Factory Denied The Sun Saber

[Emerald]

• Intent: Create the sword that Emerald uses, as he's yet to have a Lightsaber.
• Image Source: Here
• Canon Link: N/A
• Permissions: N/A
• Primary Source: N/A

PRODUCTION INFORMATION

• Manufacturer Emerald
• Affiliation: Emerald
• Model: N/A
• Modularity: No
• Production: Unique
• Material: Brylark Bark Wroshyr Wood, Force Crystals.

TECHNICAL SPECIFICATIONS

• Classification: Sword
• Size: Average
• Weight: Heavy

SPECIAL FEATURES

• As good as metal.

STRENGTHS

• Well-rounded: It possess the quality of Sith Swords.
• Can Clash with lightsaber: Due to alchemy it can.
• Aura of Fear: The Sword produces an aura of fear via alchemization that allows it to essentially do a "Mind Trick" that makes people want to back away, to run, to cower in terror when the Sword is out. It really drains the Force Crystal to use this.
• Hard to Detect with Metal Sensors: Sensors that check for metals would be unable to detect the sword as it does not have any metal of any sort in it.
• Variable Blasts: He can send out cleaving shockwaves of varying power level out of it, including Stun, and blasts that could knock people through walls. He can even send out shockwaves that could kill. Really drains the Force Crystal to use this.
• Limited Application of Telekinesis: This has a limited application of telekinesis applied to it with Var'dul so that it can fly to the hand of the user should it be within their line of sight. Really drains the Force Crystal to use this.
• Ignite, My Blade: Via limited application of the Force Power of Pyrokinesis, the sword can ignite enough so it can slice through armored vault doors, through battle droids, and armor. This unfortunately uses all the charges in the Force Crystal up.
• Eruption: A 5 Foot Circle around him will glow. Fire will then erupt up from the circle, consuming anything stupid enough to be close. It completely exhausts the Force Crystal to use this.

WEAKNESSES

• No Crystals, No Blasts: Destroying the Force Crystals used to power the blasts would render the Staff unable to shoot blasts of Force Energy out of it in the slightest.
• Beacon of the Force: Due to the Force Powers the staff has, cloaking it's presence in the Force is impossible.
• Force Nullification: Force Nullification would render it an ordinary wooden sword with no powers.
• Each of the more powerful shots takes 10 Shots from the Crystal.
• Crystals must be specially alchemized for the sword.
• Will to Fight: The sword will only work as long as he has the will to fight. Break his will, and he can't use the sword until he regains it.
• Heavy: The sword is very heavy.
• Not a LIghtsaber: At the end of the day, this isn't a Lightsaber.

Ranged Features:

• Classification: Force Relic
• Size: Large
• Weight: Heavy
• Ammunition Type: Force Energy
• Ammunition Capacity: Very Small (10 Shots per Crystal)
• Effective Range: Long Range
• Rate of Fire: Very Low
• Damage Output: Very Low - Very High (Depends)
• Recoil: Very High

Description:

Before the Bryn'adul, a client approached him for a very specific commission when there were more than 150 of his species alive. The Veldorian who approached was a Paladin and wanted to go to war against the Jedi, and the Sith alike. To do this, he commissioned a sword from Emerald. A sword that he believed would have the power to fight the Jedi and Sith on their level, a sword that would embody the very concept of the sun. This sword was the masterpiece made by Emerald. However, the client died during the escape from their original homeworld. Ever since then, he carries the Sun Saber as a reminder to him that his creations need to be flawless.

This sword was made to channel the energies of the Force. It does so by drawing them through crystals. Unfortunately each can only house a limited amount.

 

[Krass Wyms]

Under Review

 

[Krass Wyms]

Emerald

Alright lets begin

Aura of Fear: The Sword produces an aura of fear via alchemization that allows it to essentially do a "Mind Trick" that makes people want to back away, to run, to cower in terror when the Sword is out. It really drains the Force Crystal to use this.

An aura of fear is more then just a mind trick it is generally a powerful sith spell. It would need to be maintained and a strain on the user.

Variable Blasts: He can send out cleaving shockwaves of varying power level out of it, including Stun, and blasts that could knock people through walls. He can even send out shockwaves that could kill. Really drains the Force Crystal to use this.

This is another powerful technique the blade can do and will be addressed in the overall section

Limited Application of Telekinesis: This has a limited application of telekinesis applied to it with Var'dul so that it can fly to the hand of the user should it be within their line of sight. Really drains the Force Crystal to use this.

The sword has the ability to use telekinesis (implying a sentience) or the user has to use it?

Ignite, My Blade: Via limited application of the Force Power of Pyrokinesis, the sword can ignite enough so it can slice through armored vault doors, through battle droids, and armor. This unfortunately uses all the charges in the Force Crystal up.

Not a LIghtsaber: At the end of the day, this isn't a Lightsaber.

You make a point in saying it is not a lightsaber but it has the ability to function with lightsaber qualities.

Eruption: A 5 Foot Circle around him will glow. Fire will then erupt up from the circle, consuming anything stupid enough to be close. It completely exhausts the Force Crystal to use this.

I force crystal if it was being used in such a way would likely shatter not just be exhausted as has been shown in canon.

Alright the midway point lets go with most of the immediate problems. You have force crystals being used like ammo clips with no real explanation of how. Assuming you had the steady enough supply of them, didn't shatter them and make them unstable in the use of all these abilities. You are running into the problem of darkside abilities didn't work well with kyber crystals and required corrupting the crystals through bleeding. The amount of sheer power on display here compared to he weaknesses and description does not match either.

Each of the more powerful shots takes 10 Shots from the Crystal.

Ammo count is not a weakness

Will to Fight: The sword will only work as long as he has the will to fight. Break his will, and he can't use the sword until he regains it.

This is a good example of a non-weakness. If you are fighting with this how often are you suddenly going to lose the will to fight?

Not a LIghtsaber: At the end of the day, this isn't a Lightsaber.

Ignite, My Blade: Via limited application of the Force Power of Pyrokinesis, the sword can ignite enough so it can slice through armored vault doors, through battle droids, and armor. This unfortunately uses all the charges in the Force Crystal up.

That you can turn the blade into a lightsaber potentially makes this a non-weakness.

Your description is a good example of history but doesn't explain anything about the blade itself. Such as how the crystals are made for it, how long that can take, how quickly they can be changed. How the blade came to be so variable in its enhancements with the force as you have things a shaper would do, sith magics and possible sentience to the sword itself.

Overall this blade is ambitious like many of your subs but needs substantial work put into it to get it to a basic level for function. Start be either pruning its abilities or for each strength 3 weaknesses will be required since you generally just add non-weaknesses to bloat it. Your description will need work to explain many of the aspects of the sword as well and while a word count is not required inthe factory for something like this it should be no less then 500 words for all of the things you have packed into this.

 

[Krass Wyms]

Emerald

What is the status of this submission?

 

[Emerald]

Krass Wyms Archive as I am in the process of redoing it completely.

 

[Krass Wyms]

as you wish