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Approved Starship The Speaker's Pawn

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Urail Gau

The Speaker
Urail Gau
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(Black instead of yellow)
OUT OF CHARACTER INFORMATION
PRODUCTION INFORMATION
TECHNICAL SPECIFICATIONS
  • Classification: Starfighter
  • Length: 14 meters
  • Width: 7 meters
  • Height: 2 meters
  • Armament: Average
  • Defenses: Low
  • Squadron Count: Average 12
  • Manoeuvrability Rating: Very High
  • Speed Rating: Very High
  • Hyperdrive: 0.1
STANDARD FEATURES
ADVANCED SYSTEMS
STRENGTHS
  • Hyperdrive
  • Speed/Manoeuvrability
WEAKNESSES
  • Weak Armour
  • EMP
DESCRIPTION
Urail's mother had gifted this fighter to him at the age of 17, at the time it was a run down N1 Starfighter, but it peeked his interest. His mothers side of the family had originated from Naboo, and their history always interested him. Every day he would make the time ot repair it and modify it to serve his own purpose. His father disapproved of the project, but did not object. Urail needed it to be a very fast ship in case anything happened in the future. It was the ship he used when going into exile, and the countless times he had come back to Eternal Empire space he had barely escaped. Now as a member of the Eternal Empire's mandalorians under a false name, he often wonders if he'll ever need to run again. He has had quite a lot of duplicates commissioned and stored off world in case of an emergency.

This ship excels against fighters, able to outmanoeuvre almost any opponent. It's weaponry also makes it quite good against larger starships. The ship doesn't require a droid, which was one of the modifications Urail had been, but a droid helped it run smoother should the need arise. There is a small compartment in the cockpit for the occasional items, but no real cargo space.
 
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Martin Draigo

GDI CEO
Martin Draigo
Character Bio
Urail Gau said:

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(Black instead of yellow)
OUT OF CHARACTER INFORMATION
  • Intent: To create a modified starfighter for my character
  • Image Source: 3D Model
  • Canon Link: N-1 starfighter
  • Permissions: N/A
  • Primary Source: N/A
PRODUCTION INFORMATION
TECHNICAL SPECIFICATIONS
  • Classification: Starfighter
  • Length: 14 meters
  • Width: 7 meters
  • Height: 2 meters
  • Armament: Average
  • Defenses: Average
  • Squadron Count: 12
  • Manoeuvrability Rating: Very High
  • Speed Rating: Very High
  • Hyperdrive: 0.1
STANDARD FEATURES
ADVANCED SYSTEMS
STRENGTHS
  • Hyperdrive
  • Speed/Manoeuvrability
WEAKNESSES
  • Weak Armour
  • EMP
DESCRIPTION
Urail's mother had gifted this fighter to him at the age of 17, at the time it was a run down N1 Starfighter, but it peeked his interest. His mothers side of the family had originated from Naboo, and their history always interested him. Every day he would make the time ot repair it and modify it to serve his own purpose. His father disapproved of the project, but did not object. Urail needed it to be a very fast ship in case anything happened in the future. It was the ship he used when going into exile, and the countless times he had come back to Eternal Empire space he had barely escaped. Now as a member of the Eternal Empire's mandalorians under a false name, he often wonders if he'll ever need to run again. He has had quite a lot of duplicates commissioned and stored off world in case of an emergency.

This ship excels against fighters, able to outmanoeuvre almost any opponent. It's weaponry also makes it quite good against larger starships. The ship doesn't require a droid, which was one of the modifications Urail had been, but a droid helped it run smoother should the need arise. There is a small compartment in the cockpit for the occasional items, but no real cargo space.
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Hello!

I always applaud when someone makes a unique submission for their character. Great effort overall, but there are a few items that require attention.

  • Technical Specifications:
    • Starship balance is over by (1) point. Please either increase to unique, or rebalance accordingly.
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    • Based on the 'small craft' table, your value of (12) corresponds with the 'average' rating, yet I do not see the average rating listed. Ratings need to be listed in all appropriate fields in order for the template to be compliant. Please add the 'average' rating/whatever new rating you decide to use in this field.
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  • Standard Features:
    • The FAE/S-05 ECM Array is listed as a ‘closed market’ item, and requires permissions to use. I do not see any permissions listed for this item within your writeup. Please acquire the permission of the creator of this item and post it either in picture format (I.E if you acquired permission for using this item via a pm or private chat in discord), or a link to a marketplace purchase under the ‘permissions’ section of the ‘Out of Character Information’ section in this template.
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  • Advanced Systems:
    • The Phase III “Force Avenger” Energy Field is listed as a ‘closed market’ item, and requires permissions to use. I do not see any permissions listed for this item within your writeup. Please acquire the permission of the creator of this item and post it either in picture format (I.E if you acquired permission for using this item via a pm or private chat in discord), or a link to a marketplace purchase under the ‘permissions’ section of the ‘Out of Character Information’ section in this template.
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    • The Ósýnilegt-class Cloaking Device is listed as a ‘closed market’ item, and requires permissions to use. I do not see any permissions listed for this item within your writeup. Please acquire the permission of the creator of this item and post it either in picture format (I.E if you acquired permission for using this item via a pm or private chat in discord), or a link to a marketplace purchase under the ‘permissions’ section of the ‘Out of Character Information’ section in this template.
 
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Urail Gau

The Speaker
Urail Gau
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Oh I apologise, something must've messed up, I added the permissions earlier. I'll make sure to fix that along with the other points. Now I don't believe I understand what you mean in the second point of technical specifications. Would you mind clarifying?

Martin Draigo Martin Draigo
 
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Martin Draigo

GDI CEO
Martin Draigo
Character Bio
Urail Gau said:
Oh I apologise, something must've messed up, I added the permissions earlier. I'll make sure to fix that along with the other points. Now I don't believe I understand what you mean in the second point of technical specifications. Would you mind clarifying?

Martin Draigo Martin Draigo
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Please see below screenshot from the small craft factory template:

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If you refer to your writeup, you have the value of "12" listed, but not the "average" rating.

Ratings always need to be listed.

Does this make sense?

Also, regarding the permissions links you've posted, it appears you've just linked the thread. To comply with the permissions requirement, it is best to link the exact post.

You can do so by clicking/tapping on the post number at the top right of the post you wish to link. Then copy the url.

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If using a mobile device, you just hold down over the post number and it will let you copy the url.

Please let me know when you've made all of the necessary changes. Thanks!
 
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Listib Hibin

One Eyed
Listib Hibin
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ACK! I found a PROBLEM! My bad to pull this back in but...it even fooled me.

When a submission is considered...Unique*, then you cannot have more than a squadron count of one, AKA None. That is...my bad again. I am sorry. It will give you three ratings buffs...which I had an idea instead.

If you wish for this to be the same, why not make the submission Semi-Unique to where more than one exists, like backups for you and anyone you bring along. If we go that route, I suggest downgrading Defenses to at least Low as you have stated it has weak armor.

Let me know what you want to do, again I am sorry.

Urail Gau Urail Gau Martin Draigo Martin Draigo
 
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