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The Darkclaw

https://vignette.wikia.nocookie.net/starwarsrebels/images/a/ab/Ghost.png/revision/latest?cb=20150306172128

Intent: A personal ship for Darth Nyx

Image Source:
https://vignette.wikia.nocookie.net/starwarsrebels/images/a/ab/Ghost.png/revision/latest?cb=2015

Ghost from Star Wars: Rebels on Starwarsrebels.wika.com

Canon Link:
http://starwars.wikia.com/wiki/VCX-100_light_freighter

Restricted Missions: N/A

Primary Source:

http://starwars.wikia.com/wiki/Ghost

Manufacturer: Corellian Engineering Cooperation
Model: VCX-100 Light Freighter
Affiliation:
Open-marker

Production: Mass-produced
Material: Duralloy

TECHNICAL SPECIFICATIONS

Classification: Light Freighter

Length: 43.9 Meters
Width: 34.2 Meters
Height: 14.5 Meters

Armament: Low
Description of Armaments:
1 Dorsal Laser Cannon Turnent
1 Nose Laser Cannon Turent
1 Taim & Bak MS-2B twin laser cannon

Defenses: Average
Squadron Count: None
Maneuverability Rating: Average
Speed Rating: Moderate
Hyperdrive Class: 2


STANDARD FEATURES:
Hyperdrive
2 Main Engines
2 Secondary Engines
A small lab
2 rooms of 2 bunk beds
1 Dorsal Laser Cannon Turnent
1 Nose Laser Cannon Turent
1 Taim & Bak MS-2B twin laser cannon
Deflector Shield


ADVANCED SYSTEMS
N/A

Strengths:
Speedy
Quick to Jump into Hyperspace
Decent Storage


Weaknesses:
Low maneuverability

A hatch where the shuttle that comes standard with the ship which was sold by Darth Kyx and is now used to jetson. If hit, it can cause an air leak and if not patched quickly enough, can cause the ship to depressurize

Low armament
 

Progflaw99

Well-Known Member
Darth Kyx said:
Weaknesses: Low maneuverability
I would suggest also noting the low armament as a weakness of this vessel.

Aside from that, this looks quite jarring as far as the format. The template found here should be your go to - I have also included it in the spoiler below.

