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[Laphisto]

well here we are, i have been told by Diarch Rellik he has been expecting this so here i am lol, based on everything iv read up on from other feedbacks I would be curious to see what people think of Laphisto as a character so far. while he has spent most of his time in warfare i am curious what those who have heard about him or even spoken to him might feel or view the old soul

or what would people want to see more of laphisto?

some of my proudest threads are as follows

Recently my intro to the SO/DIA junction

the first time he almost died after waking from his carbonite nap

a mercenary Contract for the EOTL against TAC - my first PVP action

a meeting with an anti mandalorian jedi

fate under the twin suns

The return home

while there are more out there that i truly enjoyed these are the ones that stick out to me the most- at least to be shared i also cant find others and am to lazy to dig through and find them lol

 

[Diarch Rellik]

I can say without a doubt the reason I was so excited for the feedback post is due to the recent time I have spent with Laphisto. OOC and IC you are a great person. In regard to IC - overlaid deep story from his birth, mandalorian culture, personality and the way he has found his place in the galaxy with THOUSANDS of posts that show these things, has created someone who is intrinsically interesting to read up on.

You have pushed to create a REAL person with a deep story. Laphisto in the events that I have personally written with him has showed complex character traits. Missing his family and home, fighting for people big and small, business ventures, diplomatic ventures, Leading naval battles, Land battles, finding family and love in new places that previously I don't think he would have.

Your strive and ability to work with others to help their stories, while building your own has been a good inspiration to myself and fun to read. You can see in the way the Lilaste order members work with you OOC that Laphistos characteristics and leadership transfer to who you are as a person.

10/10

Cant wait to continue our stories together!

Me want more Laphisto poisoned by the peace pipe stories xD jk.

 

[Vazela]

I thought it was pretty cool when you infected The Quest with a virus, and when Maldor initially believed that you were the one who started the attack, that you didn't go off on a tangent OOC or try to get CubanWriter to change his post. A lot of writers, for various reasons, would have asked for a "correction" in those circumstances. Everyone who understood the story and the events which led up to the subsequent battle over Bastion understood that Laphisto wasn't the one responsible for beginning the battle. But some would have made an effort to make sure that their character wasn't implicated or held responsible.

Rolling with the punches and taking things as they come is a great thing to have as a roleplayer which made for tension when Laphisto later met with Maldor after the Sartinaynian Crisis had concluded. Keep that because it's an important part of having fun in this game.

 

[Zara Saga]

I've only recently started writing with you, so my opinion is just a small portion of that 2,500. But I do adore Laphisto. I think he is such a cool and unique character that we don't see much around here. It feels like you have the character very well pinned down at this point which makes writing with him even better.

This recent arc about returning to his home world and discovering everything about his species past, has me on the edge of my seat, ready for the next post from you. OOC you are great and deserve all the flowers you get. You make amazing subs and are such a good dude, the Diarchy is lucky to have you around.

If I could offer some suggestions for what I would think would be interesting going forward:

-Show the struggle of leadership, especially when it comes to differing opinions with Lilaste and the Diarchy. That kind of internal battle could be fun to read.

-Laphisto breaking out of his warrior shell would be a fun read.

-Maybe an arc where he is disillusioned with what he has been teaching with the Lilaste Order?

Just a few suggestions, not sure if you have hit them or not yet. But you are great, keep up the fantastic work, it's been a joy to be apart of even a small fraction of that post count.

10/10

 

[Diarch Reign]

Oh boy where can I start. Other than Diarch Rellik himself and maybe a couple other people, I think you were one of the first threads I did. I really enjoy Laphisto's humor I think out of everything. You've done a wonderful job portraying a being that has seen the worst that galaxy has to offer, time and time again. And he continues to rise above it.

I really enjoy the friendship that He and Reign have, with the running joke of "Why is it whenever I'm with you, I'm getting shot at"

The way you are able to feed off of and coordinate with anyone you write with is awesome and it speaks to the versatility of Laph's character.

For anything I would like to see in the future?

I want to see laph at more parties, see him cut loose a little.

I mirror Zara's post as well with maybe some internal conflict on whether all this war is worth it, perhaps coming to a heated exchange with Reign and Rellik over the best path forward.

Long and short of it, I love Laph

 

[Kaila Irons]

idk if there's a term for this but a lot of writers add dramatic effect to descriptions by correcting the description like "He wasn't X but Y", especially in GMing. Once or twice is cool but several in one post becomes hard to read as it changes the flow and artificially boosts the amount of words without actually adding much more information. It's fluff, which again is okay in small amounts but becomes tedious after a point

Otherwise I like what you're doing in the current junction for example, the selective time warp is an interesting puzzle that'll keep lots of characters on their toes

 

[Laphisto]

idk if there's a term for this but a lot of writers add dramatic effect to descriptions by correcting the description like "He wasn't X but Y", especially in GMing. Once or twice is cool but several in one post becomes hard to read as it changes the flow and artificially boosts the amount of words without actually adding much more information. It's fluff, which again is okay in small amounts but becomes tedious after a point

Otherwise I like what you're doing in the current junction for example, the selective time warp is an interesting puzzle that'll keep lots of characters on their toes

re reading the GM post i can see what you mean ill definatly need to work on that for future posts

 

[Imperius Indomitus]

Hey Laphisto ,

Aside from one thread, we haven't really written together yet. It was really cool and it was smooth as anything to coordinate with you as enemy. Definitely a highly appreciated trait.

But what I really wanna share ... I have seen your coming to the site and your writing at the beginning and I see your writing now. You have grown so much in that time, your posts have become so much refined and developed, the background and lore you created so much more detailed. You have been consistently telling your story and expanded on it, found your way forward. It is inspiring and encouraging.

Keep it up and I hope there will be plenty of opportunity to write together.