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Approved Starship "Mandalore's Fist" Citadel Light Attack Freighter

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Haon Hafey

Metal Lord
Haon Hafey
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OUT OF CHARACTER INFORMATION
  • Intent: Create a very mean, dedicated Attack Light Freighter. Challenging self and wanting to make people scream in fear.
  • Image Source: Here
  • Canon Link: N/A
  • Permissions: N/A
  • Primary Source: N/A
PRODUCTION INFORMATION
TECHNICAL SPECIFICATIONS
STANDARD FEATURES

Life Support

ADVANCED SYSTEMS


STRENGTHS
  • Extreme Firepower: This thing is with all intents and purposes, terrifying. It has a wide array of weaponry to take out ships from inorganic, droid to organic itself. With enough firepower, it can go toe to toe with a corvette and possibly a frigate, all on its own. This also includes extra targeting systems and droid data brains to take over the turrets in case of no one around to fire them.
  • You Can't See Me...Or Hurt Me Well!: With a pure coating of Phkalt Metal, it can shimmer in and out of frame to make it exceptional difficult to find through the naked eye. In addition, it is quite hard to destroy with blaster cannon technology with electrical weaponry bouncing off it without harm, making it perfect for going into ionic storms. That including a shield multiplier and an Ion Shield just in case, makes it rather difficult to kill.
  • Ludicrious Speed, GO!: Not only due to the SLAM MK.II but also being outfitted with a Plaid Path Engine, making it extremely fast going through hyperspace.
WEAKNESSES
  • Emergency Break, Never Use!: Emergency Braking without slowing down, will tear the light freighter apart when using the SLAM MK. II. It is recommended to slow down first!
  • I Got Big Wings and Cannot Lie!: Shooting off the wings will neuter a good chunk of weaponry and they are large targets. In addition, each side wing (Left/Right) that is destroyed, reduces the maneuverability by one rating (Low then Very Low). If the bottom wing is destroyed, speed is reduced by one rating (High to Average) and also disables the SLAM MK.II System. If all wings are destroyed, the craft is then immediately disabled as flight controls will no longer respond.
  • All Weapons, All Arc Pain: Just because there is a lot of weapons, does not mean it can all focus on the same target. A turret on the left clearly won't be able to have help from the right side, behind or vise versa. If one needs to use the Pseudosonic Cannons, they have to purposely aim in one direction. A skilled fighter pilot wishing to avoid certain firepower could easily keep to a certain side of the freighter to prevent such occurrences.
DESCRIPTION
There was once a bit, that one cannot make a light freighter not only terrifying, but equally devastating and long lasting in a fight, mocking Have Gun Will Travels abilities to produce anything effective. Haon Hafey stared down the individual and called the person out and began to work on a light freighter he acquired from a junkyard. Within a week, he had the executives over in his system to overlook its progress...by destroying their own corvette escort as a show of strength. After that point, the others that rivaled against him backed down from doing other challenges, the starship in question named strangely "Centerfold", possibly due to the amount of song lyrics he heard producing the ship, is now on display for purchase for anyone who wants something this devastating in their collection. Name was changed from a mysterious Mandalorian, apparently liking it to Mandalore's Fist.
 
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Martin Draigo

GDI CEO
Martin Draigo
Character Bio
Haon Hafey said:

TryThis.webp

​

OUT OF CHARACTER INFORMATION
  • Intent: Create a very mean, dedicated Attack Light Freighter. Challenging self and wanting to make people scream in fear.
  • Image Source: Here
  • Canon Link: N/A
  • Permissions: N/A
  • Primary Source: N/A
PRODUCTION INFORMATION
TECHNICAL SPECIFICATIONS
STANDARD FEATURES

Life Support

ADVANCED SYSTEMS


STRENGTHS
  • Extreme Firepower: This thing is with all intents and purposes, terrifying. It has a wide array of weaponry to take out ships from inorganic, droid to organic itself. With enough firepower, it can go toe to toe with a corvette and possibly a frigate, all on its own. This also includes extra targeting systems and droid data brains to take over the turrets in case of no one around to fire them.
  • You Can't See Me...Or Hurt Me Well!: With a pure coating of Phkalt Metal, it can shimmer in and out of frame to make it exceptional difficult to find through the naked eye. In addition, it is quite hard to destroy with blaster cannon technology with electrical weaponry bouncing off it without harm, making it perfect for going into ionic storms. That including a shield multiplier and an Ion Shield just in case, makes it rather difficult to kill.
  • Ludicrious Speed, GO!: Not only due to the SLAM MK.II but also being outfitted with a Plaid Path Engine, making it extremely fast going through hyperspace.
WEAKNESSES
  • Emergency Break, Never Use!: Emergency Braking without slowing down, will tear the light freighter apart when using the SLAM MK. II. It is recommended to slow down first!
  • I Got Big Wings and Cannot Lie!: Shooting off the wings will neuter a good chunk of weaponry and they are large targets.
DESCRIPTION
There was once a bit, that one cannot make a light freighter not only terrifying, but equally devastating and long lasting in a fight, mocking Have Gun Will Travels abilities to produce anything effective. Haon Hafey stared down the individual and called the person out and began to work on a light freighter he acquired from a junkyard. Within a week, he had the executives over in his system to overlook its progress...by destroying their own corvette escort as a show of strength. After that point, the others that rivaled against him backed down from doing other challenges, the starship in question named strangely "Centerfold", possibly due to the amount of song lyrics he heard producing the ship, is now on display for purchase for anyone who wants something this devastating in their collection. Name was changed from a mysterious Mandalorian, apparently liking it to Mandalore's Fist.
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As always, it's a joy to review your subs, as they are very well put together.

