Ryan Korr Feedback

[Tydeus of Tion]

So I have written him for about two years now, from padawan to Jedi Master. I don't feel like his story trajectory is floundering or going nowhere (like some of my other characters), but after reading some Limyaael I've been rethinking how I portray tragedy. Most of my heroes are intended to be byronic in nature, with the exception of, like, two.

https://curiosityquills.com/limyaael/angst-vs-tragedy/

What does the community think, for those who have interacted with him. Does he feel tragic and a bit forlorn/doomed, or just angsty?

Other feedback is also welcome.

 

[Ax'no]

You had me at Byronic.

But seriously I've never RPed with Ryan, but if he is as well written as your other characters, I'd like to.

 

[Seydon of Arda]

[member="Ryan Korr"]

He's been many things. There's been turns of idealism, embitterment, intensity, levity, compromise, integrity. The way Korr has struck me is that you can't straddle the fence with his character. Either you love him or despise him.

 

[Tydeus of Tion]

You had me at Byronic.

But seriously I've never RPed with Ryan, but if he is as well written as your other characters, I'd like to.

Aw, thanks.

[member="Ryan Korr"]

He's been many things. There's been turns of idealism, embitterment, intensity, levity, compromise, integrity. The way Korr has struck me is that you can't straddle the fence with his character. Either you love him or despise him.

Do you think that those variety of turns have made sense? That he is portrayed as a collection of contradictions... i.e. human? Or does it feel haphazard and not fitting with the context/setting?

 

[Seydon of Arda]

Do you think that those variety of turns have made sense? That he is portrayed as a collection of contradictions... i.e. human? Or does it feel haphazard and not fitting with the context/setting?

To the two former questions, yes. I know feedback isn't supposed to sound like it's a lot of masturbatory fan mail, but Ryan Korr makes for a good character. I get a feeling maybe he grew up with too many expectations and now his line of work is a constant letdown, in both circumstance and in the people surrounding him. I don't know if he's strictly Byronic, but that's just maybe subjective. I know you've taken pains in making him mortal.

 

[Tydeus of Tion]

I know feedback isn't supposed to sound like it's a lot of masturbatory fan mail

Yeah, I was waiting for a full broadside

Thanks though! Positive reinforcement is helpful. Just trying to gauge how I'm doing.

You also make a good point and I erred when I said "Byronic." I just wanted to sound literate. Less byronic and more of a:

http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/HeWhoFightsMonsters

 

[Mother Askani]

I agree with [member="Seydon of Arda"]

Not really criticism on my part, but I enjoy the consistency you maintain with Ryan. I haven't had much encounter with him other than through Shmi but even then his intensity as a character makes him stand out in a story, and I enjoy his straight forward approach...it's realistic. I'm curious to see what happens with him next

[member="Ryan Korr"]

 

[Ellie Mors]

Most of my heroes are intended to be byronic in nature,

What a coincidence. I was just reading an article about Byronic tropes in literature and I was thinking to myself, "Mikhail Shorn's writer certainly seems to fit the bill with a lot of his characters". Kind of pulled me in to respond after I saw it mentioned here.

I first saw him during the invasion of Kashyyk when I was writing Silara, and only saw bits and pieces of him here and there, but for what the character appears to be, to me, he is a strong Jedi figure that is both unique and similar to the standard Jedi.

 

[Seydon of Arda]

Yeah, I was waiting for a full broadside

Alright, you canary bastard.

He's poop. He's a tinsel little phallus, a broken erection. When they bury Korr, future anthropologists are going to be confused as to what they're looking at. I've seen holes in Swiss cheese with more personality than this mewling fool. He's like a paper mache version of Mitt Romney. The closest living inspiration we have for his character is that poor bastard you see trying to sleep on a park bench in a house made of news pages while pigeons relentlessly dive-bomb excrement onto his ancient 'Bad Religion' beanie.

...There you are. We got the contrarianism out of the way.

[member="Ryan Korr"]

 

[Tydeus of Tion]

Hahaha

Thanks for the feedback, everyone

 

[Darth Carnifex]

One of my fav Jedi characters

[member="Ryan Korr"]

 

[Dune Rhur]

I am of the camp that dislikes Ryan Korr, thought only in-character. Your writing brings out the bitter former idealist who has been hurt to a tee. You go far beyond the typical angsty Jedi that often gets written in an attempt to do what you almost always succeed at. In short, you have done what you've set out to with this character.