Feedback The Why Not Feedback Thread

[Aris Noble]

I love these things. Always have, always will, yada yada if you've read these from me before you know the drill. I make them usually at least once a month but I've been slacking more recently. Saw a couple thrown up, so, here we go.

How's my writing? How are my characters? What can I improve on? What should I just stop? Those kinds of things. I love me some compliments on my writing, but give me that deep feedback lore. If you're gonna post, all I ask is you do so with the intent to tell me at least that I suck at something I can work on. Good as it is, truly, I wanna keep improving and getting better with all of this. Not just to be better to write with, but in my own writing so I can start actually making my own books.

Novel idea, right?

Ok that's it let it rip.

 

[Azurine Varek]

Personally, I love Aris as a character! He's been a joy to build relationships with and see him and Azzie grow as characters over the course of multiple threads together! You as a player are absolutely wonderful to write with and I am so glad the characters get along so well to give me opportunities to do so!

I know you love some good constructive criticism, so I think the only thing I could say is that sometimes you ignore parts of posts that could have warranted some kind of acknowledgement, which would make the current narrative that much better if included. This doesn't happen a lot, and usually it's funny and doesn't bother me at all, but that's the only kind of criticism I could think to give at the moment XD

Even when you make shorter posts, it's usually enough for me to work with and has also given me the opportunity to practice in giving a bit shorter posts than my brain would usually like to do which has helped me out a lot.

Overall, great work and I can't wait to see what the future holds going forward!

(I rewrote the criticism there over and over trying to find the best way to describe what I was thinking in observation and eventually just settled on that. Sorry if it is poorly explained lol)

 

[Valery Noble]

My baby <3

Critique: he's taller than Valery now



if I have serious feedback, I'll post after sleep or on discord. Pls no kill.

 

[Connel Vanagor]

Aris greatest strength is just how aloof he is. He is a walking contradiction and that is in the best possible way. He is great in how you really have to be around him to really "get" him. It's actually quickly becoming one of my favorite reads just wondering how he will react to something.

The one criticism I have is that he could be a bit "one note". In that while it is fun to read, and there is depth to the character, I want to see him tell a few jokes here and there!(This was IF I had to choose SOMETHING)

Great work with him in such a short time.

 

[Delila Castillon]

My feedback in video form :

 

[Aris Noble]

My feedback in video form :

If you're gonna post, all I ask is you do so with the intent to tell me at least that I suck at something I can work on.