Van Rolark
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So anyway, I'd like feedback on my writing and roleplay.
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How awful is my writing?
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Kaela Jaryn
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It's not awful at all! Personally I think you could go for a bit more description and scene setting, but that's just me. If you get stuck for ideas try describing smells, sights and other things worth noting, or something like that.
It's not awful at all! Personally I think you could go for a bit more description and scene setting, but that's just me. If you get stuck for ideas try describing smells, sights and other things worth noting, or something like that.
Did Someone Order a War?
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I enjoy Pavor, he has that edge of a caring rogue businessman, I was especially impressed when you added a touch of being unnerved by Tadietti's use of muscle at their meeting as well, made him feel a lot more human, and made her act more human (twi'lek) in response.
But you owe me (your dev) a post! If you want your droid cigars anyway Need at least 1 more each.
I enjoy Pavor, he has that edge of a caring rogue businessman, I was especially impressed when you added a touch of being unnerved by Tadietti's use of muscle at their meeting as well, made him feel a lot more human, and made her act more human (twi'lek) in response.
But you owe me (your dev) a post! If you want your droid cigars anyway
Need at least 1 more each.