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Musicians

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Name:Musicians

Designation: Sentient

Homeworld: Melody

Language: Musical Sequence

Average height of adults: 2.72 meters

Skin color: Shades of Brown

Hair color: Blond, Brown, Black, Grey, White

Breathes: 78.084% Nitrogen, 20.946% Oxygen, and <1% of (Argon, Carbon Dioxide, Neon, Helium, & Methane)

Strengths:
Force Control – They have excellent control of the force through the playing of their instrument. Playing different notes will cause the force to do different things. This music is separate from their language.

Force Guidance – They believe that the force is a guide, Because of this, they are likely to choose the correct choice when given a decision.

Weaknesses:
Mute – The don't have any vocal cords.

Force Guidance – Due to their belief that the force is a guide, they are more easily persuaded to do stuff through Force Persuasion.

Distinctions: Mute and always carrying an instrument.

Average Lifespan: 20 Planet Years (82 Galactic Years)

Races: Woodwinds, Brass, Percussion, Keyboard, & Strings

Diet: Same as Humans

Communication: Musical Instruments

Culture:
Important Events:
The New Years Ensemble – Every New Years (1 planet orbit), at midnight, All the Musicians Start to play a song,This song could be heard throughout the planet. In fact, cloaked ships

The 2 Year Dance – When a Musician turns 2, The force guides the young Musician in choosing the instrument they will learn how to play. After the child chooses, their family & friends dance the night away.

The 5 Year Performance – When a Musician turns 5, they perform in front of family and friends to show them what they have learned.

Wedding Ceremony - The Wedding Ceremony on Melody is a giant ball with all family and friends being there.

Religion: The religion of this Planet is quite interesting. They believe that the music that they create is used by the force to live. In exchange, the force leads their people on the path the force wants them to go. Because of this, they follow both the light and dark side of the force. As such, they are neutral in the force. The force also helps them when they need it.

Motto: Music is the soother of souls and the keeper of peace.

The Force: The Force is, to them, a guide for their life. Of course they can choose what they do, but the force is there to nudge them in the right direction. Some of them follow the force without question, others are more lenient and consider it there just to show what paths they can take. They can also use the force to help out with physical labor as they play their music.

Society: They are a unified people. As such, they have come together to make music constantly.

Everyday Life: While there are many jobs out there for the Musicians, one thing is constant for them. They are always playing music. Some songs that they play are meant to help control the force as they work while others are for communication. The ability to do work through song using the force was discovered way before they even left their planet's atmosphere.

Art: Besides music there isn't much in terms of art. The only other “Art” there is is the architecture that was made for great acoustics.

Clothing: They have an extremely formal look to them. In fact, they almost look like they are in a uniform.

Technology level: They are nearly on par with the Galactic Standard of Technological Advancement due to trading technology. They also found ways to turn their instruments into weapons.

General behavior: The species as a whole is generally peaceful. They are also lovers of music and will play music whenever possible. However, you shouldn't underestimate them when they are angry.

History:
Major Events & Eras: These are the events & eras that are most important for the planet. All years are Galactic Basic not Planet Years.
First Musicians: 12 Million Years Ago: The first Musicians were tribal. They hunted for meat in groups with spears just like humans did. They also had a sense of where they had to go to get food so they never went hungry. The Jedi Counsel has confirmed that they used the force to hunt and forage.


Lagno & Musicians First Contact: 11 Million Years Ago: The lagno and musicians made first contact 11 Million Years ago. The musicians at this time only used body language to communicate while the lagno used the force to mentally connect with one another. It didn't take long for them to understand each other. The lagno became surprised when the musicians bowed down to them only later to be discovered that the musicians consider them gods. Most lagno denied it though they never turned down the free food that the musicians would bring. This meeting sparked a friendship between the lagno and the musicians which later kept the musicians alive as the lagno warned the musicians that a drought was on it's way.

Third Mass Extinction & Great Drought: 10 Million Years ago – 9 Million Years Ago: Musicians and logno both took refuge near lakes during this time, especially Lake Forte and Lake Fortissimo.

Clap Communication First Found: 9.5 Million Years Ago: The first clap communication came to be due to the fact that it actually confused prey as well as gave them the ability to talk to someone even if they were not looking at them. It confused some Musicians at first but they quickly came up with a form of communication. Also snaps were added later on. They also created a Force clap that replaced their bows and spears to take down prey. Of course they all thought it was a gift from a god who loved their clapping.

