Feedback Iris Arani: Looking For Knighthood

[Iris Arani]

Hey ya'll been a while since I wrote one. For Iris specifically anyway, and I used to do em monthly. Crazy how time changes over the years. That's right, it's been closing in on three years (or has already?) I've had her as a character. She started as literally a "hey give me an alien race" to a friend, noticed the Keshain could see extra colors, and bam. Iris, lost in color.

She's been a blast to write and develop from the head in the clouds kinda idiot trying to learn what it means to be a person. She's made tons of friends, enemies, even family. Faced some of the darkest folks out there and survived just running away. But every story's gotta keep evolving, right?

So imma just use this to snag story beats. Iris will eventually end up a Jedi Knight. I'm in no hurry or such, but I'm more curious what folks think she needs to do before she ends up one. What should she work on? What challenges should she face? You bet I'm outsourcing for ideas. So hit me with some.

Or y'know, just gimme feedback on her anyway. That's cool too.

 

[Jax Thio]

Jax definitely needs help right now, he's lost without his Force abilities and feels guilt for giving into the Dark Side.

 

[Jem Fossk]

I haven't followed your story close enough to say whether or not you've done this, but regardless of the character type I think independence is the biggest tell on if they are ready or now.

Even if the character is blithe with their head in the clouds, they can be competent enough to stand on their own in complex situations. Is Iris at a place where she doesn't need anyone to break out of trouble? Can she problem solve and show courage without outside help? She doesn't have to fight to resolve issues, either! Might be a fun arc to work through.

Quirky yet competent helpers-- they really are compelling in a story.

 

[Silas Westgard]

Hey ya'll been a while since I wrote one. For Iris specifically anyway, and I used to do em monthly. Crazy how time changes over the years. That's right, it's been closing in on three years (or has already?) I've had her as a character. She started as literally a "hey give me an alien race" to a friend, noticed the Keshain could see extra colors, and bam. Iris, lost in color.

She's been a blast to write and develop from the head in the clouds kinda idiot trying to learn what it means to be a person. She's made tons of friends, enemies, even family. Faced some of the darkest folks out there and survived just running away. But every story's gotta keep evolving, right?

So imma just use this to snag story beats. Iris will eventually end up a Jedi Knight. I'm in no hurry or such, but I'm more curious what folks think she needs to do before she ends up one. What should she work on? What challenges should she face? You bet I'm outsourcing for ideas. So hit me with some.

Or y'know, just gimme feedback on her anyway. That's cool too.

She needs to be tested on how she does when out of her comfort zone. For example, her paint is taken for a few months and she needs to prove that she can focus on the force and that alone. Doesn't have to be that of course, just something that proves she doesn't need things she regularly does to keep going.

 

[Kai Bamarri]

Damn, all these people are making much better suggestions than I did. I agree that Iris probably needs a finding (or continuing) independence arc, so follow their advice.

 

[Viera]

Iris has come far from when Viera brought her to the Jedi.

But yeah, I'd pretty much second what the others have already said. She started as someone who knew very little, learned a lot and has experienced quite a lot too. Whatever means it's through, independency is an important part of being a Knight. She needs to learn to consistantly fly without the support of her Master and others.

That and prepare for the dreaded day when Iris takes on a Padawan of her own.

 

[Corin Trenor]

To needlessly reinforce a point others have made, I think an independence arc can help. She seems to have faced most of what constitutes the trials and come out the other side, from what I've both heard and read, so this last little detail is sort of that confirmation to even let herself know that she's ready.

 

[Dreidi Xeraic]

Dreidi is in a similar boat to Iris at the moment. Not super close to being a Knight but finding her place in the Jedi and building the skills to where she is ready to do the trials necessary to be a Knight.

Also, Dreidi being a warrior while Iris is a healer is a fun contrast if you ever wanted to write some story together?