Iridonia Submission Feedback.

[Darth Ferus]

http://starwarsrp.net/topic/123180-iridonia-chaos-edition/

Hey I started it at least, but I'm halfway lost on what I'm doing. Grant it I'll figure it out as I go, but any feedback on how it is now and suggestions are why I made this thread. I'll be updating this thread with the changelog I put into the submission itself to see the feedback on the changes themselves. Really though, any help is welcome. This is a new thing for me to be doing.

 

[WelshPsych]

For help, I would like to point out that you use a picture of a beautiful alive city for something you then describe as burnt and destroyed. So either mention Zabraks rebuilt it or use something from like Dark Souls to show a ruined city.

Also, would Iridonia be "heavily populated"? I would have put it as average population at most.