avolus 2

[The_dark_dream]

[member="Anja Aj'Rou"][member="Anja Aj'Rou"]

i just chANGED both of the points you requested up earlier today. (sorry for capatalization, keyboards on last legs)

 

[Boethiah]

[member="Sakon Xarabia"]

The terrain bit is still too vague, and you haven't done the spacing on culture, technology, and history. It's also all still bold.

 

[The_dark_dream]

[member="Anja Aj'Rou"] it wont let me change the font at this point. I put the spaces in on tghe stuff but i dont see how else i can discribe the terrain from hear on. I added a bit more but it may look like im trying to hard

 

[Boethiah]

[member="Sakon Xarabia"]

Will you allow me to do it for you? Also is this a bug you're encountering, or is this related to your keyboard troubles?

 

[The_dark_dream]

[member="Anja Aj'Rou"][member="Anja Aj'Rou"]

If you wanna change the font be my guest lol and i think its a bug. Theres another one that seems to prevent me saving work (another rreason this and my species has took so long.) at times ill try and save and it seems like it did but turns out it saved none of my edits. so it ends up where i can only to bits at a time or it wont save

 

[Boethiah]

Please report all bugs here.

I fixed the formatting issues for you. If you've copied from Google Docs or Microsoft Word, this will happen from time-to-time... But I'd still report the bug just incase I'm wrong or there are other possibilities; it's never a bad idea.

Also, after reading through again, I don't see any references to the Netherworld event.

[member="Sakon Xarabia"]

 

[The_dark_dream]

[member="Anja Aj'Rou"]


must have been one of the things that didnt save because i had made refrences, ill start reworking it

 

[Valiens Nantaris]

[member="Sakon Xarabia"]
What is the status of this submission?

 

[The_dark_dream]

[member="Valiens Nantaris"] almost finished, jusdt need to add the neatherlands event in. Keyboard keeps jacking up so its taking longer then i would have liked it to

 

[Valiens Nantaris]

[member="Sakon Xarabia"]
Might I suggest a new $10 keyboard?

Tag [member="Anja Aj'Rou"] when you are ready.

 

[The_dark_dream]

[member="Valiens Nantaris"] unfortunatly where i like 30 is the cheapest keyboard and living check to check kinda sorta sucks lol. i am trying to get one though, mines on its last legs. only works when it wants

 

[The_dark_dream]

[member="Anja Aj'Rou"] I think im finished now. Sorry if it seems kinda vague and guessed but i wasnt a memeber here during the neather world events

 

[Boethiah]

Netherworld event: The neatherworld event seldemly effected this planet. Being as it was so out of the way and ispolated not many ships ventured there. The inhabitants of the planet hid themselves under the water, remaining neutral during the event of the war. Many don't really know about Nether world event as the planet rarley sees anything outside of its atmasphere

The event resulted in the disappearance of nearly half the galactic population. You could've asked, although the link should've explained that. Make that quick edit and I'll stamp this.

 

[Boethiah]

[member="Sakon Xarabia"]

This submission is going to be archived in 48 hours if the requested edits are not met.

 

[The_dark_dream]

[member="Anja Aj'Rou"] sorry for the dissaperince, lifes not very kind to me at times. how did they dissapear though?

 

[The_dark_dream]

[member="Anja Aj'Rou"] i tried fixing it up more. its still kinda vague to me but i did what i could

 

[Boethiah]

[member="Sakon Xarabia"]

With all due respect, why is it vague? The timeline article I linked explains it quite well--a bunch of people disappear and the galaxy is thrown into chaos. You got the latter part down, but you really haven't mentioned anything about disappearances.

Also, there are a few typos in the added bit that need fixing. I really cannot approve this submission until it's fixed.

 

[The_dark_dream]

[member="Anja Aj'Rou"] like how they are dissapearing. is it an invasion type thing from planet to planet or is it that people vanished suddenly without a trace or something else. so i know how to word it. It tells about the war and stuff but i guess im having trouble finding how they were dissapearing. (im a bad reader, its a hard thing to do at times)

 

[Boethiah]

[member="Sakon Xarabia"]

A large portion of the galaxy disappeared instantly, not over a prolonged period of time.

 

[The_dark_dream]

[member="Anja Aj'Rou"] alright i tried adding it in. hopfully this works, working on typos