OUT OF CHARACTER INFORMATION

  • Intent: (Example: 'A personal weapon for Darth Scabious' or 'an advanced armored personnel carrier for the Republic')
  • Image Source: (Please link to where you found the image, or to the original artist if possible. TinEye or Google Image Search can help.)
  • Canon Link: (Please link the canon link if applicable canon item.)
  • Restricted Missions: (If your submission uses any Restricted Items link the threads you completed the missions in here)
  • Primary Source: (Please link and cite the sources which you are modifying for your use in your submission.)
PRODUCTION INFORMATION
  • Manufacturer: (Kuat Drive Yards, BlasTech Industries, [Insert Major Faction Name], [Insert Character Name], etc. You must link to any Company used as a manufacturer to their submission or canon article. For Manufacturing limitations on who can make what, please see For more details see the Star Ship rules)
  • Model: (Example: TIE (Twin Ion Engine). For submissions where a model wouldn’t be appropriate, such as a custom walking stick, put ‘N/A’ for ‘Not Applicable’.)
  • Affiliation: (Individual Character Name (an individual PC/NPC who is permitted to use this item), Company Name(s) (Companies authorised to use this submission), Faction Name(s) (Factions authorised to use this submission, Closed-Market (Any character can use this if they have explicit permission through, for example, a marketplace purchase), Open-Market (May be used by any character without permission from the Manufacturer), other potential options include a submitted NPC unit, or another general organisation/group. Optional. If you chose Limited, Semi-Unique, or Unique in Productivity above please list what groups/characters can use this submission in role-plays. For Affilation limitations on who can field what, please see For more details see the Star Ship rules)
  • Production: (The scale is Unique (Only One Character), Semi-Unique (Only A Handful of Characters), Limited (Only A Select Group Of NPCs/PCs), Minor (Any Character, Only Select Groups Of NPCs), Mass-Produced. (Anyone. For production limitations on who can make what, please see For more details see the Star Ship rules)))
  • Material: (What is your submission made out of? Certain materials are more resistant, or vulnerable, to certain weapons. Example: 'Durasteel.' See pre-requisites for: Restricted Materials. Link: Manufacturing Compounds, Metals, Compounds)
TECHNICAL SPECIFICATIONS
  • Classification: (Starfighter, Bomber, Scout, Atmospheric Fighter, Atmospheric Bomber, Atmospheric Scout, Gunship, Dropship, Interceptor.)
  • Length: (Via Metric System. Max: 50 meters. Examples: X-wing: 12.5 meters, Y-wing: 16 meters, Millenium Falcon: 34.7 meters, Slave I: 21.5 meters)
  • Width: (Via Metric System. Max: 50 meters. Examples: Y-wing: 2.9 meters, Millenium Falcon: 25.61 meters, Slave I: 21.3 meters)
  • Height: (Via Metric System. Max: 50 meters. Examples: Y-wing: 7.9 meters, Millenium Falcon: 8.27 meters, Slave I: 7.8 meters)
  • Armament: (You may provide your armament in list format and must provide your vessel an Armament Rating. (Choose from: None, Very Low, Low, Average, Moderate, High, Very High, Extreme. Armament Ratings are scaled in relation to the class of ship, meaning a Starfighter will not equate to a Destroyer. Armament Ratings provide only basic weaponry unless the ship also has a description of weapons. Please link to all Factory Submissions used. Links: Starship Weapons, Approved Technology)
  • Defenses: (You may provide your shield and armor systems in list format and must provide your vessel an Defense Rating. (Choose from: None, Very Low, Low, Average, Moderate, High, Very High, Extreme. Where None is a man in a space suit hanging on to an engine, Average is typical defense, and Extreme is heaviest defense with heavy armor plating and multiple layers of powerful shields. Defensive Ratings are scaled in relation to the type of ship, meaning a Starfighter will not equate to a Destroyer. You should list particular systems under advanced systems. Please link to all Factory Submissions used. Links: Approved Technology)
  • Squadron Count: (Please provide the amount of fighters this submission would have in a squadron. The average squadron for any starfighter is 12, at lengths averaging 12.5 meters. The bigger the fighter, the smaller your Squadron Count should be. The smaller the fighter, the bigger your Squadron count can be. [None: 1 | Very Low: 4 | Low: 8 | Average: 12 | Moderate: 16 | High: 20 | Very High: 24 | Extreme: 28] Squadron Sizes may be listed as just the rating.)
  • Maneuverability Rating: (Choose from: None, Very Low, Low, Average, Moderate, High, Very High, Extreme. How agile is your ship? Can it take tight turns? This is relative to the size of the vessel (e.g. a Corvette with Low Maneuverability will be more agile than a Star Destroyer with a Low rating.
  • Speed Rating: (Choose from: None, Very Low, Low, Average, Moderate, High, Very High, Extreme. How fast is your ship in normal space? How fast can it take off, how fast can it speed through a planet's atmosphere? This is relative to the size of the vessel (e.g. a Corvette with Low Speed will be quicker than a Star Destroyer with a Low Speed.
  • Hyperdrive Class: (The lower the number, the faster the ship. You may use decimals. [Very Slow: 10 | Average: 2 | Very Fast: 0.3] Going below 1 typically requires balancing out with other weaknesses. Links: Hyperdrive, Hyperdrive Comparisons)
STANDARD FEATURES
(Provide all of your submission's standard features, including non-combat items, here in a list. This includes all features that are common for vessels of this class. Please link to all Factory Submissions used. Links: Starship Weapons, Approved Technology, Shields, Engines)

ADVANCED SYSTEMS
(Provide all of your submission's advanced systems, including non-combat items and special weapons, here in a list. Please link to all Factory Submissions used. Stealth technology and other advanced systems may require other weaknesses or reduced ratings for balance. Ensure significant capabilities from systems are included in the Strengths and Weaknesses lists. Examples include: Stealth systems, Advanced ECM systems, Crystal gravfield traps, HIMS, Molecular shields. Links: Starship Weapons, Approved Technology, Shields, Engines)
Strengths:
  • (Provide, in list format, a minimum of 1 strength of this submission.)
Weaknesses:
  • (Provide, in list format, a minimum of 1 weaknesses of this submission.)
 

Progflaw99

Well-Known Member
[member="Darth Kyx"]

Yeah, it does look a bit better! Let me take another look and I'll tag you again once I've done another work through! Welcome to SWRP Chaos!
 

Progflaw99

Well-Known Member
Under Image Source: http://starwars.wikia.com/wiki/Ghost

Put this link, as it is the source, not a direct link to the image. To place an image in a post, you can do so by putting [ img ] [ /img ] on either side of the image link so long as it ends in .png for example - https://vignette.wikia.nocookie.net/starwarsrebels/images/a/ab/Ghost.png



Darth Kyx said:
Manufacturer: Corellian Engineering Cooperation

Please link to the manufacturer - to hyperlink, you will need to select the text you'd like to hyperlink, then paste the address of the Corellian Engineering Corporation into the pop up window.



Darth Kyx said:
Open-marker
Correct to "Open Market"
 

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