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Codex Denied Colonel Rackham | Politorate

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OUT OF CHARACTER INFORMATION
  • Intent: To create a Personal Aide for Marlon Sularen
  • Image Credit: Here
  • Role:
    • Sularen's Personal Aide
    • Colonel of the Politorate
  • Permissions: N/A
  • Links: N/A
PHYSICAL INFORMATION
  • Age: 38
  • Force Sensitivity: Non-Force User
  • Species: O'reenian [Near-Human]
  • Appearance:
    • Skin Color : Light
    • Hair Color : Brown
    • Height : 5'8
    • Usual Attire : Black Imperial Uniform
    • Rank Insignia :
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SOCIAL INFORMATION
COMBAT INFORMATION
  • Weapon of Choice:
  • Combat Function:
    • In Combat Situations , Rackham will not hesitate to enter the Battlefield
    • When engaging people in Close-Range he will make use of his Electrostaff
    • In most cases during shoot-outs Rackham will make use of his Rail Pistols.
Strengths:
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    Elusive Shadow | Is a very skilled Spymaster and has considerable skills in Manipulation , Intrigue and Secrecy
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    Famous Champion | Is an expert Sharpshooter and has considerable skill in Close-Range Combat
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    Skilled Tactician | Has over 2 Decades of Military Experience
Weaknesses:
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    Thrifty Clerk | Has Mediocre Stewardship Skills and would be unable to properly handle Civilian Administrative Duties
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    Naive Appeaser | Lacks any Considerable Skill in Diplomacy and would be unsuited for any sort of Diplomatic Role
HISTORICAL INFORMATION

Born on O'reen , Callius Rackham is a Near-Human O'reenian born to a High-Ranking O'reenian Military Official and a O'reenian Scientist. Following the footsteps of his father , Rackham quickly joined the ranks of the O'reenian Military at the age of 17 partaking in numerous raids conducted by the O'reenians and rising up through the ranks with the assistance of his Father. A few years after gaining citizenship on O'reen at the age of 25 , O'reen was visited by a group of Exiled Corellians and OSI [One Sith Intelligence] Officers.

This Group , was permitted to reside on O'reen although remaining under the tight supervision of a garrison led by Rackham himself. As time went by Rackham established a close relationship with the Group's Leader , Marlon Sularen and by 858 ABY , Sularen had established enough influence over Rackham (Now one of his closest friends) and his Unit managing to convince them to desert the O'reenian Star Corps and join Sularen in his plans to re-conquer Corellia.

When the Magnus of O'reen died causing a power-struggle on O'reen , Rackham and his Unit left the Planet along with Sularen and his band of Corellian and OSI Followers. Together they quickly formed the Directorate and grew in influence in the Core Worlds joining the Grayson Imperium and poised to conquer Corellia , until Cedric Grayson betrayed them leading to a downwards spiral that led to Sularen's Second Forced Exile. Rackham was never able to follow Suaren into his Second Exile as he was Captured by the High Republic before he could do so remaining in their Captivity for years even as the High Republic merged with the Core Alliance to form the Galactic Alliance.

However after 3 Years of Imprisonment , Sularen returned to the Core Worlds and arranged the liberation his Friend from Alliance Captivity through some of his assets. Eventually , Rackham came to serve Sularen once more this time being installed as a Colonel within Sularen's Clandestine Intelligence Agency known as the Politorate [Which by the way orchestrated Rackham's Liberation]. After Sularen's Third Exile from the Core Worlds , Rackham remained loyal to his friend following him to the Unknown Regions where he proceeded to join the Final Dawn under Marlon Sularen.

Now Colonel Rackham has essentially become a Personal Aide to Marlon Sularen , in charge of the Elite Paramilitary Force known as Shadow Company as well as providing assistance to the Grand Overseer as he makes preparations for the coming of the Final Dawn to the Core Worlds and the Subsequent Purification of the Core Worlds.


 
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Good submission so far! There are a couple of things we need to address.

No. 1. IMAGE CREDIT

When I click on the link for the image credit, the image you are using is not readily available and I don't know where to go digging on that website to find it. I will need you to find it, a different image source, or a new image altogether.​
You also use other images, little icons throughout your submission. I really love this idea, but you need to give an image credit for those also. If you cannot credit those they will have to be removed.​

No. 2. LOYALTIES

Is the Sularen Association a submitted organization? If so I will need you to link back to it please.​
Go ahead and give me a tag back when you are finished with these edits. It should be good to go once that is done!
 
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List of Notable Changes

  • OOC Information
  • Physical Information
  • Social Information
  • Combat Information
  • Strengths and Weaknesses
  • Historical Information
 
Weaknesses:
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    Thrifty Clerk | Has Mediocre Stewardship Skills
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    Naive Appeaser | Lacks any Considerable Skill in Diplomacy

These are not proper weaknesses, they do not affect RP or usage of the character. Please fix, this seems to be a common issue with your subs especially the ones before that. Make sure to read and ensure that you're putting proper weaknesses that balance the submission. As a note, the pre-codex is a great place to make a submission and get feedback from your peers.
 
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These are not proper weaknesses, they do not affect RP or usage of the character. Please fix, this seems to be a common issue with your subs especially the ones before that. Make sure to read and ensure that you're putting proper weaknesses that balance the submission. As a note, the pre-codex is a great place to make a submission and get feedback from your peers.

Would these Edits be sufficient?
 
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    Thrifty Clerk | Has Mediocre Stewardship Skills and would be unable to properly handle Civilian Administrative Duties
  • 24px-Trait_education_diplomacy_1.png
    Naive Appeaser | Lacks any Considerable Skill in Diplomacy and would be unsuited for any sort of Diplomatic Role

In essence these say the same thing and could be combined since they're both the same type of weakness. Please edit. Also add permissions for the images that you're using in the rest of the sub - they are images that do not belong to you and are from a copyrighted game. If you cannot find the source - remove from your submission asap.

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