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Dorriun Vakel

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OUT OF CHARACTER INFORMATION

GENERAL INFORMATION

  • Fleet Name: Imperial Navy

  • Classification: Defense fleet 

  • Affiliation: Grayson Imperium

  • Fleet Symbol: N/A

  • Description: The remains of a once large professional navy, now reduced to a moderate fleet. Despite the reduction in size, the fleet maintains a high degree of professionalism, demanded of them by their leaders.

SOCIALINFORMATION

  • Headquarters: Coruscant

  • Ports of Call: Grayson Imperium territories 

  • Goals: Maintain the Imperial Remnant and provide defense while the faction goes into hiding and grows

  • Reputation: At one point was a feared military power, now just a moderate band of ships, hidden away

COMPOSITIONINFORMATION

  • Fleet Size: Medium/large

  • Lead Ship: SD Ravager 

  • Composition

MEMBERS

Shran, Dorriun Vakel, Cedric Grayson

 

HISTORICAL INFORMATION

The ships within the fleet were once part of the main fleet of the Imperial Federation. They served as the backbone of the Imperial navy for years up until the collapse of the federation. Many of them have patrolled the galaxy and defended the Federation from her enemies. After a catastrophic event, that to this day remains a mystery, leadership of the Core Imperial Confederation went missing. The only remaining cabinet member was Defense Minister Shran, who assumed the position of acting Chancellor and took command of the fleet. With the financial backing of Dorriun Vakel, a wealthy aristocrat who agreed only to help Shran if he would pledge his loyalty to Vakel and allow him to declare himself emperor. Deciding to keep his existence a secret for the time being, Vakel remainied in the shadows, allowing Shran to rally whatever forces that were still loyal to the Empire as other groups began to break off in their own attempts to seize power.

 

 

Edited by Dorriun Vakel, 10 November 2019 - 01:05 PM.


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John Locke

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Dorriun Vakel

 

It's great to see fleet subs, it really gives you a chance to build up the history and a record of your fleet that can make RP that much more fun. There are a few points I want to go through with you first before I can moce this submission on to approval.

 

1) Image Credit

 

Image Credit: https://i.ytimg.com/...xresdefault.jpg

 

The link you have provided takes me directly to the image itself, not to the source of the image which is what is required as per codex rules. A quick google reverse image search brought me to this page, which appears to be the original source of the image. If you could please update your submission to include the link I've provided instead.

 

2) Affiliation

 

Affiliation: Imperial Remnant

 

Could you please provide a link to the faction?

 

3) Description

 

Description: The remains of a once large professional navy, now reduced to a moderate fleet.

 

You mention the fleet was one a large professional navy. Are they still professional, or as they've gotten smaller have standards slipped as well? A little more details will really help other people writing with or against the fleet to know what they're dealing with.

 

4) Headquarters

 

Headquarters: Currently in orbit of unspecified planet in Unknown Regions

 

 

Cound you please specify the planet that the fleet is based around? I undertand that for the RP of the faction you want to keep that unknown, but as far as the codex submission goes, the template, which I have copied below, does ask for the planet to be linked if possible.

 

[ Where is this fleet based? Link to either the planet or location if applicable. ]

 

5) Fleet Size 

 

Fleet Size: Medium/large

 

In the description you state that the fleet was one a large professional navy that has been reduced to a moderate size, but here you are saying it's a medium to large fleet. Could you plese clarify which of the two descriptions is correct and only select one size here for clarity? 

 

It is also important to point out here, as per Chaos rules only Major Factions have the resources to field a large army or navy. 

 

6) Fleet Composition

 

Resurgent Class Star Destroyer Imperial Class Star Destroyers

 

This is a small thing, just for the convieniece of any other writers could you please link the ships to their wookiepedia links? However, as per chaos rules, a Minor faction may only field ships larger than 1000m if they are PC captained, as per the table below. Both the Star Destroyers you have chosen as part of your fleet are too large to the fielded without a PC captain. 

 

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Also, as per the template the Fleet composition is 'A sample of the ships in this fleet. This is an example of what may be seen,' so instead of just linking cruisers, could you link to some specific cruisers and to specific frigates and fighters. The idea is that anyone reading the submission, or indeed you yourself, would have a reference so that the ships being faced in any battle are known.

 

7) Members

 

Shran”, ”Dorriun Vakel”

 

Could you please provide a link to both character profiles? 

 

8) Historical Information

 

This section is very bare bones, while I can approve the submission with this as it is, I would recommend that you expand upon the fleet here. Why did it shrink in size, what happened ot the other ships, why are they on their current course and why did they choose to follow the Imperial Remnant instead of another minor faction or setting up by themselves. 

 

Please tag me back when you've had a chance to read through my comments and make any changes you wish to.


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Dorriun Vakel

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John Locke I made several of the changes that you have requested. That being said, I really didn't do much with the size of the fleet. Overall I was thinking it would be probably around 70 ships in total (Not including things like TIE fighters)

I don't remember where I saw it but somewhere in the lore rules, I seem to remember reading something along the lines of "Keep in mind, a large fleet for a minor faction is not going to be the same thing as a large fleet for a major faction." and that was my rationale when filling that part out. I don't intend for this to be a "small" fleet in terms of what a minor faction is allowed to have. Obviously it won't be as big as a major faction fleet.

In terms of captains, the ships would have PC captains, at least any time they were in use.



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John Locke

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Dorriun Vakel

 

Thank you for making those changes,, but there are still a few outstanding points which I have listed below.

 

1) Incomplete Description

 

Description: The remains of a once large professional navy, now reduced to a moderate fleet. Despite the reduction in size, the

 

It appears that you started writing something here but then didn't complete the sentence. If you could please finish off the sentence.

 

2) Star Destroyer links

 

Resurgent Class Star Destroyer Imperial Class Star Destroyers

 

If you could please provide the wookie links to these star destroyers.

 

3) Frigate link

 

Frigates

 

Although you did provide a link, for the frigates, could you please replace it with a link to the wookie page.


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Dorriun Vakel

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Updated John Locke



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Dorriun Vakel

 

This submission is now ready to be approved, however as per your corresponding factory submission, would you like me to approve this or archive it?


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Dorriun Vakel

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John Locke I'd still like this approved. Just note that the affiliation has been changed fro Imperial Remnant to Grayson Imperium. and the faction owner for Grayson Imperium has been added to the list of players who have access to use this fleet. Also the headquarters has been changed from Unknown Regions to Coruscant



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Dorriun Vakel

 

That's fine, if you could please provide a link to Coruscant's wookie page.


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Dorriun Vakel

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John Locke Updated



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Dorriun Vakel

 

Thank you for making those adjustments. 

 

APPROVED


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