Logno

[Timothy Hoyt]

Name: Logno

Designation: Sentient

Homeworld: Melody

Language: Force Imagery

Average height of adults: 4.572

Skin color: Green, Brown, Black, White, Yellow, Dark Blue, Pink

Hair color: No Hair

Breathes: 78.084% Nitrogen, 20.946% Oxygen, and <1% of (Argon, Carbon Dioxide, Neon, Helium, & Methane)

Strengths:
Force Site: They can see all things through the force; Past, Present, Future. They can also see in the darkest of places through the force.

Force Imagery: They can communicate through sending an image through the force. This can have the added effect of being able to see what another logno is seeing at the time

Force Calm: They can send a calm feeling throughout an area to calm down their prey and get them to come closer to them. This makes it so they don't have to move from their spot.

Long Life: They have an extremely long lifespan. This means that most of their elders are smarter than most.

Thick Hide: They have a lot of fat on them due to inactivity. This makes it so that they aren't easily hurt.
Weaknesses: [2 minimum]
Mute: Just like all natives to Melody, they can not make a sound from their throats.
No Opposable Thumb: They can't pick anything up with their front paws due to them not having opposable thumbs. this is one of the main reasons they haven't made anything even though they have lived for 29.9 Million years.
Laziness: This makes it so that they aren't likely to go anywhere once they choose a spot to stay. This also means that they are likely to procrastinate.
Distinctions: They look like Reptilian Frogs. They are also extremely tall and fat.

Average Lifespan: 511 years

Races: None

Diet: Small Animals and Insects is their main diet, any kind of plant is poisonous to them

Communication: Force

Culture: They have a simple culture. Watch the force, see what is going on, keep an eye out for natural disasters, sit there and do nothing. It has worked for 29.9 million years, why change it?

Technology level: They do not have any technology. All technology on the planet was made or imported by the Musicians who are entertaining to watch.

General behavior: The lazy couch potato, all they do is sit on their logs and watch what ever the force decides to show them, or the animals that decide to come near them, especial the Musicians.

History: 29.9 Millions years of just sitting there and watching the force and avoiding natural disasters.

Force Pandemic & Execution of Music Free Force Users: 5000 Years Ago-5500 Years Ago: This was an awful time for both the logno and musicians. A disease had spread on the planet through the force. Many Musicians thought the "First Spirit" was angry at them because some of the Musicians started to use the force without giving the "First Spirit" an offering of music. The logno had also received the sickness and had requested the musicians to see if they could find a medical reason for it. The musicians refused and instead killed the ones who used the force without giving music to the "First Spirit". A few years later the pandemic stopped spreading and while it was still present, they gained an immunity to it.

Clef's Destruction Prophecy: 2000 Years Ago: The logno had a huge scare in the force. They saw Treble go supernova and wipe out the entire solar system with the exception Bass who grew three times it's current size. However, what is worse is the fact the after the supernova ended, Treble suddenly shrunk and formed a black hole which pulled all the material in the system into it. This pushed the logno to actually looking into ways of leaving the planet along side the Musicians.

Notable Player-Characters: None

Intent: I wanted a species that is lazier then the hutts, but also has a purpose. They are warning systems on the planet for natural disasters. They also are good friends for the Musicians, some of whom actually worship these fat luggs. Though to their credit, most logno don't like being worshipped, though the free food is always appreciated

 

[Valiens Nantaris]

@[member="hoytti"]

There’s some very oddly specific numbers here. I think for instance you can say ‘Breathes Type I Atmosphere’ rather than giving the nitrogen amount. And anyway, that’s the human count isn’t it? Best not to include anything unless you have something worthwhile worked out.

After reading through this submission a couple of things came to me.

• I don’t understand the purpose of this race.
• I don’t understand anything about this race by reading what’s here.
• I don’t understand this submission…period.

Let’s go through each in turn.
I don’t understand why you are making this race. If it’s just for local colour, I suppose I could get that, but there’s so many odd things here that makes me wonder why they were submitted.

I don’t understand or get a feel for this race. It’s like you’ve taken one idea and just put that down. If they are sentient they sure haven’t done much. To be sentient for a purported 29 million years and not have developed any social, cultural, religious or governmental organisation defies belief. It doesn’t make sense, even for the laziest creature.

Overall, I don’t get this submission. We’ll get to the problems below, but I guess I’m just not on the same wavelength here. You have some ideas which are passible, but mostly it feels underdone, undercooked, like you’ve run with a basic idea without going further.

So, I’ll list issues I have, and you can change or discuss them with me.

• We need a picture…or a much better written description. I have no idea what this looks like at the moment.
• Height: 4.572 in…what? Metres? That’s huge, and would require hundreds of kilograms of food a day to feed. Drop this down to something more reasonable, or make a point of it in the submission.
• Force *Sight*. I don’t understand this ability. Can they consciously see everything because if so that needs to be changed as the abuse possible is huge. If it’s involuntary then explain more about it.
• Force Imagery. Can they see what another one is seeing even if the other doesn’t want them to? How does this work?
• Force Calm. I think…this has some promise, but it won’t lead the prey right to them.
• No Opposable Thumb/Laziness. Sorry, this is a cop out. Anything remotely sentient that’s lived this long would have figured out a way around this. Species in Star Wars have developed civilisations without thumbs!
• Distinctions. I need much more detail. I can’t imagine what a reptilian frog looks like. A picture is worth a thousand words.
• Average lifespan. Oddly specific. I’m not comfortable with just slapping an average of 500 years onto something. Make it a part of the submission or drop it down.
• Diet. As discussed, anything this big would rapidly eat out all the small animals and insects in a given area making this implausible. At least having some leaves or grass would make sense as it would be more easily available.
• Culture/Technology/Behaviour. I don’t buy it for all the reasons stated above. I think this is simplistic. A lot more work needs to go on here. How do they interact? Do they have any social constructs at all? What are the gender and family roles? How do they raise their children? What do they believe? This should be the meat of any submission.
• History. Very abbreviated. I don’t buy the 29 million years thing. That’s just a random number far beyond the scope of Star Wars canon, and I don’t like it. This needs to be fleshed out much more.
• Black Holes. They don’t work this way. They’re not celestial plug holes which suck everything in, they’re a force of gravity which acts exactly like a star to anything orbiting it…except invisible.

So pretty much the entire submission needs to be substantially reworked. I will give you that chance, but without big changes this will be denied.

 

[Arage Bao]

Archived due to inactivity, feel free to resubmit the species at your earliest convenience.