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Approved Location The Bryn'adûl | Military Super-Construct

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The Bryn'adûl | Super-Construct
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OUT OF CHARACTER INFORMATION
  • Intent: To create the basis for Bryn'adûl Military Constructs that are built to occupy and defend planets.
  • Image Credit: X
  • Canon: N/A
  • Permissions: N/A
  • Links: [Embedded Throughout]
SETTING INFORMATION
  • Military Base Name: Bryn'adûl Super-Construct
  • Classification: Military Super-Construct
  • Locations:
- Edemar
- Caradim
- Ankhypt
- Lowick
- Kesh
- Eadu
- Formos
- Baros
- Targonn
- Garn
- Kubindi
- Kegan
- Glottal
  • Affiliation: The Bryn'adûl
  • Population: Heavy [Millions]
  • Demographics: 100% Draelvasier
  • Accessibility: The Super-Construct is the size of a massive continent, hard to miss however they are heavily defended. The deeper underground you go, the heavier the security is.
  • Description: The Super-Constructs are designed to encompass everything required for the Bryn'adûl forces located on the planet.
POINTS OF INTEREST
  • Cloning Facilities: Deep underground, bioorganic cloning facilities operate day & night to create new Draelvasier. Baedurin, Aeravalin and Sraelvun are all created in these cloning facilities. There are a total of twelve cloning facilities. Each generate a total of six-thousand Sraelvun per day.
  • Artificer Flight Bays: Home to Ra'maks, Errindak Fighters and many assortments of air-based combat vessels.
  • Sentinel Placement Craters: Dotting the several kilometre stretch of the Instillations outer defences, there are a total of twelve Sentinel Planetary cannons. These cannons are heavily fortified and protected by Errindak Fighters.
  • Beast Chambers: A large area of the underground facilities are separated containment facilities built to maintain and nurture many of the beasts typically kept at the Super-Construct.
  • Central Command Facility: The Central Command facility is located underground, and can control all security systems above and below ground. Additionally, can withhold defence controls from the Surface Command Centre.
  • Drael Tech Hivemind: A massive variant of the typical Force Imbued Stones used by the Bryn'adûl, this acts as a super-computer coordinator for all the various security measures and force-energised implements that run the Super City.
  • Barricas Terraformer: The Terraformer is burrowed deep under the Super-Construct, hibernating underneath and converting the territory to be suitable to Draelvasier biology.
  • Drone Barracks: Living areas and deployment zones from Drone Forces. These Drone barracks are directly connected to the Ra'mak's bays, allowing for Drones to quickly be deployed by Ra'maks.
  • Brute & Zealot Barracks: Living areas and deployment zones for Specialised Forces. The Brute and Zealot forces are linked to an Orkale deployment station, allowing for speedy delivery of various special forces across the Instillation.
  • Syphon Patrol Areas: Encircling the Super-Construct on various levels and layers of the facility are Syphons, their ability to cover great distances with their senses affords the Bryn'adûl an acute advantage of having almost no blind spots.
  • Secondary Command Facility: The secondary command facility is station above ground as a quick response failsafe, able to control various defence mechanisms and security systems pertaining to the outer defences and surface elements of the Bryn'adûl forces.
  • Shaman Temple: In the lower central area of the Surface Base, the Shaman temple stands as both a training area and a place of meditation and entrustment. This temple trains new beasts and Shamans, but its inhabitants can also provide battle meditation to those within the vicinity of the Super-Construct.
  • Errindak Shipyards: Home to the construction of vessels of all sizes.
  • Debaucher Bunkers: Deep within the upper levels of the Super-Constructs are the homes of the Bound Debauchers who serve as radars and technological defences. Each super-construct typically houses a few hundred of these.

SECURITY: Maximum




HISTORICAL INFORMATION
The Bryn'adûl set up
Military Installations on every planet they took, these Super-Constructs were upgrades upon the foundations set by the Installations. These Super-Constructs are designed to prepare for war, making use of the resources left-over by the destruction of the civilisations taken by the Bryn'adûl's genocidal efforts. The Super-Constructs ate massive undertakings, covering hundreds of miles of land, these would by scratch take years however only typically require months to build, as they use pre-fabricated outfits to create the Super-Constructs quickly.
 
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Zak Dymo

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I'll be doing this review for you. Like all your submissions, I love the thematic elements of this, but there are a few points that will need clarification before we move this on.

1. Location
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Location: Multiple Locations - Every Planet in Bryn'adûl Territory Unless Specified Otherwise

I'm afraid I'll need to ask you to be specific here. As per the template: Link the planet or other place upon which this location resides. I realize this may be a lengthy list, but please specify the planets and link them as appropriate. As your faction grows and expands, you can also do a Submission Modification to add additional locations later.

2. Demographics (Relevant Link):
Demographics: 100% Draelvasier

Not every reader will be familiar with the reference here, so I recommend dropping a link to the Draevasier here (it's a great sub and needs more link love).

3. Security
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There's a few things in this section. The linked Security Measures is currently listed as Factory Denied and will need to be moved out of the Factory Archives before it can be used in this submission. "Various Beasts & Infantry" is vague. You have a wealth of NPC units that are objectively beasts, in addition to a number of Species submissions. I'd ask you to expand on this. That need not be exhaustive, and could simply be "Various Beasts & Infantry, to include: X, X, X"

4. Historical Information:

I'll be honest, this is very minimal. I'd recommend expanding on this section. How did it come to be designed? How long does typical construction take? What is the anticipated lifespan of the structure? Does it require frequent upkeep? Can it hold supplies to be self-sufficient for weeks? months? years?

Those are my thoughts and I look forward to yours in reply. Please tag me when you have completed any edits.
 
Zak Dymo 1,2,3 & 5 are complete.

In regards to 4, I've included some of the things that'd be there. However regarding the Security Measures - that submission was put in the archives due to it being pulled out for edits following the Site Update earlier this year, and has been waiting in second chance since the 28th of March. Should be fine - but I'm willing to wait.
 
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