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NAME: Neive Undant
FACTION: None yet.
RANK: Unknown.
SPECIES: Dathomiri Zabrak
AGE: 28
SEX: Male
HEIGHT: 5'11
WEIGHT: 178 lbs
EYES: Yellow
HAIR: none.
SKIN: black with yellow decals covering him.
FORCE SENSITIVE: yes.
 
Well, his biography is something he keeps to himself, and all that's known about him by any large faction is that he left Dathomir hours before it was destroyed by starkiller base(on a test of its ability.)
His appearance is my profile picture. If you want, I can send you a couple more, though. So, yeah. His personality, well, you'll have to find out in rp :p But I will say, He is ruthless. He is like an assassin. He can fight without remorse, but if possible he uses stealth to accomplish his tasks.
 
I think what [member="Tirdarius"] is getting at is that this profile is...extraordinarily slim. There's almost no information here whatsoever. No one who accesses this will be able to make a judgement on whether or not they actually want to write with this character. You might want to flesh it out.

Anyway. Good luck.
 
[member="NeiveUndant"]

I'm sorry to be blunt, but the vast majority of writers around here won't write with someone whose biography is a secret. That mostly sounds like "I can't be bothered to write it" or, and this is worse, "I want to be able to say I did something that I've never written about, and no biography means there's nothing to contradict".

Our character biographies have nothing to do with how we're going to write here on the board, and they're not there to 'reveal' our persona to anybody: we can't use what we see in the biography in our writing. I don't read it and instantly know the life history of someone my character has never even heard of before. The idea is to offer some insight into appearance, mannerisms, to provide a first impression. Who am I writing with? What kind of person are they? What kind of aspirations do they have for their character? Do they have a realistic sense of their strengths and weaknesses? Are they a mentally stable person, or utterly unhinged? Writers like to know these things.

More than that, though, you're missing out on the big one: an opportunity to tell a story before you even put pen to paper with any of us. Even a more detailed description of your appearance other than 'look at the image!' would help. At the moment, what we know of your character is his height, the fact that he's a Zabrak/Iridonian, and we know what his skin looks like. That's it. I don't know if he works out or is a complete slob. I couldn't tell you how he stands, how he walks, what he prefers to wear, whether he tends to be armed, what his range of facial expressions might be. There's a lot that you're missing out on.

Ultimately, first thing most of us do when seeing a new character is go read their profile. Gives us a sense of who we're talking to, what might ensue as a result, and whether you're actually going to be worth writing with. Most of us put a lot of time, effort and detail into our writing: it's a passion we do for ourselves, but also something we want to share with others. A person that can't be bothered to write a few paragraphs to clue us in to who we're writing with...won't be worth that effort. Why would anyone want to write with someone who's so stubbornly intent on revealing *nothing* about their character? Just says you're not here for the community, you're here for yourself.

That's the wrong attitude to have, friend.
 
Alright, I apologize [member="Tirdarius"] . I do have a bio for him but I'm not sure if it goes with the story of this site. On another site, the summary of his bio is that he was raised by the night brothers of dathomir, the planet was destroyed by what they say is the third death star(they don't include the first order in their story) and everyone he knew was destroyed as he left on a sail barge to coruscant. He killed the pilot and took the ship over, and while others were attacking guards, he opened the airlock and sent everyone in the ship but himself into space. He was taught to despise the jedi, and(this is where I'm staring his story) he saught out the sith order(or another version of it.)

If the story for this site is different, then I'll change his.
 
[member="NeiveUndant"]

What happened on another site isn't relevant here, friend. We only care about what your story is *here*. Dathomir is very much in one piece, and will remain so for the foreseeable future. Might want to amend your plans on that basis!
 

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