Approved NPC Thar Kmel

[Undin Jaii Kryze]

Name: Thar Kmel
Loyalties: Undin Jaii
Role: Undin Jaii's friend and pilot
Development Threads: http://starwarsrp.net/topic/91811-hunting-time-solo/ http://starwarsrp.net/topic/90053-a-sound-of-thunder-mandalorian-raid-of-ilum/page-7
Age: 25
Species: Rodian
Force Sensitivity: No
Appearance: He's a regular Rodian with red skin.
Personality: He's calm, a joker and superior
Weapon of Choice: No weapons.
Wealth: He earns enough to grant him a warm place and food on the table. He earns this money from repairing ships, and thus meaning he has to test them to see if they work.
Combat Function:
Pilot
+Pilot Ace: Since he works repairing ships and testing them for a living, he learned how to operate them. He's able to pilot a wide variety of ships.
-"Spicy" Problem: He's got a allergy to every known spice , including cinnamon, salt and sugar.
-Past? What past?: He remembers nothing about his past , family , nothing.
Skills: Piloting
Notable Possessions: A V-Wing
Other Notes: He unfortunatelly doen't remember anything about himself or his family. He only remembers his story from his 20th year, which is that he was hired by a fellow Rodian to test and fix ships on Coruscant. He is a natural with ships.

Intent: He's supposed to be my pilot/travel buddy.

 

[Gael bar Ammon]

Under review.

 

[Gael bar Ammon]

[member="Undin Jaii"]

Since Thar is to be your travel companion and pilot, please change his loyalty to your character.

Also, please take care of any formatting issues you have.

Once that's taken care of, you should be good to go.

 

[Undin Jaii Kryze]

[member="Gael bar Ammon"] Ok, I've changed his loyalty to Undin Jaii, and what formating issues?

 

[Gael bar Ammon]

[member="Undin Jaii"]

Wealth: Earns enough to survive, this money comes from his repairing and testing ships.
Combat Function: Piloting, that's his only strenght. Weaknesses: Known allergies include cinnamon, salt and pretty much every single spice existing. If he comes incontact with spices , he will start sneezing, his eyelids become purple and bigger, making it so he cannot see and he starts breathing weird.

Once this is tidied up I'll chalk you up to pending.

 

[Undin Jaii Kryze]

[member="Gael bar Ammon"] Ok, I've changed it a bit , is this better?

 

[Gael bar Ammon]

[member="Undin Jaii"]

Approved pending secondary.

[member="Lorelei Darke"]

 

[Quietus]

He's able to pilot any ship that's known in the galaxy.

Let's give ourselves some limitations here. There are literally thousands, potentially millions of ships in the known galaxy and it is quite impossible for a 25 year old NPC that's based out of Coruscant to know how to fly them all. I will settle for something along the lines of "he knows how to fly a wide variety of ships."

he learned how to functionate them

This word is used improperly in this sentence.


[member="Undin Jaii"]

 

[Undin Jaii Kryze]

[member="Lorelei Darke"]

I fixed the mistakes.

 

[Quietus]

[member="Undin Jaii"]

Very good. Approved.