Unreviewed Kaelos Vryn's Lightsaber

[Kaelos Vryn]

SPECIAL FEATURES

• Duel Phase
• Rainbow Gem
• Relacite
• FFS- A.D.A.P.T. Saber Mod Kit
• Blade Lock

STRENGTHS

• Waterproof - Designed with a Bifurcating Cyclical-Ignition Pulse, this lightsaber functions even when deep under the big blue wet thing
• Versatile Activation: Multiple activation methods ensure reliability and convenience in various combat scenarios.
• Enhanced Safety: Includes a safety mechanism to prevent accidental activation and deactivation.
• Customization: Adjustable blade length, crystal array, and training mode for personalized performance.
• Improved Grip: The finger rings integrated into the hilt provide enhanced stability and control, ensuring a firm grasp on the sword even in the heat of battle or adverse conditions.
• Emp Proof: Can't be affected by EMP
• Cortosis Proof: Can't be turned off by Cortosis

WEAKNESSES

• Short Reach - In a galaxy full of blasters and explosives, a lightsaber has fairly short reach compared to these (though due to the Dual Phase abilities of this lightsaber it's still able to be longer than most.
• Void Stone Vulnerability: Effectiveness can be significantly dampened or nullified in the presence of Void Stone.
• Ysalamiri Effect: The crystal's powers are negated when within the vicinity of Ysalamiri.
• Locking Activator Vulnerability: Risk if the locking mechanism malfunctions, potentially causing harm to the wielder or allies.
• Pressure Grip Disadvantage: If the pressure sensor fails or is manipulated, the saber might deactivate at an inconvenient time.

DESCRIPTION
Built on Ilum by Kaelos Vryn under the guidance of Braze Kai'el , this weapon shows Kaelos' first step into his role as a Jedi. Kaelos underwent similar visions to most Jedi when they build a lightsaber and Kaelos had to fend off his visions in just the same way. He had a lot of say into how the weapon was designed, opting to keep the design quite simple and clean to represent his personality.

Kaelos recieved two gifts from Braze Kai'el upon completion of this weapon. The first was the Rainbow Gem which serves as one of the three crystals within this weapon and the second was the FFS - A.D.A.P.T Saber Mod Kit which was also fitted to this weapon. The other two Relacite crystals which make up the core of this weapon were summoned by the force for Kaelos when he built his weapon.

Due to the crystals contained within this weapon, it provides a green blade when activated.

(Image sourced from here and recoloured by Aadihr Lidos , thank you kindly. It's not showing on the template for some reason)

 

[Rara Gowisi]

Kaelos Vryn Hi I'll be reviewing this sub.

So, first of all.

FFS - A.D.A.P.T. Saber Mod Kit - This submission contains all strengths and weaknesses contained with this submission.

In an attempt to avoid link rabbit holes, I'd like you to spell out in this sub what those are. A submission should explain what it is capable of within the single submission, and not require a reader to go to another submission to understand.

Secondly,
I'd like you to add the Force Nullification weakness, as with any lightsaber, without the Force, it's less effective.

 

[Kaelos Vryn]

Kaelos Vryn Hi I'll be reviewing this sub.

So, first of all.

In an attempt to avoid link rabbit holes, I'd like you to spell out in this sub what those are. A submission should explain what it is capable of within the single submission, and not require a reader to go to another submission to understand.

Secondly,
I'd like you to add the Force Nullification weakness, as with any lightsaber, without the Force, it's less effective.

Done!

 

[Rara Gowisi]

Kaelos Vryn I appreciate it.

Alright, two things.

First off, you put Waterproof twice, I ask you remove one for neatness.

Secondly:

Emp Proof: Can't be affected by EMP

I'd like you to change the wording on this. Factory has always operated under the belief that nothing is truly invincible, unbreakable, whatever word you wish to use.

Can't is a very strong word, and it leaves room for abuse.

 

[Kaelos Vryn]

I'd like you to change the wording on this. Factory has always operated under the belief that nothing is truly invincible, unbreakable, whatever word you wish to use.

Can't is a very strong word, and it leaves room for abuse.

Politely, this is the exact weakness that is on FFS A.D.A.P.T Saber Mod Kit which is what you asked me to add. To quote yourself, "I'd like you to spell out in this sub what those are". So you either want me to copy over the weaknesses or you don't.

I'm not going to be changing this, as it's a direct copy of what was on the FFS A.D.A.P.T Saber Mod Kit spelt out, which is what you asked me for.

First off, you put Waterproof twice, I ask you remove one for neatness.

Done.

 

[Rara Gowisi]

Kaelos Vryn

The words I used were "Spell out", not copy.

Factory does not work on precedence, and each sub is going to be judged on it's own wording.

All I ask is you use less absolute language.

Emp Proof: Can't be affected by EMP

EMP Resistant: This saber is lined with a material that protects it's internals from high energy electromagnetic pulses.

This would be a more acceptable verbiage.