The Karren Trask Feedback thread.

[RC 212]

I'm trying to write Karren as a struggling but stalwart Old timey Jedi Padawan getting more and more militarized the more encounters with the dark side she has. How am I doing?

What do you like about the character?

What do you not like?

What Can I improve?

Please answer all three. Thanks folks.

 

[Sky'ito Yumi]

I think your writing her well, though her story seems a little all over the place with the different thread you are in, though as for the moment, a Jedi who is not used to killing and is force, making her do stuff she regrets, from what I've seen when rping with you has been enlightening.

Sukai had a similar dilemma, though more in control over her dark though she still struggles with some interaction with the dark side.

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[Captain Ironbeard]

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I've only seen you in one thread, but I like it. You have good intentions, and don't want to hurt people, but will do shady things. Your character looks like they'll be good once they are played a bit more.

 

[Aryn Teth]

To me, Karren comes very much across as how I imagine Anakin was supposed to be in the movies, and I enjoy that about her - she's less of a 'Jedi' in terms of following the very strict doctrines, and more empathic and human with her interactions and desires.

So far I don't think I've seen too much of Karren to notice any major problems, perhaps at most, it would be more interesting to me as a spectator if she developed less of an idea of "Dark" and "Light" and more just "The Force" as a whole.

 

[RC 212]

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Thanks guys. She is eventually gonna go grey and militarise, becoming a full time fighter pilot.

Then on from there after that phase of her life is written out.