Bloodknight
The Artist
I was paid no to curse, so I'm going to keep this short and sweet.
So I'm what you would call a Matukai, I hear. My writer is what I'd call a book reader. He's interested in martial arts--has been since he was a little kid--but instead of practicing them like a man, he sits his lazy behind on a chair and reads about them or reads them in his fantasy books or whatever. So he does his research and now knows about techniques it took me years to master.
He recently wrote me fighting a bunch of mooks, NPCs, and wanted some feedback on it once he found this section of the site. I told him it was terrible and he should kill himself, but apparently my opinions are worth jack shi--*clears throat*-- bottom line, he wants your feedback. Focusing specifically on how you think he did portraying the pacing, emotion, what you wished he would have done better, what he could do to improve, etcetera, etcetera.
(Feel free to answer ICly or OOCly. Any way you'd prefer)
So I'm what you would call a Matukai, I hear. My writer is what I'd call a book reader. He's interested in martial arts--has been since he was a little kid--but instead of practicing them like a man, he sits his lazy behind on a chair and reads about them or reads them in his fantasy books or whatever. So he does his research and now knows about techniques it took me years to master.
He recently wrote me fighting a bunch of mooks, NPCs, and wanted some feedback on it once he found this section of the site. I told him it was terrible and he should kill himself, but apparently my opinions are worth jack shi--*clears throat*-- bottom line, he wants your feedback. Focusing specifically on how you think he did portraying the pacing, emotion, what you wished he would have done better, what he could do to improve, etcetera, etcetera.
(Feel free to answer ICly or OOCly. Any way you'd prefer)
