Glow Knight
I just realized I hit 1000 posts, and since my last feedback was back in May, I wanted to throw this in for some input.
So, many neat things have occurred with Zaiya since that last feedback, and I wanted to get some ideas, musings, and the like on what would make my writing better and what may also be neat for Zaiya.
I aged her up a few years now, so she is sixteen, and roleplaying that she has a lot of catching up the past few years to catch up with not only her Jedi Training, but also her University studies that she is now taking as holocourses.
She has been steadily progressing her use of the Force, with the aspect of Sense being the primary aspect she has a better handle on -- sensing the Force, Life, emotions, how the Force flows, and how it feels when people specifically use the Force based off the alignment they use. She struggles with control and alter, and because she is a teenager with all the angst, she can swing easily from one emotion to the next - while broadcasting it as a holo billboard on her face in all glowing extremes - and I can see how this could potentially end up have her treading the line with the Darkside if she can't learn to not only reign in her emotions, but learn how to settle herself as the Force continues to progress and open her empathic abilities with others. I can def see it turn sideways for her as this past invasion with how the Phobis Device really shook her, especially with dealing with
Kasir Dorran
and
Srina Talon
and it made her doubt her own self as much as emphasize just how much she feels lonely without her social bonds.
I can see this going several ways, depending on how she works through this internally and with others, especially depending on what IC interactions she ends up having in other public threads and invasions. Being a teen means things can go sideways at any time, and I can see how it can potentially swing to a more darker version or perhaps, mature to a better way of controlling herself. Or trying to suppress it all a la Vulcan style which could be its own drama sense as well.
She was just accepted as
Iris Arani
's padawan after
Shan Pavond
went to medical school, so that is a super neat storyline that I'm excited for, especially since Iris can see the Force in colors and uses that to apply it outward. Plus, her relationships with her friends, especially Aris, Mahsa, Ayhan, and others have been super important, and certainly would love to have even more friendships or relationships bloom. She really does look up to
Lossa Aureus
and
Corazona von Ascania
and other older Knights who just seem to have it all together, but really are going through their own ups and downs.
I'd love any other ideas that one may believe would be good for Zaiya, or any neat paths with the Force that one believes may work well for her as well! Not too sure on what sort of lightsaber fighting style may work for her, or if it will be a lightsaber at all. For now, she is just average in basic forms, but it certainly isn't her greatest skillset. She's more of a support role Jedi than one who jolts forward into the action -- but then again, who knows what IC shenanigans may change that!
So, many neat things have occurred with Zaiya since that last feedback, and I wanted to get some ideas, musings, and the like on what would make my writing better and what may also be neat for Zaiya.
I aged her up a few years now, so she is sixteen, and roleplaying that she has a lot of catching up the past few years to catch up with not only her Jedi Training, but also her University studies that she is now taking as holocourses.
She has been steadily progressing her use of the Force, with the aspect of Sense being the primary aspect she has a better handle on -- sensing the Force, Life, emotions, how the Force flows, and how it feels when people specifically use the Force based off the alignment they use. She struggles with control and alter, and because she is a teenager with all the angst, she can swing easily from one emotion to the next - while broadcasting it as a holo billboard on her face in all glowing extremes - and I can see how this could potentially end up have her treading the line with the Darkside if she can't learn to not only reign in her emotions, but learn how to settle herself as the Force continues to progress and open her empathic abilities with others. I can def see it turn sideways for her as this past invasion with how the Phobis Device really shook her, especially with dealing with
Kasir Dorran
and
Srina Talon
and it made her doubt her own self as much as emphasize just how much she feels lonely without her social bonds.I can see this going several ways, depending on how she works through this internally and with others, especially depending on what IC interactions she ends up having in other public threads and invasions. Being a teen means things can go sideways at any time, and I can see how it can potentially swing to a more darker version or perhaps, mature to a better way of controlling herself. Or trying to suppress it all a la Vulcan style which could be its own drama sense as well.
She was just accepted as
Iris Arani
's padawan after
Shan Pavond
went to medical school, so that is a super neat storyline that I'm excited for, especially since Iris can see the Force in colors and uses that to apply it outward. Plus, her relationships with her friends, especially Aris, Mahsa, Ayhan, and others have been super important, and certainly would love to have even more friendships or relationships bloom. She really does look up to
Lossa Aureus
and
Corazona von Ascania
and other older Knights who just seem to have it all together, but really are going through their own ups and downs.I'd love any other ideas that one may believe would be good for Zaiya, or any neat paths with the Force that one believes may work well for her as well! Not too sure on what sort of lightsaber fighting style may work for her, or if it will be a lightsaber at all. For now, she is just average in basic forms, but it certainly isn't her greatest skillset. She's more of a support role Jedi than one who jolts forward into the action -- but then again, who knows what IC shenanigans may change that!
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