First Instrument: 9.4 Million Years Ago: The first instrument was a drum made out of a wooden box covered in animal skin. They also discovered that The First Soul can travel on their sound waves and will only affect those that they want it to affect. This became a primary weapon for the musicians. A weapon that is still used today. They also discovered that if you beat the drum a certain way then you can move objects any way you want.

First Town: 8 Million Years Ago: The first town was set up near one of the Logno's logs. They would hunt and fish and gather food not just for the Musicians but also for the logno whose name ruffly translates to Kimimo.

The Empire Era: 7.5 Million Years Ago – 1 Million Years Ago: During this time, the planet was plunged into war between many empires. Also, the logno was quiet during this time, only willing to talk to those who were friendly. However, when a logno got hurt they had enough and demanded that the Musicians must create a single government and must follow the rules of no violence unless in self-defense. Advancement in structures and technology had advanced greatly during this time. All the way to the point of being able to reach G-Major.

The World Government Era: 1 Million years ago – 1000 Years Ago: This era was run by a single world government that is led by a council with a single logno and a group of 20 musicians. The council is re-voted upon every planet year and has completely new members each time. No one who had already been on the council may be placed on the council a second time. This is so that greed can not set in on a council member. Science also continued to grow until finally the first Hyperdrive was made.

Force Use Banned: 700,000 Years Ago - 699,999 Years Ago: An attempt to get the Musicians to stop using the force in everyday activity, The Force Use Ban only lasted a year. This is because some of the things they do can only be done through the force. This Ban caused riots throughout the planet which made them repeal it a year after it was initiated.

The Single Currency Act: 500,000 Years Ago: It took 500,000 years to get to this point, but finally the single currency was chosen. Translated the currency is called Notes, the notes are split up into Whole, Half, Quarter, & 8th Notes. Of course this tells you how much each note is worth. In the Republic System The 8th Note is worth 5 Credit, Quarter is 10 Credits, Half is 50 Credits, and Whole is 100 Credits.

Force Pandemic & Execution of Music Free Force Users: 5000 Years Ago-5500 Years Ago: This was an awful time for both the logno and musicians. A disease had spread on the planet through the force. Many Musicians thought the "First Spirit" was angry at them because some of the Musicians started to use the force without giving the "First Spirit" an offering of music. The logno had also received the sickness and had requested the musicians to see if they could find a medical reason for it. The musicians refused and instead killed the ones who used the force without giving music to the "First Spirit". A few years later the pandemic stopped spreading and while it was still present, they gained an immunity to it.

First Hyperdrive Invented & The Jedi Council First Contact: 1000 Years Ago: The first hyperdrive was invented 1000 years ago. Due to the force being strong on the planet, the Jedi Council has kept a close eye on the planet and waited for the Musicians to create a hyperdrive. Once they did, the Jedi Council came to Melody and to try to bring them into the order. However, the Musicians refused starting “You dare to control The First Spirit without giving him and offering!? We shall never join you!” The council left deject as well as a little bit unsettled. They believed that the Musicians were dark users. However, it came to be discovered later that it wasn't the case. Instead, they are neutral in the force. The first contact with the logno was no better as the logno refused to leave their home for any reason what so ever.

The Republic, Empire, & Hutt First Contact: 1000 Years Ago: The three major groups came to Melody, right after the Jedi, to try to convince them to become part of their group. The republic promised freedom and a place on the republic council. The Empire promised power and strength for all eternity. The Hutts promised wealth, slaves, & entertainment. Needless to say, it didn't work out as planned. The Musicians said that they are willing to be a neutral territory in all conflicts. All three factions were allowed to send people to their planet to set up shops. However, the fee for doing so is a new technology each year. Also, they must agree to follow every law on Melody or else that person will be exiled from their planet.

The Cantina Fiasco: 1000 Years Ago: This is classified as one of the funniest events to ever happen in the galaxy. As soon as permission was given, The Galactic Cantina Company Set up shop on Melody. However, opening night for their cantina was a disaster. Turns out that the main music played in most cantinas around the galaxy is actually an insult on Melody. Ruffly translated the song is saying, “You are as dumb as a mindomog,” which is the dumbest creature on Melody. Because of this, a giant fight broke out in the cantina and since then the cantina has been careful to only use local music on Melody.

