Two pounds shy of a bomb.
Alyosha Drutin

Hey there. Quick and simple review is that you have acouple of issues need addressing, but nothing majorly going wrong here that I can see. Areas you'll need to focus on are as follows -
Armament: Moderate
Moderate is no longer a valid rating. Please can you select from: None, Very Low, Low, Average, High, Very High, Extreme.
Hangar Space: 1 Squadron
100 Meters: Moderate: 0
200 Meters: Moderate: 1
Hangar Allocations: (This is the allocated amounts of starfighters and support craft (dropships, shuttles,gunships,etc) this submission can hold in its hangar based on the maximum hangar space capacity listed above)
Starfighters: 1 squadrons
Support Craft: 1 squadrons (Minimum squadrons lists should match the squadrons listed for the "Base" rating for ship its size)
Little messy and confusing here. Please can you clean it up so it is a little more clear what rating and hangar compliment you're going for. Again, Moderate is no longer a valid rating.

Description:

Crew: 14
Passengers: 12
Cargo capacity: 50 tons
Consumables: 6 months
As you can see from the 5.1 template excerpt below, while we don't require much of a description, we still require something. Please can flesh this out accordingly.
DESCRIPTION
(Describe some of the history behind the submission. Please provide a detailed account or link of each special feature that is listed in this submission. Give us some idea of how it might perform its function, what it excels against and what some limitations of it are. This is where you talk about your idea, flesh it out over at least a good-sized paragraph, and address some of the ways it might be used or abused. All miscellaneous descriptive elements go here, such as Cargo Capacity, Passengers, Consumables, Crew, etc. For especially powerful or ambitious submissions, a very thorough description is recommended.)

Please tag me when you've addressed the above and I'll re-review.
 

Runi Verin

Two pounds shy of a bomb.
Alyosha Drutin

Hangar Space: Average
Hangar Allocations:
Starfighters: 0 squadrons
Support Craft: 1 squadron

50m [Base: 0 | Very Low: 0 | Low: 0 | Average: 0 | High: 0 | Very High: 0 | Extreme: 0 ]
100m [Base: 0 | Very Low: 0 | Low: 0 | Average: 0 | High: 0 | Very High: 1 | Extreme: 2 ]
200m [Base: 0 | Very Low: 0 | Low: 0 | Average: 1 | High: 2 | Very High: 3 | Extreme: 4 ]
Please note we round down to the nearest applicable size when working out hangar ratings. As you can see from the hangar ratings excerpt below the spoiler, this would mean your vessel would be classified as 100m. To hold 1 squadron at such a size, you'd need a 'Very High' rating - which you currently can't afford.

Easiest solution is to increase the vessel size to the necessary 200m. Alternatively, you'd need to re-balance your current ratings or remove your squadron count completely.

Let me know which way you wanna go.
 
Status
Not open for further replies.

Users who are viewing this thread

Top Bottom