Feedback Help me improve

[Briana Sal-Soren]

As I ease back into writing on Chaos, I thought I'd open a feedback thread for Briana, her character, and my writing as a whole to try and come back stronger. It's been a while since I've done one of these, so I'd love to hear your thoughts—both positive and constructive.

How does Briana come across? Is she consistent in her personality, decisions, and development? Does her dialogue feel natural? How well do her motivations and emotions come through? Is my writing engaging, and does it flow smoothly? Are there any areas where my storytelling could improve? Anything glaring that I can change/work on? What kind of arc would you like to see with her character as she continues?

Any and all feedback is welcome!

 

[Connel Vanagor]

Two words: Taco Tuesday


Kidding.

Granted I haven't watched much between "Daraland" old CIS and RNR but she has always been consistent. Maybe add the aspect of her Knighthood becoming an issue for her.

I say this as a comment you made on Discord "Just a Knight"?

 

[Caelan Valoren]

I can't really comment on anything I think you need to change. Briana is a great character and you're a fantastic writer and I think you should continue doing what you enjoy because you're good at it.

 

[WelshPsych]

I don't think I can offer any critiques on the writing and dialogue, all that jazz is super subjective and I think you nail what your character is and what they can do. I have enjoyed our threads and character interactions when we have them. Also think your writing is so much better than my own.

Only thing I will mention is that we really don't write enough together which is a big shame and understand the reasons why. Just would love to be in more threads together!

 

[Lysander von Ascania]

From the handful of interactions between Lysander and Briana, I've always found them to be fun and easy to write! Between the Bratawan showdown, the Sabacc game, and their trip to Ukatis, it's been cool to learn more about Master Bri ^^. Your posts are always well-written, and honestly, I can't think of any critique. Btw I appreciate everything you do for RNR! Also looking forward to seeing you become more active again! Since your character is a lightsaber combat enthusiast/duelist, it'd be cool to see more of her own training, whether in Djem So or other Force abilities, to showcase another side of the character!