The Melody Shipyard & Docking Site Created: 500 Years ago: The first shipyard and docking site was created 500 years after first contact, the reason for this is because they wanted to make it big enough to house the biggest ships. The size of the Shipyard and Docking site is so large that makes a ring around the planet just outside G-Major's Orbit. Before it was complete they had designated landing areas for small shuttles.

Notable Player-Characters: None Yet

Intent: The species for a future Character. They will also be a way to help all sorts of characters to relax.
 

Valik

Professor of Alchemy
First of all, you can't edit a submission after it's approved(Or denied). Therefore you'll need to put up your picture now rather than later. Anyways, onto the real stuff.

You're thinking of gravity backwards higher gravity means shorter people, not larger people. Although I'm not your planet judge I can tell you anything more than 2 or 3x normal gravity is too much to support life of anykind, let alone moving beings. Think of it this way, Gravity if a force pushing you downwards. If that force is more your biology stops your growth more, because it literally takes more force(food) to grow. Therefore your muscles might be naturally denser, skin tougher, but a high-gravity environment wouldn't make a person large or superhuman, just a shorter guy who happens to be more swole than normal.

As for your weaknesses, they're the same thing. I'm going to need another weakness that isn't related to their mute nature.

Your lifespan is extremely long, the Star Wars Universe in canon has only been around a little over 100,000K years. Lower it to something much more reasonable. It is very rare for a species to have a four-digit lifespan, and I'm not in the habit of allowing it unless an extremely long lifespan is one of the larger points of the submission.

A sentence for culture is not acceptable. You're creating an entire new species, I could spend essays describing the culture of Hispanic culture in Canada. We don't require that sort of detail but you're describing the culture of an entire species, and one that isn't based on anything in canon. The culture should be extensive. What makes them decide to play the instrument they do? The music they play? How do they view people who use different instruments or styles of music? Do they dance, compete, sabotage others? There are a hundred unanswered questions here.

They also found ways to turn their instruments into weapons.
This is okay, but I'm going to need to remind you that any non-canon technology will have to go through the factory before it can be roleplayed with.

Similar to the culture, the general behavior and history are extremely lacking, lots of unanswered questions, how did they progress into this way or that way? What did they do once they realized they could communicate? etc etc.



Please @me when you're done, and if you'd like any assistance in any matters feel free to PM me or hit me up on skype.

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Okay. You’ve clearly put a lot of thought into this, and some parts are very well explained. I am especially pleased with the culture section, as that’s probably the hardest to figure out.

Whilst I approve of innovation, and I do like how you have done something different…I don’t like it. Like your Logno race, you’ve taken an idea and fleshed it out a little, but there’s still some big problems. I can’t deny this because of my personal preferences, so instead I will work to ensure this meets the factory standards.

So with that in mind
  • Average height. This is very large, almost nine feet tall. Just bear that in mind and make sure that’s what you want.
  • Breathes. Just say ‘Type I’.
  • Force Control. I suppose I might be dim but I do not understand how this is supposed to work. How do they use the Force through music? Are all of them Force users? What is the purpose of the instruments, and how does it work?
  • Force Guidance. I don’t like this. They might believe the Force is a guide, but that doesn’t mean it is always correct. I’d change this to something less clear such as them having the ability to see visions through the Force – but that these visions are like Luke’s in that it’s hard to see context.
  • Mute. This has troubled me. Whilst possible for animals, I wonder if a sentient creature could evolve without any capacity to make noise at all, especially since it would be a serious disadvantage for them developmentally. I’ll let this be, though.
  • Races. Are these groups just differentiated based on the instruments they use? Might want to explain this here.
  • Culture. Good work here.
  • Technology. Explain how turning the instruments into weapons works. Some sort of sonic attack?
  • Behaviour. This seems a little one dimensional. Please expand this.
  • History. I like your flow of history, but the timelines are far, far too big. Consider that humans have existed for less than 50,000 years, been agrarian for less than 8,000 and been literate for less than 4,000. The timescales you mention are just not reasonable. I also mentioned this in the Logno submission as well. I would start your first entry at 100,000 years and drop down proportionally from there.
  • “The Empire promised power and strength for all eternity.” Doesn’t sound like the Empire, especially Palpatine’s Empire. Melody would have been occupied by force if they had come to Imperial attentions, especially as their power with the Force was dangerous.

Overall, fix these things and I will look again. Although I think this submission is pretty fringe, I’m not going to let my personal thoughts damn it.
 
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