There are really only two relatively minor issues that require attention.

Technical Specifications:
  • SLAM MK. II: The ‘SLAM MK. II’ submission you are using in this submission is currently in the prefactory. Please post this submission into the factory proper. Once that is done, this can be used. Just please remember to update your links.
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Weaknesses:
  • I've given a lot of thought to this, going back and forth. After careful thought and consultation with a few others, I've come to the decision to bring it up. As you well know, the factory doesn't concern itself with pvp balance and such. However, from a technological standpoint, I believe it's more than fair to say this ship is 'doing a lot' and 'has a lot going on'. It's a very impressive compilation of tech that makes sense.

    HOWEVER

    I am of the opinion that the weaknesses section does not appropriately counterbalance the rather impressive features you are listing. Outside of a few 'what if' scenarios (using the E-break, and getting your wings targetted and shot to the point of sustaining significant damage), there really isn't anything on here that demonstrates a notable weakness in functionality. Therefore, it is my recommendation that one additional significant weakness be added. That said, this critique is leaning a bit on personal preference. So if you are comfortable with how it stands, I'm open to approving this 'as is' minus the other issue brought up above.
 
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Haon Hafey

Metal Lord
Haon Hafey
Character Bio
Must have missed it, sorry on the SLAM MK II...which also means it is already on an approved submission from beforehand. Something that I will have to repair personally later.

As for the weakness, I did add in one to talk on arcs, much like a star destroyer, it cannot bear down all the weapons at once, much as it wants to.

The E-Break, while a bit of a "what if" is mainly designed to not let people abuse the SLAM MK.II as it merely just shoots the target forward at high speeds...couple that with also the hyperdrive which has the weakness of if kicked out of hyperspace, it damages the starship no matter what...one does not need to think what happens in the long run.

As for the Big Wings and I Cannot Lie, they are just massive hit boxes which house different sets of weapon parts. Citadel Freighters are mainly a turret based, light freighter. If you blow a wing off, it will do critical amount of damage and destroy a set of weapons. There is even a wing underneath that houses the bottom turret. In all, blowing off all the wings which all have a turret, I believe would only leave a set of missiles, a mine layer and the rear laser cannons. Still deadly but far from the Extreme category at that point.

However, I do see that it does need a bit more...punishment. Therefore, I have added multiple problems if one gets blown off with consequences for all three being destroyed.

Lastly, I had to repair the Hyperdrive Rating as it is actually 0.005. Otherwise, no other changes.

I await.
Martin Draigo Martin Draigo
 
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Martin Draigo

GDI CEO
Martin Draigo
Character Bio
Haon Hafey said:

TryThis.webp

​

OUT OF CHARACTER INFORMATION
  • Intent: Create a very mean, dedicated Attack Light Freighter. Challenging self and wanting to make people scream in fear.
  • Image Source: Here
  • Canon Link: N/A
  • Permissions: N/A
  • Primary Source: N/A
PRODUCTION INFORMATION
TECHNICAL SPECIFICATIONS
STANDARD FEATURES

Life Support

ADVANCED SYSTEMS


STRENGTHS
  • Extreme Firepower: This thing is with all intents and purposes, terrifying. It has a wide array of weaponry to take out ships from inorganic, droid to organic itself. With enough firepower, it can go toe to toe with a corvette and possibly a frigate, all on its own. This also includes extra targeting systems and droid data brains to take over the turrets in case of no one around to fire them.
  • You Can't See Me...Or Hurt Me Well!: With a pure coating of Phkalt Metal, it can shimmer in and out of frame to make it exceptional difficult to find through the naked eye. In addition, it is quite hard to destroy with blaster cannon technology with electrical weaponry bouncing off it without harm, making it perfect for going into ionic storms. That including a shield multiplier and an Ion Shield just in case, makes it rather difficult to kill.
  • Ludicrious Speed, GO!: Not only due to the SLAM MK.II but also being outfitted with a Plaid Path Engine, making it extremely fast going through hyperspace.
WEAKNESSES
  • Emergency Break, Never Use!: Emergency Braking without slowing down, will tear the light freighter apart when using the SLAM MK. II. It is recommended to slow down first!
  • I Got Big Wings and Cannot Lie!: Shooting off the wings will neuter a good chunk of weaponry and they are large targets. In addition, each side wing (Left/Right) that is destroyed, reduces the maneuverability by one rating (Low then Very Low). If the bottom wing is destroyed, speed is reduced by one rating (High to Average) and also disables the SLAM MK.II System. If all wings are destroyed, the craft is then immediately disabled as flight controls will no longer respond.
  • All Weapons, All Arc Pain: Just because there is a lot of weapons, does not mean it can all focus on the same target. A turret on the left clearly won't be able to have help from the right side, behind or vise versa. If one needs to use the Pseudosonic Cannons, they have to purposely aim in one direction. A skilled fighter pilot wishing to avoid certain firepower could easily keep to a certain side of the freighter to prevent such occurrences.
DESCRIPTION
There was once a bit, that one cannot make a light freighter not only terrifying, but equally devastating and long lasting in a fight, mocking Have Gun Will Travels abilities to produce anything effective. Haon Hafey stared down the individual and called the person out and began to work on a light freighter he acquired from a junkyard. Within a week, he had the executives over in his system to overlook its progress...by destroying their own corvette escort as a show of strength. After that point, the others that rivaled against him backed down from doing other challenges, the starship in question named strangely "Centerfold", possibly due to the amount of song lyrics he heard producing the ship, is now on display for purchase for anyone who wants something this devastating in their collection. Name was changed from a mysterious Mandalorian, apparently liking it to Mandalore's Fist.
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Thank you! Enjoy.

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