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Approved NPC Goldar

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Lunafreya Solidor

She of Many Names
Lunafreya Solidor
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OUT OF CHARACTER INFORMATION
  • Intent: Create one more member of my household for future rp.
  • Image Credit: Here.
  • Role: Second-In-Command and Lord Captain of the Ruffians, Lunafreya's personal bodyguards.
  • Permissions: Here.
  • Links: Not Applicable.
PHYSICAL INFORMATION
  • Age: 190.
  • Force Sensitivity: Dark Jedi Knight.
  • Species: Stenax.
  • Appearance: Measuring impressively more than two meters tall Goldar is a monster to be feared. With chalky blue-navy skin covering his entire heavily muscled body alongside two glowing red eyes, black wild hair, sharp fang like teeth, deadly claws and massive black wings. His body tells the tale of a defying life, marked by scars and mementos from previous fights causing him to be a terrifying sight in the battlefield.
SOCIAL INFORMATION
Beginner | Trained | Adept | Proficient | Expert
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FORM II: MAKASHI
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FORM VI: NIMAN
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FORM VII: VAAPAD
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TRAKATA
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SOKAN
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JAR'KAI
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  • Personality: A cruel and ruthless male Sterax, he is described as being a savage brute prone to violence and sadism, always losing his temper while working with others and showing his might through strength and sheer will. With no sense of humour whatsoever, Goldar despite having what can be called a 'bad temper', he can show leadership skills and move his team to achieve objectives (done with much shouting and roaring). Believing that only power can is worth respect, Goldar is a proud and willful individual with a hand at the bar and another one in woman’s legs.

COMBAT INFORMATION
  • WEAPON OF CHOICE: Sword & Shield │ Chainblaster
  • COMBAT FUNCTION: Airborne he is too be considered one of the worst sorts of rivals to fight against and will smoke his enemies with his chainblaster from the sky with a small power generator strapped to his back. If found indoors where he cannot use his primary advantage he will appeal in using all his massive strength and experience in a deadly duel with both blade and shield to cut his foes in half with his deadly art.

STRENGTHS:
  • A Swordsman of Sorts - A master of the swordsmanship arts, Goldar swings his blade with perfected rage. Like a true warrior, he rejoices on combining his lethal strikes alongside with his ability to fly and move around the battlefield, making him a harsh enemy to defeat.
  • Stronger than a Wookie - His strength is that the same of a brute. He surely fits on the sentence “can take a punch”, with enough strength in him to crush a human's skull with his bare hands easily.
  • Boiling Anger - Goldar has a strong grip with the powers of the Force by channeling his inner anger and hatred to barrage his enemy with both melee strikes and force blows. His anger can be felt from miles away, as a beacon of pure spite.

WEAKNESSES:
  • Angrier than a Trandoshan - He is a cruel and silent alien that has no desire to talk or even think a lot about situations. His anger takes a hold of him and forces him to act irrationally.
  • Limited Edition - While underground he cannot swing to defend his rearguard that easily and can be taken by surprise, something that can be lethal to him.
  • Dies Poorly, but proudly. - He is not the supreme skylord he thinks. A simple fighter or someone with a excellent aim in handling a proper long range rifle can surely take him out easily.

HISTORICAL INFORMATION

Born in Stenos, Goldar was born with a curious anomaly of growing hair on his head. For the Stenax, he became a figure of weakness, an outcast almost rejected by his people because they considered him an aberration. Living as an outcast forced Goldar to survive by force, he killed members of his species and became a scourge from the skies of his planet, looting, pillaging and stealing what he needed (and wanted) to live.

When he was seventy years old, he left his home planet to live in Zeltros where he did not spend much more time than he would like, to soon become a security member of a curious noble alien who had been passing through the planet. Their duty was to protect the nobleman and be paid richly by him when they arrived at their destination in Kaikielius, the journey back was calm and they were successful, but when they arrived on the planet the nobleman refused to pay everything he owed and only paid half . Goldar didn't even argue with him, the stenax just drew his sword and stuck it in the elzeri's chest, he also didn't try to escape, he faced the police force openly and killed five men and twenty droids before he ended up being arrested.

His brutality and savagery caught the attention of Iedolas Solidor, who offered him a fair job opportunity with payments always in advance. Goldar accepted his offer and soon became an enforcer in the service of Solidor, crushing his rivals, training soldiers and killing the one his contractor wanted dead, he was soon assigned to serve his daughter whom he curiously created a certain affection for. He grew within her ranks, soon becoming another apprentice in servitude of the Darkness, learning its secrets and rising to become another of the newest generation of Dark Jedi in the galaxy.
 
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Judah Lesan

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Judah Lesan
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Everything looks good here except for one thing that we are going to need to address.

You have named this NPC Goldar, and you are using Goldar from the Power Rangers. This is a bit too on the nose for me. As I look over the strengths and weaknesses this really feels like a crossover in some ways. You may not be aware of it, but the Codex Guidelines do state:

No crossovers. All submissions need to conform to the general idea of Star Wars. No Gundams, no Transformers, no Pokemon etc.
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I think the solution is simple and would like to give you a couple of options on how we could proceed here:
  1. Change the name. If the character is not named Goldar, you could keep the art.
  2. Find a different image that is not Goldar from the Power Rangers. If you take this option you can keep the name.
The biggest issue for me is that one or the other be changed, but you cannot have both the art and the name. Once you have addressed this issue we should be good to go.
 
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