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[Vex Pendel]

Mmmmmm that sweet, sweet clickbait and tasty homemade meme. You took it - hook, line, and sinker. No trope subverting here. I think. At least not yet, which is where you come in. That's the easy trick. Lmao

http://starwarsrp.net/topic/96507-vex-pendel/

In all seriousness, I need opinions and critiques of my character. Things to change, things to take away, things to add, how much you hate that clickbait title, whatever you want. Suggestions, constructive criticism, criticism, non-constructive criticism, all of it.

I've got a couple of ideas for directions I want to go with him later down the line, but of course my first choice is to just see where RPing takes me.

Thanks ahead of time.

Threads:
http://starwarsrp.net/topic/96647-a-dance-in-the-meadows-shii-cho-training-private/#entry1402893
http://starwarsrp.net/topic/95346-always-use-protection-force-barrier-training-open/
http://starwarsrp.net/topic/96863-which-of-the-seven-shall-we-learn-today/

 

[Ryn'Dhal]

I'd recommend padding your post count more with some neat threads, and toss some links for the lazy to peruse at their leisure to build their critiques for you.

Just some advice to stir up some substantial critiques.

Take it out leave it my friend. If I get more time later, I might dig up some of your threads to build up a real critique for you.

 

[Vustia]

Wow!
After taking this advice I achieved all my goals instantly!

 

[Darth Carnifex]

#TheWurst

 

[Vex Pendel]

[member="Ryn'Dhal"]

Thanks, added some links. I don't really think I'll be able to get many critiques until I'm a lot farther down the line with my character, but I figured I'd try anyway. I'll probably just keep reading it myself and adding things as I think of them and self-critique as much as possible.

[member="Vustia"]

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[member="Darth Carnifex"]

13.37/13.37 would get critiqued from again