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Hi my name is Jamic (RP profile)

I walked into the office, I needed to hand in a sheet of my description in order to work for these Sith, I knew they were going to use it to target me in case I got out of control yet I still decided that I would give it to them, I just had to stay on there good side.

I came in wearing my normal attire,

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Then I proceeded to hand over the paper which read as follows:

NAME: Jamic
FACTION: N/A
RANK: Sith Ninja/Assassin
SPECIES: Human
AGE: 26
SEX: Male
HEIGHT: 188cm
WEIGHT: 80 kg
BMI: 22.6 (Healthy Wieght)
EYES: Yellow
HAIR: N/A
SKIN: Pale
FORCE SENSITIVE: Yes

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( STRENGTHS AND WEAKNESSES (Required: 2 Weaknesses Minimum) : )

He appeared at first like a nice man, only wanting to help me, "Alright, Jamic is it?" He said calmly.

"I'm going to ask you a few questions, Now what would you say is your main strength?" This came as expected, I knew from the start this was coming.

+ "I've had many years of training in the Assassin way. My Stealth is very strong, I can be undetected even by some of the strongest Force Users."

After saying this he looked me up and down and said "With every strength comes a weakness, in this case what would yours be?" The prominent question had been asked. I responded with;

- "The same training however provides my main weakness, I am useless in armed combat, I will always try to sneak behind my opponent and kill them before they have a chance to strike."

He looked at me and smiled "Well then, " his grin vanished "What's your personality like then?"

This question was less expected, I doubted he cared at all about my personality

+ "My personality is, well mixed some people would call it. If I sense no danger towards you and I am not busy then I will probably allow you to engage in conversation"

"And what was the mixed part all about then?"

- "Well, as stated my personality is also flawed, if I sense any danger towards you I will either attempt to eliminate you before you eliminate me or I will flee, usually the latter as I don't wish to kill people who are not my designated Targets"

He stared at me for a minute or two and a large smile spread across his face "Well then, why am I still alive? Do you not see me as a threat?" The voice he used was a mocking tone. "You seem strong but I'm here for a Job not to kill you"

APPEARANCE:

"What's your regular appearance like then? Or do you wear this everywhere?" He looked me up and down bizarrely.

" Well this cloak suits me well, I like the colour balance it has utilising the red and black. It's almost as if these colours were created to co-exist. Of course with all the black, It helps me blend in with the night in order to hide myself even better from the targets I have"

He seemed happy with my answer and proceeded with the questioning.

BIOGRAPHY:

"Tell me... about your upbringing."

This was obviously important, he was trying to gather information on my past to use against me. Oh well, I doubt this man would be alive for much longer.

"My home-world is long gone, even I have forgotten it. My parents are also a mystery to me. I do not care. As a young child, maybe aged 1 or two I was taken to a different world. Taris I believe it was called, I was taken there by somebody I then called my father, he took me away from my parents because apparently they abused me and did not want me. He was the man who discovered that I was strong in the force when he came home to find I had moved the place we lived in by a good half a mile. I was taken into the assassin academy at a young age due to the fact I showed great talent with the force. I passed the entrance exams easily and proceeded throughout the academy as a star pupil. I worked extremely hard to get this star pupil status and spent all my free time studying and practising. It wasn't very hard and I enjoyed killing the other students. Only a few of us passed and were granted the lightsaber I have now, I miss that school and I didn't get to freely kill that many people as an assassin and even killing for fun could get me in trouble with the likes of Jedi. But after I was freed from that planet I killed one of the examiners and stole his ship. I flew to a distant planet, I don't really remember names well. I killed to survive and stole money. It was a good living. I guess that brings us to now."

He stared me in the eyes and then proceeded to read my sheet again.

"I don't think you're what were looking for"

Of course I was disappointed but there was always other opportunities.

"I believe I'll be taking that sheet back then"

Naturally he refused to give me the sheet back so in turn I refused to spare his life.
 
[member="Jamic"]

Interesting way of writing a profile...

I will say, at 2 metres, 90kg of weight would make you skeletally thin, probably likely to snap like a twig at the first sign of any trauma. It's not healthy! At all!

Also...your home planet is long gone? And you've forgotten it, aged 26? Short memory right there :p

Beyond that...well, you've skipped over a lot of your Acolyte training in order to receive said lightsaber and be your assassin self. If I'm honest, I think that's a mistake: there are a lot of writers here (particularly among the Sith factions) that play with the assassin approach, and one of them could teach you from the ground up, so your skills and techniques would have solid writing behind them, RPs that can back up the fact that you were taught them. Just a thought!

Also, worth noting that the majority of writers here write in third-person style, so while the first-person can be handy, it's also oddly confusing (particularly if you use lots of pronouns). Might be something to take into consideration when you're writing with us!
 
[member="Teynara Jeralyr"]

Thanks for actually replying to this :D

As for the weight, I sorta guessed at that, I have no clue what the average weight would be.

As for the home planet, he was taken from it at a very young age, probably about 1 or 2 years old. I'm fairly certain I didn't know what this massive blue and green ball was called then XD but I do see your point.

As for the Acolyte training, I'll probably add that into my bio at a later date because I'm very tired rn and that wont help.

And I have many other characters that all use Third person and wanted to try out First person for myself :D
 
[member="Jamic"]

Your best bet for height/weight is to find a chart online to gives you an idea of what the appropriate weight would be for a person of that height, and go from there.

Being that young...fair enough. Might want to fill in where he went next, though - if he was taken from his homeworld, where did he end up? I can't imagine an academy of assassins raising a two-year-old. And who discovered his Force Sensitivity? Who enrolled him in the Academy you mentioned? What made him a 'star pupil'? You see where I'm going with this...

As for the first-person writing, good luck! I've seen a few people around here use it, but it often doesn't blend well with the third-person stuff used by the majority. That said, it might be entertaining to read, so hope it works out for you!
 

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