Approved NPC R2-F7

[Hopeman12]

Name: R2-F7
Loyalties: Jordun Darko, The Galactic Republic
Role: He is my Astro Droid sidekick
Development Threads: N/A
Age: 3 Years since creation
Species: R2 Droid
Force Sensitivity: No
Appearance: Red/Grey http://img4.wikia.nocookie.net/__cb20100325172611/starwars/images/e/e0/R2-A3.jpg
Image Source: http://starwars.wikia.com/wiki/R2-A3
Personality: Friendly towards people he knows, But cautious towards people he does not know. courageous but also reckless, R2 is also able to take some unnecessary Risks in battle.
Weapon of Choice: Mini Built In Blaster in hidden compartment
Wealth: N/A
Combat Function: Only attacks if he is the last option or Jordun needs help and is overwhelmed by enemies
Skills: Advanced Computer Hacking,
Notable Possessions:
Other Notes: The Jedi Order assigned R2 to Jordun when he first became a padawan a couple of years before.

Intent: Every Jedi needs a friend.

 

[Darth Pyrrhus]

Under review.

 

[Darth Pyrrhus]

[member="Young J Darko."]

Please use the full template for individual NPC creation. If there are elements you don’t feel necessary, please fill out those with N/A. Link to template provided here.

The image link you provided does not work. When you swap it out, remember to credit the source.

Apperance: Has a crude drawing of a D on its dome

In accordance to the board’s PG-13 rules, this will not do. I have to ask that you remove and replace this.

Weapons: Built in taser

The R2-series astromech droids have been known to use a variety of tools as weaponry. Does this mean that this unit will only use the taser? If you intend to use any other weapon, please include that into the submission.

Thanks.

 

[Hopeman12]

Changes Made, Please review

[member="Darth Pyrrhus"]

 

[Darth Pyrrhus]

[member="Jordun Darko."]

Great! Now with a few more edits, we should be in the clear.

Under “Weapon of Choice” you’ve mentioned a blaster, but you’ve put N/A under “Combat Function”. This is a contradiction. Could you please fill in this part of the template? In the event that the two of you come under attack, what is R2-F7’s role? How would it work alongside your character?

As an example: “R2-F7 is not intended for combat, and will generally try to avoid it. However if a fight becomes unavoidable, R2-F7 is capable of providing light fire support, and slicing through electronic defences.”


Now your image link works, but I would still like for you to include the source. Please include “Image Source:” to your template, and link the page you found the image on.

Personality: Friendly towards people he knows, courageous but also reckless

Could you expand on this? How is he towards people he don't know? What makes this particular astromech droid stand out from the rest? If you could elaborate on this with 2-3 sentences, that would be great.

Other Notes:

I would like to see you expand on R2-F7’s history here, to help flesh him out a little. How did R2-F7 end up in the care of Jorduun? Was he just assigned to your Jedi one day, or do they have a history together? If you could manage 2-3 sentences here, that would be great.

Attend to the aforementioned suggested edits, and this submission should be ready to go! Thanks.

 

[Hopeman12]

New changes made, Plz review

[member="Darth Pyrrhus"]

 

[Darth Pyrrhus]

[member="Jordun Darko."]

Approved, pending secondary.

[member="Valiens Nantaris"]

 

[Valiens Nantaris]

Approved.