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Approved Starship The Fire Fox

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No image, ios. I am the artist/ designer. I have blueprints drawn but have no way of posting them

Affiliation: Sun Yun Charr

Manufacturer: Unknown Jedi Knight

Model: N/A

Modularity: Yes, but it is mostly modded out and because of its age shouldn't be modded again.

Production: unique

Materiel: Durasteel

Classification: Personal Freighter

Length: 45 meters

Width: 21 meters

Height: 15 meters

Armament: 10

Hanger: None

Special Features: Two manual turret pods, modified engines, modified power core, modified armor, 2 escape pods. Average life support, average shield generaters, average autopiloting system (no AI) communications arrey, advanced encryption network, holo net transceiver, single detention cell, navigation charts, sensor arrey, average tractor beams, airlock.

Maneuverability: 15

Speed: 2

Hyperdrive class: 2

Strength: heavy modified weapons and armor make this a good companion in a fight.

Weakenesses: Extra equipment makes it hard to maneuver.

Description: once used as a jedi's personal transporter and then used as the flagship in a planetary rebellion, the Fire Fox was abandoned after a skirmish at a Taris airfield. Although she doesn't look like much, years of mods and combat have left this ship victorious and scarred. The ramp leads you to a basement storage area and single turret pod which can be lower while in combat and raised when landing. The next floor consists of all personality rooms, escape pods, engine room, and training room. The top area has a turret pod, captains room, and bridge/ cockpit. A pretty average ship that has been tinkered with over the years.

Intent: A personal ship to bring me and friends around in

Hold: fits 10 people comfortably, and fits 75 metric tons in hold
 
Welcome to chaos! I love that your first act is to make your own ship, and I'd love to help you tinker away at this. I'm not able to devote as much attention as this deserves at this exact moment, but as soon as I get some time sit down with this submission, I'll drag up several example submissions for you to review and help nail down what theme and direction you want to take this in.

As it stands, the submission is well in line with current requirements, but I think you'd apreciate a bit of fine tuning before the we go ahead and approve this.
 
Ok. First off, here is a list of similar submissions to what you're trying to put together. I'm listing them from longest to shortest.

http://starwarsrp.net/topic/26315-turhaya-class-freighter/
http://starwarsrp.net/topic/50648-tl-2200-transport/
http://starwarsrp.net/topic/30896-okyaab-class-freighter/
http://starwarsrp.net/topic/33110-xs-light-freighter-lady-luck/
http://starwarsrp.net/topic/60230-xs-stock-light-freighter/
http://starwarsrp.net/topic/41663-at-120-freighter/
http://starwarsrp.net/topic/29534-calrissian-class-freighter/
http://starwarsrp.net/topic/50636-tl-2000-freighter/
http://starwarsrp.net/topic/30506-cyhraeth-class-light-freighter/
http://starwarsrp.net/topic/59717-corporeal-class-freighter/
http://starwarsrp.net/topic/54865-mxc-1150-light-freighter/
http://starwarsrp.net/topic/57388-personal-freighter/
http://starwarsrp.net/topic/52297-tlx-3000-light-freighter/
http://starwarsrp.net/topic/50871-yt-2000-tachyon-rising/

Now, hopefully these give you a good idea of what writers tend to put together around here, and I hope they give you some inspiration, though what you have now is absolutely fine. I just want to make sure you've had the opportunity to get more familiar with what else is out there first.



Sun Yun Charr said:
Length: about 70 meters

Width: about 40 meters

Height: about 20 meters

I need you to give me exact numbers for the Length, Width, and Height.


Sun Yun Charr said:
Description: once used as a jedi's personal transporter and then used as the flagship in a planetary rebellion, the Fire Fox was abandoned after a skirmish at a Taris airfield. Although she doesn't look like much, years of mods and combat have left this ship victorious and scarred.

Could you please expand the description a little bit beyond the history of the craft so that it tells a reader more about the technical details of the craft?





Sun Yun Charr said:
Affiliation: Personal
Manufacturer: N/A
Model: N/A
Modularity: No? I don't really know what this is asking.
Production: unique
Materiel: Durasteel
Classification: Personal Freighter

Did your character build this craft himself? If so, please list the Manufacturer as your character.
Affiliation is fine as Personal, though it could also list your character's name.

Modularity is asking if the base model can be customized in any "frequent" manner. Such as a model of starship having multiple weapon options to choose from.


Sun Yun Charr said:
Intent: after designing this ship on my own, I realized that to travel to planets to take part in roleplaying was some thing I needed to do. Because of my lack of ship, I need a ship of my own to travel the Galaxy with.

While we love it when writers feel like creating something special for themselves, I would like to take this opportunity to let you know that you are not required to use the Factory. If it is easier for you, or if it is your preference, you man simply "command" or "own" any canon ship that can be found on Wookieepeia that is under 400 meters long.

Additionally, if you so choose, you can instead browse the Marketplace for a submission created by another writer and post a purchase request in that thread. These purchases can be "past tense" if you would like, implying that your character purchased the design a number of months or years ago in character.
 
First of all, props on customer service. I would love to keep my ships design and I have upgraded the info you requested. I have tried to make the perfect shuttle without making it OP and hopefully you can soon approve it. If you have any more questions or things I need to change I will be happy to comply. Thanks.
 
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