drios
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Looking for feedback, please be honest as it will help me improve pls+ty.
Looking for feedback, please be honest as it will help me improve pls+ty.
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Improvements on Drios' bio + RP before he gets too deep?
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Daniel Imura
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All I can say is, if you're training with Krest, you're doing right by yourself. An amazing character as well as writer. Other than that, your profile looks really good so far 
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Drios, I wrote with you as Jade.
During our duel I enjoyed it a lot. You took measured hits and described your characters thoughts very well.
One thing I did note was that the description of your attacks was lacking. There were several instances where you swung and I was confused as to where your saber was, how you swung, where your body was angled at. All of these things come into play during a duel. You need to use all your five senses and good description to give your opponent a good idea of what's up.
(Also not every hit has to be a baseball bat swing)
I loved that you took the time to PM and reach out to me. That shows excellent sportsman like conduct.
My Challenge to you.
(I've been letting all my newer characters get creamed, as opposed to all my older chars usually trying to win at all costs. It's fun.)
6/10. Pretty awesome!
Drios, I wrote with you as Jade.
During our duel I enjoyed it a lot. You took measured hits and described your characters thoughts very well.
One thing I did note was that the description of your attacks was lacking. There were several instances where you swung and I was confused as to where your saber was, how you swung, where your body was angled at. All of these things come into play during a duel. You need to use all your five senses and good description to give your opponent a good idea of what's up.
(Also not every hit has to be a baseball bat swing
)I loved that you took the time to PM and reach out to me. That shows excellent sportsman like conduct.
My Challenge to you.
- Lose the next three duels you get into.
- Learn what it feels like IC and OOC to really just take a beating and get hammed. Then build a good nemesis story arc off of that or Improvement of skill story arc.
(I've been letting all my newer characters get creamed, as opposed to all my older chars usually trying to win at all costs. It's fun.)
6/10. Pretty awesome!