[member="Nate the Bounty Hunter"]
I think you're doing perfectly fine. I enjoy your writing a lot. Though…I feel like if you want to add in a little bit more "flair" and such, maybe add in a few details here and there. True, I don't add in too many details and not even enough as I need to…but hey, I'm lazy! But…just focus solely on what you're good at writing and experiment with different methods and ideas. After all, Katelyn was first intended to be a guys! (Don't ask…)
As for character, I'd try to add in more past expirence a from threads and such while you're writing. Yes…it's hard to do so, but take key threads that truly shaped your character. Or just…drop subtle hints at his history if something happened that later impacted him in a thread. You don't have to do this…but I feel like it add in a tiny bit more realistic stuff to your character.
Now as for weaknesses. I'd try and focus on making your weaknesses outnumber your strengths. At least…that's what I try to do. I usually try to give my characters very view strengths, though enough to still allow them to handle themselves. While I give them lots of weaknesses to make them seem somewhat 'weak' at times and more down to our perspective as if they were living and breathing in our own very world. Now, these can range from behavioral, to emotional, physical, you name it!
Personally, I enjoy writing with you! It helps realize some of the stress to be with somebody who is more relaxed and lashed back most of the time. I hope to continue to write with you in the future…along with hoping Nate dosent dump Katelyn. But who knows?! Also…try to be rash and risky as I stated above. After all…not much would've happened with Katelyn if I didn't try to get out of my little bubble. And man I gotta tell you…it was pretty scary doing that. But…looking back upon it, I'm glad I did it!
