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Approved NPC Midr Karilyar Tank Crew

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OUT OF CHARACTER INFORMATION
CREW INFORMATION
  • Crew Name: Midr Karilyar (Tiger Crew)
  • Crew Type: Combat Tank Crew
  • Base of Operations: Myrkr or wherever deployed.
  • Crew Size: 5
  • Loyalties: The Mandalorian Union, Torrack Australis,Kaine Australis, Forjund Australis, Kreslin Westwind and Venku Bralor.
  • Description: An elite tank unit that comprises of the founding clans that founded the mandalorian union, this unit is built around the doctrine of attacking fast and then quickly withdrawing. Designed as a destructive armored force with a durable vehicle to boot, these tankers are led by Torrack Australis and tend to work well with his other units that are under his command.
CREW MEMBER 1
  • Name: Hans Bralor
  • Age: 70 years old
  • Species: Ugnaught.
  • Role: Tank Driver
  • Description: Ugnaughts could live for two hundred years before dying, generally considered one of the hardest working species and shortest . Many tended to be highly intelligent and wise due to their long lifespan. Such qualities were perfect for those were were tankers, especially with being hauled up in a tight space made of metal. Hans was taken in and raised by Clan Bralor as an orphan. Known for his hard work that gave the positive stereotype of his species, the clan transferred him to this newly formed and elite unit to be made the tank drive. Such intelligence and coping skills from the dry and calculating individual would make a fine addition to this feared tank crew.
CREW MEMBER 2
  • Name: Erin Westwind
  • Age: 26
  • Species: Gran.
  • Role: Tank Gunner
  • Description: Named Erin, this sarcastic jokester is one of the best shots in Clan Westwind. This female Gran is lucky to be apart of the species with the best eyesight available in the galaxy. Known to have impeccable vision, this tanker can also see infrared naturally. With Mandalorian accuracy that is deadly, and with the greatest sight available. This Gran is the perfect addition in the crew as the gunner.
CREW MEMBER 3
  • Name: Max Australis
  • Age: 30
  • Species: Twi'lek.
  • Role: Combat Engineer
  • Description: Raised from birth as a baby orphan, Max's confidence and rigid personality is what he is known for. A perfectionist at heart, he was made to be a combat engineer, with his main responsibility to repair and keep the vehicle they crew operational. Prone to fixate on the little details, sometimes Torrack has to remind him aggressively to hurry up.
CREW MEMBER 4
  • Name: Lud Bralor
  • Age: 20
  • Species: Human
  • Role: Comms Operator
  • Description: The youngest one among the crew, Lud was also transfered from clan Bralor to work as the Comms operator. Young and cocky, this operator is fluent in a multitude of languages and of course in mandoa. With energy, Lud is good at getting the message across quickly, and under pressure. Being a human also makes it easier with the natural smoothness in which his race speaks.
CREW MEMBER 5
  • Name: Beemo Westwind
  • Age: 32
  • Species: Rodian.
  • Role: Sensor Operator
  • Description: Having all the positive traits of his race, such as having dexterous hands, and quick moving eyes. Beemo is a disciplined veteran who has fought in many battles as a sniper. With quick reaction times learned through battle, he was quickly retrained as a sensor operator for this tank crew. Sensor operators needed to report their findings quickly, or else the crew could be subjected to ambushes or being killed by a deadly explosive that can be avoided. Tough and able for the job, Beemo is up to the task.

HISTORICAL INFORMATION
After the formation of the Mandalorian Union, one of the many initiatives of the new nation was to form smaller elite units that can fight in any terrain possible. As a form of unity, these units would have mandalorians from the founding clans to pulled to form such units. As a result the deadly and elite tanker crew called Midr Karilyar meaning "Tiger Crew" in Mandoa was formed. With Torrack hand picked as the tank commander, the clans all sent proper candidates to fill the remaining positions. This resulted in a scary combination of individuals that each have unique skills and together create a scary mandalorian tank crew with great talent. The tank crew may be made up of different clans, but their friendship and comradery makes it seem like they are all from the same clan. While no major battles have been fought, their individual records speak for themselves.
 
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Fevris Derzelas

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Hi there! I'll be reviewing your sub. I am a trainee codex judge, so this will require secondary approval.

This looks good, but there are some things we'll have to work through before I can pass this on for secondary review. Let's get started!

1. Permissions
  • Here you should list links to proof (most commonly screenshots or market purchases) that you have permission to use items, characters or lore created by other people if your character is not already featured in the Affiliation fields of said subs. In this case, you match the permission requirements to use the Thunder-class Assault Raider because you are a member of Clan Australis, so you can put N/A (not applicable) in this field. There is no need to list the rest of Clan Australis' members.
2. Links
  • You seem to be missing a link you intended to put here:
  • The links to the relevant characters should lead to their bios, please replace the mentions for these links: Kaine Australis, Forjund Australis, Kreslin Westwind, Venku Bralor.
  • As a side note, I suggest using the hyperlink tool instead of copy pasting the links themselves to make this easier on the eyes. To do this, just select your text and click on this icon:
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3. Loyalties

Let me know if you need any help with the edits!
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Fevris Derzelas Fevris Derzelas | Torrack Torrackstur Torrack Torrackstur

This is a really nicely put together submission, good job you two. There are only a few things that jump out at me that we still need to look at.

1) Permissions

Just a note here, but the Thunder-class Assault Raider is not affiliated with the Mandalorian Union so if that's the tank they'll be using make sure to obtain permissions for it before using it in RP.

2) Loyalties

You have said:


These links should really be in the loyalties tab, or in a subheader beneath it for ease of location.
 
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